Novelty

No, this thead isn't intended to give him ideas. It's more for the readers to express hope as to what major events, etc. that they'd like to see mentioned in the story.

Courthouse? You're assuming that they even get there And I'd be surprised if the package is opened by Chapter 12. At the rate it's going, it'd be like chapter 21

Thanks Trebs. See, very confusing NOT to have that in a coherent story form.

Do what I do, go read DOR... or better still, go read RoH Chapter 2, which I just posted.

It's not here since I've been told that it shouldn't be, but it's at where it's supposed to be.

Firstly thanks to everyone who convinced Dan to get his own forum. Muchos gracias! Hopefully, people can let their hair down and discuss more and more freely there. The blog was good and all, but it was getting a bit messy with 3 or 4 different topics being discussed in the same comments section. Hopefully, the new forums will enable Dan's fans to grow, pun intended, in more ways than one. Two plugs to make: Dan has created a map of the "Eureka Air Force" base - it can be viewed by clicking on the link in the Do Over Redux page. Go read it if you haven't. Also, the regular Danaholic chats have been extended to every day of the week now. It goes from 10pm PST to about 3am PST (except release days, which goes till about 8am PST, after Myr wakes up and posts the chapter). It's a MSN chat, so if you wanna join in the fun, please let me know. First off, I must say Dan's descriptive narration has grown leaps and bounds since I first started talking about it in my earliest Do Over Reviews. It's nice to see an author taking feedback so much to heart, and improving himself in the process. Let's see... I'm going to change the format slightly... Argentinian development: Liked that rather much. Although I wonder if Dan is preparing for Reagan to send in troops to Argentina vis a vis Nicaragua. It would be intesting to see how this subplot develops. Uncle Billy: I like the entire interaction there. What's more interesting is that the passages highlight Dan's thinking process, which got superimposed onto Davey. How can I pass off the office as being Dad's? Well, honest is the best policy, as Dan seems to favour in real life and here's just a case of fiction imitating real life. Uncle Billy was good as it allowed us to observe the interactions between him and the Jones family. His presence gives a breath of fresh air to the entire situation. Jenny: She got a bit of development in this story too, and it's not all horse related. We now know she uses the gym equipment in the basement among other things. Mom: It may sound weird to me, but that's how I have always pictured Davey's mom - the argument in the last chapter wasn't too much of a surprise, what is surprising though is the way she's learnt to cope with it in this chapter. She comes off as being intelligent this time around, yet still maintains her "motherly" fashion. I love her portrayal here in this story. Life in rural Nevada: It's interesting to see how things develop for the Jones in rural Nevada. A burn barrel... now that's one thing I've never seen, although I have knowledge as to why they are used. They were rather common just before I was born and I have heard real life stories about them, but to see that they were still in use in the 80s in rural Nevada is gratifying in a way. Batman phones: I have no idea whose idea was it to have lights connected to the phone. The technology was available in the 80s, as I do remember Linda Boyle on Sesame Street demostrating in back then as well. I wonder what Dan was watching to write that into the story though. It gives the story a rather bizzare touch, but it works. Tammy: Hmm... well, I guess it's much easier "blending in with the crowd" by having a girlfriend. Well, I wonder if that will come back and bite Davey in the ass. 2004 kidnapping of Sean and Brandon: Urgh, Dan is teasing me again. See, that's why I want a story set around that time, but nooooo... we aren't getting one. Well, I got Dan to start his forum... I guess I just have to try harder to get him to write about that time period as well. Still though, one has to wonder why Sean and Brandon was kidnapped in 2004... and who were the "they" that did it. Russian: What no actual russian in the passage? The transalations make it easier to read, although the single word "What?" could have been in russian just for effect. Minor nitpick, but I like that entire scene. Codewords: Sandcastle was explained in the blog. It's also started a new craze among Danaholics to greet each other via MSN with "Sandcastle, sandcastle". One has to wonder though what's the significance of a "Caremel Sundae". David Wells: I really do pity poor David though. 2 years later and he still has a huge crush on Davey. I wonder if that will go anywhere. I liked this chapter overall. The writing was good and I enjoyed it immensely. There was only one sentence that I took notice that sounded weird; "was wanting" just didnt' fit the sentence there where a "wanted" would have been better, but that's just me. I did mention in Dan's blog that there were two things that I took as if they were specifically directed at me in this chapter. The first was the section in the Argentine war about the two submarines. I had complained to Dan a while back that he was using US submarines too sparingly, and Dan chose in this chapter to use not only two submarines, but two of the most famous nuclear ones. That made my day. I'll end this review with my favourite sentence of the chapter:

Why do you think that Danny?

