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  1. FV2112

    Chapter 17: Unity

    It had finally come. The shameless commercialism, advertising, shopping, decorating, and baking all lead to this one special day. Desmond looked out the window shortly after awakening from his slumber. The weather outside was positively horrible: sickeningly grey skies, an eerie fog, and brutally cold temperatures made for a truly miserable morning, but none of it mattered as it was none other than December 25th: Christmas Day. He lacked any festive shirts or attire and instead u
  2. After what seemed like an eternity of waiting, the coveted holiday break had finally arrived for the students of East Brimerton High. For the next twelve days, tests, homework, and school assignments could become a mere afterthought as everyone looked forward to the festivities Christmas and New Year’s had to offer. Despite this, Christmas was the absolute last thing on Damien Marshall’s mind. Like both of the teachers he lusted after, he too was on the verge of a major breakthrough. Withou
  3. My story isn't dead, I'm just taking a bit of a break from it for the time being.
  4. The shimmering aurora of the golden street lights passed throughout the night sky like shooting stars as Desmond’s old college roommate Tyler, the designated driver for this escapade, made the hour-long trip from downtown Boston back to Brimerton. Desmond stared blankly into space with his face pressed against the window, having learned the hard way that he couldn’t pound back Johnnie Walker shots with beer chasers like he could in his younger days. Upon passing by the shopping center on Ch
  5. 2:45 PM. Afternoon announcements had just concluded, and Mrs. Luisa Lopez’s 9th-period Spanish class was on edge, boiling in silent anticipation of hearing that loud beep. In the distance, they could hear the rumblings of their peers in other classes making their way out of their desks, mingling with friends, and gathering by the door, ready to burst forth into the hallways once classes were officially dismissed. But Mrs. Lopez’s students knew that if they dared to even think about standin
  6. Being made to sit alone each lunch period was a difficult burden to bear at first, having to watch people he once called his confidants looking over their shoulders from three tables down, shouting cruel jokes and making nasty remarks to try and provoke him. Damien, however, did not react. He remained stoic, reminding himself of what Mr. Mancino told him on Monday. As the week marched on by, Damien slowly found cold comfort in isolation from his former “friend” group; in his solitude, he fo
  7. *January 2006* “I still don’t love the idea of this, Bryan.” “It’s gonna be fine, Maureen. Dr. Willoughby comes highly recommended!” The pretty blonde in her early thirties sat on the couch and nervously played with her hair as both she and her husband awaited the arrival of a special guest, a guest who could very well determine the ultimate fate of their unraveling sacred bond. “I don’t know, I just feel like once you get to the point where someone else has to intervene to s
  8. Things didn’t improve much for Damien as sophomore year continued. After two months, it became clear that the only true positive for this year was his first-period biology class with Mr. Mancino. Afterward, the remaining six hours would be filled with nothing but disappointments and stressors. If dealing with mean, annoying, and incompetent teachers weren’t bad enough, Damien’s relationship with his quote-unquote “friends” continued to deteriorate at an exponential pace as their positions a
  9. The more I look into traditional publishing, the more I'm honestly becoming adverse to it. All of the arbitrary rules and regulations like word limits really just seem like they're really just there to gatekeep, gaslight, stifle your creativity, and force you and your work into a box that probably doesn't fit. I think that if I were to ever publish The Scandal, I might just go indie.
  10. I'm really glad you seem to be enjoying it so far
  11. my book is in my signature on here, but in case it isn't showing up for you,
  12. Believe me, I know damn well that my first draft (the Sims version) is garbage which is why I never posted it on any Sims websites. I was actually going through it a little bit the other day and all I could really see were things that I wanted to do differently. Even with the improvements I've made over the 12 and a half years I've been working on it, there's still a ton of exposition dumps (especially in the second half), character arcs that go nowhere, unnecessary graphic sex scenes just for the sake of having them, ellipses where there are supposed to be commas, probably a lot of typos and grammatical errors, the character of Damien Marshall in my early EARLY drafts was basically the male Bella Swan because my main focus was the dynamic between the two muscle bear teachers plus, I was scared of digging deep into my own high school experience and the trauma and drama that came out of it to actually make him a relatable character, he ended up being what was essentially a human plot device. I've had friends of mine read the first draft and the consensus is that it has a lot of potential but it also needs a lot of work, and that's what I'm trying to accomplish with the draft that I'm posting here in dribs and drabs, I'm trying to make this unpublishable mess that was my first draft into something potentially publishable.
  13. With his recent predicament in mind, Desmond was more grateful than ever that unlike the other conservative, old-fashioned Italian-American families in his hometown, he grew up with very liberal and open-minded parents. The weekend after Desmond walked in on Bryan, leading to a shocking and unprecedented revelation about himself, he decided to make the four-and-a-half-hour drive from Brimerton to his hometown of Grasmere, Staten Island, to visit his parents, Oscar and Lynda Mancino. Desmond
  14. Nah, I'm not offended in the slightest. I'm really not under any illusion whatsoever that I've written the next best American novel, this is simply my story, and I'd like to feel like because I've been writing for almost 15 years, the improvement between my early rough drafts and what I hope to soon be a finished product would be palpable. In all my years of reading and writing, I believe I've learned a lot about how a good story is composed.
  15. I can relate because my own passion project is a two-part novel with over seventy chapters that spans a multitude of different genres from drama, to slice-of-life, to romance, and even legal thriller. In short, it's a story about life and all the aspects of life, both good and bad. People have even told me that this is a pretty ambitious project for an unpublished amateur writer like myself, but it's something that I really am genuinely passionate about and I really want it to be the best it can be for what it is.
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