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Michael's Result and a Quiet Late Summer
MastaMak commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Michael's Result and a Quiet Late Summer
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Chapter 17 - The Long Road
MastaMak commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 17 - The Long Road
A sad story we'll told. Keeping the obvious truth of Jamie's demise from him was cruel if well intentioned. -
A somewhat different genre to other works of yours but this looks like an interesting story to develop with lotsnof potential.
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Chapter 3 - Connection
MastaMak commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 3 - Connection
"The dashboard light flickered across Dean’s knuckles as he shifted gears, his hands rough and steady on the wheel".................... "When they pulled up in front of Kris’s house, Dean shifted into park." Bit of inconsistency? First talking about shifting gears (i.e manual gearbox) then Dean shifted into park (indicating an automatic transmission). Notwithstanding that , a good story. -
A wonderful story & so well written. Whilst reading this i got the clear feeling that there were autobiographical threads through parts of it. In some respects it mirrors in parts my own teenage years in the 50's & 60's growing up in the NT, NSW & the ACT when many of these subjects wete taboo & never openly & honestly openly discussed A touching & fitting memorial to Graham P. I feel for your loss. I'm going through your other works whih I find particularly interesting & enjoyable
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Great story well told from start to finish. I really enjoy your writing and amg progressing through all of your stories as I find them. I'm not asking for confirmation but I suspect there's an autobiographical element to parts of this. I've had similar impressions from some of your other stories. A Good Place seems to have all the elements necessary for a much longer story line if that were ever in your plans. Well done ,& thank you. I've gained a lot of enjoyment from this story & the Zack - Aaron reconnection was a master-stroke.
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Zack is an interesting,, no, intriguing development. A young man self assured well beyond his years.
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A particularly well written story & cleverly constructed narrative with wit & empathy. I'll,look with interest for more of your work.
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Another well told story. The pressures associated with approaching puberty well understood and described with empathy and in many ways mirror my own experience - minus the baseball of course which isn't prominent in Australia. Pits its abandoned as its announcement thread which could go a long way.
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A Graceful Exit / Epilogue
MastaMak commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in A Graceful Exit / Epilogue
Interesting read & enjoyed it greatly. We'll constructed & written often with appropriate empathy for the characters portrayed. -
Well, you got me ! Throughout this whole story - which BTW I find particularly well written & gripping - I have never contemplated the emergence of Trev's mum.🤔
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I was going to comment on the Kangaroo farm concept a couple of chapters ago when it was first mentioned but refrained from doing so because the authors research on all matters discussed so far has been impeccable and therefore concluded that the obvious falsehood was deliberate. I have farmed deer in Australia which was difficult enough & farming kangaroos would be akin to herding cats. Very impressed with C James writing, story development, research & much more. Well done.
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Minor point "That means just the one appointment; we can cancel with the regular doctor and I’ll just pay to see the psychologist then get reimbursed by my insurance, but what about any follow-ups? " in Aus you can't see a Specialist (i.e Psychologist") without a referral from a general practioner (regular doctor).
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He's a very long way South of Australia's latitudes and in weather for which he's not suitably clothed or protected. If he survives (as i assume he must for the story to continue) he'll be achieving something remarkable in a conflicted craft. It will put expeditions of the likesnof Dirk Hartog & James Cook into the shade.
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I'm impressed with the authors knowledge of cartography & navigation by first principles. I spent some years in Papua New Guinea as a young man working in an island group where the people were known for their prowess at celestial navigation in huge canoes made from hollowed logs with built up sides and an outrigger (one each side sometimes) in which they would travel in the Pacific well beyond sight of land. Nothing as challenging however as thr daunting task Trevor is faced with in this fascinating & gripping story. His age makes it the more remarkable.
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Bridget & George are an evil pair to be sure. Prepared to murder 3 teenagers for what ? Access to a business providing returns they likely don't need & couldn't reasonably spend in a lifetime. Let's hope Gonzales will bring them both undone in spectacular fashion. Enjoyed the description of the methods adopted to frustrate the Somali pirates.
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A rock disguised as a sat phone on its way to Trev it seems. Great story development.
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Dirk's chandlery didn't have active CCTV monitoring to discover the burglary?
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Hot dogs - canned or otherwise - yuk ! Better than starving though.
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"There's a little red Port left in the bottle" was the statement my seafarer maternal grandfather taught us as kids to remember which was the Port side. He first went to sea in 1899 at age 12 as a cabin boy & went round Cape Horn under sail in a 3 masted clipper. He was English but migrated to Australia in 1923.
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What's the significance of the emphasis on the boxes of tax records i wonder?
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It was clear that the story would cover some twists & turns but you've done that in spades. Love your writing style & the story line is unique. I didn't anticipate the latest twist with Vince. And interesting dynamic to be sure. It will give the boys something to ponder no doubt.
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it's fiction i know but that notwithstanding it makes confronting reading knowing that the situation described could in reality occur. A well constructed, convincing plot and written well and with empathy.
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Beautifully written. I don't have legal training & the law in Australia is very different from that applying in American states but i have to say that the emancipation & custody orders of the court leave me puzzled. That aside, it was a great outcome.🤗
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Chapter 165 Birthday Privileges
MastaMak commented on Dodger's story chapter in Chapter 165 Birthday Privileges
I'd reckon Don's playing silly buggers with his management of Robbie's trust fund.