Not really a "gay" story as per se, but it's a Sci-Fi with homosexual elements, the e-published "Earthbound" series of books by DM Arnold is always a good read. Here's a link. http://www.virtualimprint.com/earthbound/about.htm Also, to read (for free) books online by big name publishers (Mercedes Lackey, Larry Niven, etc.) try the Baen Free Library.

Before anyone gets confused, that's the real life Brian and not the one in the stories.

(This was going to be a PM, but then I decided there might be others who wanted an answer to this as well, so it ended up being a forum post. Feel free to delete this and answer via PM, Myr, if you don't want it cluttering up this forum). One quick question: What's the difference between all the groups? OK, so some are functional (Moderators, Administrator), but what about the rest? The groups are: Site Administrator Administrator Moderator/Author Hosted Author Published Author Advanced Author Editor Author Newbie Author Members Newbies Validating

Wait, is that Brian now still married, or is he divorced?

*pokes head into GhostRyder's forums* Hello all, for those of you who don't know me, I'm Novelty, a Danaholic and according to some, I'm Dan's #1 fan. I do reviews for Dan's Do Over Redux, which has a heavy military theme as well, and generally have a blast making fun of Dan. No, I'm not here to do reviews, or make fun of GR. I recently offered to help GR edit KK since his regular editor was away and stuff. Anyways, KK #44 was edited and sent back to him about a week ago. KK#45 is with me for editing, and hopefully I'll get that done before the week is out. When will GR post them? That's up to him though. Don't ask me for spoilers, or if you can get the chapters early, because it's not mine to give, but feel free to ask any other questions that you might have about editing KK, if you are curious enough to want an answer

OK, now that we have the map link on the page, could I ask Myr to put up links to a photo album of sorts? Dan has a multitude of pictures in his blog which IMO really should have a page that contains all of them with captions and what not (in addition to being in his blog of course). Having it all in one place might make it easier searching for those photos. Please think about it Dan.

Doesn't matter if you haven't read his stuff. Feel free to haunt this board and to add your voice to the discussion here. The more the merrier

Heh, great way to encourage discussion... not! *shrug* Point taken. Dan doesn't want us discussion my reviews...

Dan has always liked the drop hints about the issues of the day. It was interesting to read about the Betamax vs VHS debate a few chapters ago. Of course, 10 years later, Betamax would be dead and VHS would rule... until DVDs came along that is... Anyways, it's now 1984. What are you hoping to see mentioned in the story from that year? As for me, it'd be interesting to see if Davey will become a fan of Michael Jackson's Thriller

I find it curious that nobody (except Dan) disagrees with my reviews either privately or publicly. Does that mean everyone is usually in agreement with the reveiws then? Index of the Reviews: Chapter 4 Chapter 5 Chapter 6 Chapter 7 Chapters 8 & 9 Chapters 10 & 11 Chapter 12 Chapters 13 & 14 Chapter 15 Chapter 16 Chapter 17 Chapter 18 Chapter 19 Chapter 20 Chapter 21 Chapter 22 Chapter 23 Chapter 24

I've been getting complaints from the regular Danaholics that Davey's mom's being a bitch. Well, she might be a bit hard on Davey, but personally, I don't think she IS being bitchy, she's just being a mom. What she's doing seems to fit rather well to her character. I'm surprised to see she hasn't taken up drinking yet, nor has that been mentioned significantly which is good. Overally, Dan has been trying to improve Davey's family situation this time around and I think he's succeeding. So what if Sandy is having huge confrontation with Davey every once in a while? That's just normal and part of family life IMO. Feel free to disagree with me though...

Dan, loved the map. That must have taken ages to draw. Very very good job (and that's something you won't hear much from me!).

I'm so glad we don't have to get 100 more yes votes than no votes... But Dan likes his clothes to be ripped off and to be bent over and... uh... oh, you're not talking about that are you

Heh, you should stop stroking Dan as well, Julian. Besides, he tends to write some of the worst stuff after his ego has been inflated too much.

Hey Ben, sorry to hear about that. This world is messed up and bad things happen. We always hope it'll never happen to us, but sometimes we just can't avoid it. It's always good to talk - don't bottle up whatever you're feeling inside. I hope you're coping with everything.

Since I'm not a Domaholic, but a Danaholic, let's do the comparisons, shall we? *shrug* I do it to Dan all the time. Only enforces the bond between author and reader So is Dan, so is Dan... Heh, too late, the rest of the Danaholics are already against me, thanks to Dan. They still haven't forgiven me for not giving them Chapter 15 early when I got it early. Heh, definately not true when I pick on Dan Don't you realise he's in competition with everyone? Such is Dan. Cut off from where? I hope you aren't talking about circumcision Hmm... I'm beginning to wonder why I don't pick on Dan more

Admit it, you secretly have a crush on Dan