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An interesting way of writing! A basic story line with outtakes for the side players! I like the story line, but the outtakes tend to slow it down. I won't complain!🫠
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I hope you had a wall for diagrams and maps of the characters and plot line for this series of stories! I'm not sure I could even plot them now even having read them within the last 3 to 4 weeks.
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I Agee this was one of the better chapters. I am not sure that boring and plot development have to be synonymous. Not being a writer and somewhat dyslexic, story development is not my strength, but the more boring and the less boring can be melded . On to the next chapter!
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I am not a writer, but it is interesting to read the author's plan for the next chapter.😏
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So far a good story-line! It meshes with the last book also!
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A lot of background from the first book! MOST helpful! Not sure if you want comments this much time after the book.
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You're a good enough writer that telling your readers about the number of narrators is a waste.
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Good start! I guess I will be reading the whole series! Thanks!
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Chapter 13: THE ART OF THE DEPARTURE
jaclp commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 13: THE ART OF THE DEPARTURE
The epilog was a great set-up for the next book. I liked this one better than the last. It seemed to flow better, but then I am not a writer! Good entertainment! -
Chapter 7: THE ART OF BREAKING
jaclp commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 7: THE ART OF BREAKING
I hate bipolar disorders. They are so difficult to treat. You have people who know everything is perfect or everything is broken beyond fixing! 😒 -
Chapter 7: THE ART OF BREAKING
jaclp commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 7: THE ART OF BREAKING
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Chapter 4: THE BOY IN THE BIOLAB
jaclp commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 4: THE BOY IN THE BIOLAB
I HAVE found manic depression one of the hardest diseases to treat. It was a constant battle because the circumstances could always change 180 degrees. Circumstances frequently bore little to do with the circumstances, and people frequently had no feel for the turns! -
Can't say I have read a sci-fi plot quite like this one so congratulations . The addition of the relationship between the main characters also adds some fun
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Good character development. Mira stays on the sidelines.
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Ya! It would shorten things a whole lot
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I am fairly new to this site and apologize for not adding a comment earlier. I kept hitting liked, but didn't see any changes till I scrolled through the comments. I like the story as well as the main character. There's apparently a long way to go in the story. Thanks,
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Understood! I don't write. My is a technical/ physical calling, but I can understand how unhappy reviews can effect your passion. In any case good recovery!
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It has been a good series though the first 1/3 of the second book didn't seem flowing as the rest. I will probably be buying the rest.
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This was too easy!
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I can feel the final conflict getting closer
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Good read! Well put together! Some sex, but not overl y focused! I like Scifi and this fulfills a good story line.
