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  • 06/22/2011
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Light - 1. Poem

I had a light

bright in it's fixture

morose in it's picture

I had a light

that flickered

it blinked

and it shadowed

then it's fixture was shattered

I had a light

where there's a black stain

Round and smudged

the middle white

an empty space

for where I once had a light

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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Michael9344

A simple poem with heartache feeling. A good read. straight to the point and no mis-conception. But could add something extra? something something to the end. :D

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evergreen
On 06/23/2011 01:33 PM, Michael9344 said:
A simple poem with heartache feeling. A good read. straight to the point and no mis-conception. But could add something extra? something something to the end. :D
Hmmm... I don't know, that's how it ends for now...Thanks for the great review :D
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Marzipan

Actually, I had a similar thought I was planning to put into a poem. You did it so well, so I'm not even gonna try. :)

 

Nothing to add hun, I liked this much.

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evergreen
On 06/25/2011 05:47 AM, Marzipan said:
Actually, I had a similar thought I was planning to put into a poem. You did it so well, so I'm not even gonna try. :)

 

Nothing to add hun, I liked this much.

Ohhh haha thank you so much! :D
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Sara Alva

This made me a little sad :( But I guess it's good that a poem gets people to feel something, right?

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evergreen
On 06/27/2011 02:19 PM, Sara Alva said:
This made me a little sad :( But I guess it's good that a poem gets people to feel something, right?
It's okay. I was sad when writing it. If you felt something while reading it, then I guess it did it's job. :)
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comicfan

It sounds like you are up for metaphors. Sounds like life to me. Bright, glowing and then gone. Interesting take any way you look at it.

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evergreen
On 07/03/2011 03:07 PM, comicfan said:
It sounds like you are up for metaphors. Sounds like life to me. Bright, glowing and then gone. Interesting take any way you look at it.
Metaphors are fun. Thanks :) !
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Tenebrae

That's how I felt when I told my "mom" I was into both guys and girls. Just the look she gave me made me feel like I had this big blank spot inside me where the gender definition should've been. A good poem and very emotion invoking.

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evergreen
On 07/14/2011 08:13 AM, Tenebrae said:
That's how I felt when I told my "mom" I was into both guys and girls. Just the look she gave me made me feel like I had this big blank spot inside me where the gender definition should've been. A good poem and very emotion invoking.
Thank you :) Hmm... the poem is also about my mother but for a different reason.
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