Gil Andrews

Fog of Redemption is an epic story of three people lives that take a dramatic twist as the entire would in plunged into nuclear war.

Chapter 3 It had been a long day at work for Allen. As he drove home, he thought about how nice a long hot bath would feel. It had been two day since Gil had left, and Allen was starting to get worried. Gil often had to leave for days at a time, but be he usually called everyday that he was away. Something about this time felt different. There were things going on the Allen didn’t understand, though he tried with all his might to do so. Allen wished that he knew what Gil did when

Fog of Redemption Chapter 2 “Gilthas Tentrious, otherwise knows as Sylvantrius, please step forward,” spoke an elderly man dressed in deep purple robes. “You are called forth to this council on the grounds that you have broken the Code of Silence. These are grave charges and, if proven guilty, will result in the excommunication from The Order of the Light. Do you understand these charges?” “Yes High Magnus.” “How then, do you plea?” “I am not guilty of breaking

Fog of Redemption Chapter 1 He could barely think over the din of the screams. People ran in every direction, trying to escape from the destruction, looking for missing loved one, or trying to figure out what was going on. Everywhere he looked there was death and mayhem. Giving into the urge to bolt in a panicky run, he took off for the town square. As he was running he pasted a young child screaming for her mother. Pity took his heart and he slowed down to help the girl. As h

Here's my submission... can't decide if I likes it or hates it. lol I might make another.

Thanks. It's Wednesday, and I see I have my answer. See ya'll Friday!

Since chapter 27 was posted on Sunday, does that void out the Wednesday post? Not that I mind waiting till Friday for the next installment. It's a fight between wanting the next installment and not wanting the story to end.

Awesome as usual. I'm really glad to see the new book up and running. Urban Fantasies are a real favorite of mine. I was a bit shocked to see the new evil that was eluded to in the last chapter of Growing Pains, seemingly stamped out in the first chapter. Like everyone else, I don't think we've the last of it. One interesting note that I was very happy to read was that Worthington wants to work primarily with the magical world rather than the mundane world. I guess a part of me wishes that could be the case with me too. hahaha

Thanks Steph!

Here's my submission.

Very interesting article indeed. I have to say that I don't think his theory is a sound one though. If I understand the theory correctly, it basically says that you can use gravity to "pull" time back around it's self to create a loop. This possible because time is relevant to the speed in which you are traveling. For example: Travel through space for 50 years going the speed on light and return to earth. You will find that it has been far longer that 50 year since you left but in reality, millions of years. This would actually be time travel in it's self, but to the future. So what this guy is saying is we take gravity and slow it down. I personally can't think of anything source of gravity that would be strong enough to slow down time. The strongest gravitational pull in the universe comes from the super black holes that are in the center of every galaxy. Gravity so strong that it sucks in light. Who knows what they do to time. My point here is: if you use gravity strong enough to bend time, like a black hole, how do you contain it? How do you keep it from crushing you into oblivian. This truly would be a project for the the future when we understand the cosmos better than we do now. Dan's idea seems more likely. Make a bubble out side space and time, and transmit data. Or travel faster than the speed light. Same idea as the gravity expect you go forward so far you end up looping back around. To bad faster than light travel is thought to be impossible. Seems like and easier route to take.

Sorry took so long to post... been busy today. Read the new Chapter last night before bed and as always, it was great. Dan dropped enough hints for a few of us to pick up on, but it's always good to have confirmation of ones theories. Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!

Excellent chapter. It's got me thinking. I comment more later after a few more post are up. Don't want to spoil anything for someone who hasn't read yet.

I have to disagree. I don't think it's just his mother's side. I think his father had it (Whatever IT is), as well as the lawyer Mr. Smythe, and Stacy. When Worthington sat on her lap he felt a tingling. I'll bet anything she was either delving to "feel" the extent of his sun burn and scratches or healing them in some fashion. This is story is listed as a modern/urban fantasy and I seem to recall a blog by Dan mentioning a story he was working on that involved magick of some fashion. Anyone else thinking along these lines?

I think there is a lot going on in this story that we haven't been told yet. Dan is excellent in hiding things in plain site. There is all the obvious stuff that have been mention in the above posts, but there is something else completely that I am curious about. His Aunt says something about him being raised with a different code of ethics and stresses that he will not use his abilities to compel people into doing things they wouldn't normally do. He(Worthington) seemed to have missed the meaning behind this but I didn't. I think this family has some kind of extra sensory perception thing going on. There were clues all over in this chapter. I think Worthington can feel peoples emotions, read their minds and project his will onto other people. In fact, I think the whole family can. It kind of reminds me of the movie, The Covenant. Old money, inherited power, family secrets so deep the make the grand canyon look like a regular hole in the ground. Still though, this is the first chapter, and I might be reading way to much into things. We'll see how it all plays out.

