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  1. Indeed: "and when was fiunding not?". It's a real pain in the ass, but increasingly the one thing that keeps "culture" afloat is, precisely, buttering up to those who have the money, whilst not caring whether they have "taste" or not...And, actually, was it ever not so? Did the Gonzaga, paying for the staging of the first performance of what came to be known as "opera", like music, or simply wanted to impresss their colleague-princelings?
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    Chapter 21

    Alas, there's no M/M version of these old Hollywood Noir/Comedies...πŸ˜ƒ
  3. Even if/when we know what "happened", it does 't matter (anymore). We know - have known from the first chapter, really... .- that Lynton and Alexander are "best friends". Actually, though weve been led to believe otherwise in this tale, we always knew that L knew Brad was (has been) a crush, only. Indeed, a physical crush, only, rather than a really emotional/intellectual one.
  4. I disagree: " warm longing" is incompatible with "straight" friendship.
  5. External, read, also eternal ...
  6. It seems Cane has a ' practical' solution to the three-togetherness. I'm all for it. But will it work? How long can B and J hit the road? And, underlying: will they, eventually forced to actually live together, be able to "love" on an equal footing - the external problem of to share of not to share (aka as jealousy, insecurity et cetera) in a poly-amourous context.
  7. Decision should be: delusion. I hate these typing devices.
  8. One might argue that both J and S are right in their analysis, but neither will help create a situation that allows three men - specifically these three men, in this part of the USofA - to actually share a real life, rather than a fairy tale-one in some sort of "happy end"/"they lived happily ever after"-fashion. If the author, after the splendid job he did with this story, yet opts for one, he does himself short, or so I feel...If not, the promise suggested in this chapter is, for all three if them, a decision. Does that mean that - Miss Daisy's wisdom and wishes notwithstanding - this is a tragedy after all?
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    Chapter 18

    Ah, but the proof of the pudding... Many such thesis-statements I've read and decided: balderdash... But of simply using a button make's you happy, I'll consider using itπŸ˜ƒ
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    Chapter 18

    Ah, recommendations: you don't really need them. Or do you? Kenny frantically taking notes? Of what? Blake W hasn't said anything note-worthy yet. And Kenny cannot at the same time be hatching plots with the boy G. Moreover: BW doesn't know about Steve's money-laundering enterprises. Or does he? But please go on. Though I dare you to actually share with us the 3000-word paper, because I simply don't believe I'll accept its "thesis"...
  11. Iverson's, of course. Thus, RH creates his gay-verse...πŸ˜ƒ
  12. peter rietbergen

    Chapter 8

    Another impressive chapter, with several significant moments. Thank you.
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    Chapter 16

    It seems you had as much of an "Education" as you gave him. But, obviously, it was worth it. Yet I hope the bear didn't temain your son's partner: it might have been a tad too difficult to treat him as Jake's Bfr, while he might also have been your friend: a mix too complicated emotionally? And yes, some parents can, and indeed do neglect their children. But usually not if they love them, as your fictional ones clearly do their fictional son...
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    Chapter 16

    Delightful though this all is, I do not believe any mother would accept that her son lives in a stinking, germ-infested, unhealthy pig-sty.
  15. An interesting premise. Definitely readable, too. But yet a few things seem less than likely. First, for any kind of "conspiracy" to succeed, surely conspirators think up a common narrative to convince the world. These two seem to have been more than a little naive not preparing a convincing background tale. Secondly, on arrival at the resort, any person with even a modicum of manners would have introduced his new companion before starting conversations with the rest of the group. Thirdly, since the "Cruel Father" needs to be won over, it would have made sense to actually introduce the Fake Boyfriend to him. And last but not least: why does the Mother even accept a Queen Bee to dominate the scene? In short, the story could be more believable than it is, now.
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