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    Chapter 3

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 3

    A very cleverly constructed chapter that marks a profound change of feeling and being in both B and Riley. Obviously, B will not be able to put back the lid on the Pandora box he opened when he took up with Riley.
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    Chapter 1

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 1

    Ah, what a relief. And I'll curb my impatience.
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    Chapter 1

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 1

    I now officially hate you. On temporary hold? No, no, no.
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    Chapter 1

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 1

    Still fascinating. And, yrs, a pleasure to read. But yet: would a Council Estate kid recognize The Waste Land? Or have the educated vocabulary to acknowledge and describe, in an interior monologue, the post-modern, posh peculiarities of Ben's house?
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    Prologue

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Prologue

    This is excellent indeed. And promising, too.
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    Chapter 5

    peter rietbergen commented on andy cannon's story chapter in Chapter 5

    Well done. But though I see the narrative necessity for the two last paragraphs - the small moral bankruptcy and the larger one - I yet feel that if the purse were handed to the servant girl, or her parents/guardians, or, even better, entrusted to a parish priest for the bastard child's upbringing, it would yet serve its purpose...
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    Chapter Three

    peter rietbergen commented on andy cannon's story chapter in Chapter Three

    It is unlikely any of the " parties" involved will adhere to this nonsense. I asume that M will convince Lauretta that she has other options....
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    Perhaps the Nimrod will be decidedly underwhelming. Which would be perfect, for it (only) served as the foundation for a thoroughly delightful story
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    Almost there...??? In this conundrum that exceeds all conundrums? You must be a relationship magician.
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    I didn' know what to expect. I do know it exceeds any expectations I might have had. Excellent.
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    Chapter 1

    peter rietbergen commented on andy cannon's story chapter in Chapter 1

    The Pazzi Conspiracy is a clever choice for context indeed. It'll even bring in the Pope. Promising.
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    This is, indeed, an amazing piece of psychological analysis, and beautifully worded, too. Bravo.
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    Thanksgiving

    peter rietbergen commented on Tony S.'s story chapter in Thanksgiving

    The first part was a bit repetitive. But the end works perfectly - though as always I do feel for Matteo....
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    I’m Home

    peter rietbergen commented on Tony S.'s story chapter in I’m Home

    This is impressive indeed. Thanks for it!
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    Aha, now it is clear where we're heading to....
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    Why, in their last conversation during that long evening, did Kitt not question Matteo about HIS future, instead of talking about himself and Matt?
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    Maybe a bit too many cocks outlined in speedos, and too many bodies carved from stone...?
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    Three Days

    peter rietbergen commented on Tony S.'s story chapter in Three Days

    This was a moving chapter, if only because Kitt (also) recognised what Matteo feels, and means to him.
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    I agree with Jjef. This story, though still well-told, is being spun out beyond the realm of belief.
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    Well, this is a way to end the Mateo-episode. But I feel it does not solve the issue that has been building over do many chapters. As to another point: when will K finally stop speaking in whispers, as he must have been doing a hundred times or more. Notwithstanding his emotional problems, I have never found this convincing.
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    If the Nimrod-thing is a let-down that would be a total hoot.
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    I'd love Josh: no small talk is heaven.
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    My impression is that Mateo loves Matt. In what way(s)?. Hard to say....
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    But what about Mateo...?
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