Graeme, Wow. This is exactly what I was hoping for. My goal here, is to become a better writer. I'll take all the constructive comments you want to throw my way. (That goes for everyone else too) The double spacing I can take care off. I'm still learning the ropes for forums and e-fiction on this site. I have been reading here for a while now and thought it was high time to contribute. I can code the text in HTML format. I totally understand where you are coming from on the dialogue. It's something that I struggle with. I speak very formal myself, rarely using contractions. Mostly, it's because when I was learning to talk, my mother was taking english courses in college. She was always correcting the things that came out of my mouth. My brothers and sister are just as bad. Believe me, the first write was a lot worse. Thank-you for telling me though, it means that I have to work a little but harder as I rewrite. As I mentioned before, I am still pretty new to this. I didn't feel right asking for an editor having just joined and only having three chapters of a story up. I have not even applied for author status yet. You are absolutely correct. I do need one. Gil's suggesting that Allen should see a shrink is part of his "cover-up". Even though Gil knows what is causing the dreams, he can not let Allen know the truth. The last few lines of that chapter give this away. '"I'm sorry my love," he said. "It

Hello everybody! This is place to talk about my work so far. Please be honest and frank. Someday I'd like to be a published author, so good feedback now is important. They only thing I ask is that you tell me why you feel the way you do. That way I can better adapt to the readers. Fog of Redemption

Never fear, I am very patient. Dan, your worth it. I have been reading your work for a long time. Your seriously a very talented writer, up there with my favorites. (Robert Jordan, Melanie Rawn, Terry Goodkind, Anne McCaffrey) You had me hooked with Mists of Fate (or is it called the wreckers now?) I guess I should have been a little clearer, by speculate, I didn't mean when the next book comes out, but rather speculate on what;s going to happen in the book. I know there have been a few hints dropped here and there, so I thought others might want to expound on those.

WOW!! Awesome. Way to go GA. I'm just starting out on the threads here, but I hope to commit many more posts of my own in the years to come. To all of you who have been posting and making this place as great as it is, Keep on rockin!

This is indeed the strangest question I have been asked today. I have to agree that it would be incest. Sleeping with anyone that shares your families genetics can only be that, be it clone or otherwise. Would it be weird for two half brother/cousin clone people to have sex? Personally not to me. If it were a girl/boy situation, I would find that weird. I know it sounds kinda contradictory on my part but two boys or two girls are not going to produce off spring that will be uhhhh defective(?). So yeah, incest. Totally.

I found the site through nifty. I was reading Savage Moon by Comie and found the site here though The Shack Out Back. Since then I can't seem to tear myself away! There is a lot of talent here.

I think confidence plays a very large part in an author's ability to write. Natural talent will only take a person so far no matter what they are trying to do. There are some awesome stories out there that are muddled because the author is thinking to much on how the reader will respond to their work. Of course if your writing you should be thinking about the reader, but not to the point the wording becomes bombastic or underdeveloped. You have to have faith that your plot is a good one and that readers will respond to it. When you doubt that faith, that's when writing gets lost in translation. Either because your trying to hard, or not enough.

I have to agree with everyone else so far that unrealistic sex between teenagers is a bit of a tern off as far as a story goes. I respect a writers choice to go that route but, I generally don't read beyond a few chapters. In fact, my encounter with teenage sex was with Comie's Savage Moon. I was blown away with his story. At first I felt guilty for reading. Like I was doing something wrong. I just could help myself though and kept on. I found Savage Moon through Nifty, and after a while found myself at the gay authors web site. From there I read Gone from Darkness. Couldn't take my eyes off the screen. Then I started reading other authors hosted on the site, and I found that a lot of the stories DO involve teenage sex. Most are very realistic, and not taken to an extreme. Needless to say my guilty feelings quickly faded.

The first book rocked. Everything a far flung futuristic story should be. I hope the next installment starts soon because I can hardly wait. Any one care to speculate?

I just have to say, this series is totally awesome. Dan, your such a talented writer. Personally, I hope this series never dies. I don't think I could ever get bored with the adventures of Davey and Brian. Please keep it coming.