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Lost In Thought's Poetry Prompt Collection - 1. Prompt 1: (Tanka) Lost in the Maze

Trembling in fear
Wandering an endless maze
Wishing to be free
But yet denying myself
How will I overcome it?
 
Where do I belong?
My time spent in solitude
Always lost in thought
Will I find that hidden path
Before my time has run out?
 
Its the things I want
They may seem close but are not
Their beyond my reach
I still hide behind these walls
Unable to rise above
 
A dull existence
While within this gray expanse
Time drags on slowly
My days and nights start to blur
Can this really be living?
 
Am I even awake?
I am living a nightmare
Alone in the dark
Without the warmth of a friend
I need help but can't find it
 
Every now and then
I happen upon a light
That brings me pure bliss
Its a new path of wonder
A brighter future awaits
 
I can free myself
By creating my own path
I will beat the maze
Escaping this labyrinth
Moving forward step by step
 
 
Afterwards~
 
We all face a maze
But what we must remember
Is never give up
Even when a wall blocks us
we can still escape the maze
 
We must help others
They will also face mazes
By lending a hand
We can save their lives as well
Bonds are a strength unbeaten
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The beginning was very sad, I actually had tears in my eyes reading it, but the ending was more promising and there was a hint of something much better and happier.

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On 01/16/2015 02:48 AM, Suvitar said:
The beginning was very sad, I actually had tears in my eyes reading it, but the ending was more promising and there was a hint of something much better and happier.
Thanks, my first poem in 7-8 years (Since middle school). I just thought I would give it a go and the results were definitely pleasing. Definitely a personal piece. Haven't really thought of writing poetry or the alternative I guess it helps to have a prompt or structure to go by.

 

Thanks for the review it means alot

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On 01/16/2015 04:53 AM, jamessavik said:
Welcome again.

I knew you were interesting and, I'm almost never wrong about these thing.

Wow, thank you I honestly don't think of myself that way

 

I'll try my best to continue to meet your expectations and make improvements along the way

 

Truly grateful for your review~

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Wow, not one tanka, but a cycle of nine! It's not the easiest thing to stick to a prescribed syllable pattern even for one stanza, let alone for so many. Not only that, but you managed to carry a single metaphor throughout the poem (being lost in a maze) and describe different aspects of the problem. If you have based this poem on experiences that you've had, it'd be really interesting if you would consider revisiting them in a different form of poem, maybe with more direct connections to the emotions that this one describes? Anyway, this is a pretty amazing start! Well done!

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On 01/16/2015 05:32 PM, Irritable1 said:
Wow, not one tanka, but a cycle of nine! It's not the easiest thing to stick to a prescribed syllable pattern even for one stanza, let alone for so many. Not only that, but you managed to carry a single metaphor throughout the poem (being lost in a maze) and describe different aspects of the problem. If you have based this poem on experiences that you've had, it'd be really interesting if you would consider revisiting them in a different form of poem, maybe with more direct connections to the emotions that this one describes? Anyway, this is a pretty amazing start! Well done!
I kept logging on just waiting for your review lol. As I recall there is a certain Poetry Anthology coming up, the topic fits well. Maybe I'll work on some poems with more direct connections based on those past experiences~

 

Thanks for your review I was looking forward to it.

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I feel humbled that my prompt allowed you the structure to convey such a personal set of feelings. But guess what, that's the essence of poetry – connection – and a work like this can resonate with every Gay kid, or Questioning kid, or Bi kid – or anyone who has ever felt alone and isolated, and that's everyone. You have done an amazing job, and I hope you do not need our encouragement to keep writing and trust that others will know what you have to say within their heats, because they will. Thank you for letting me read this.

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On 01/17/2015 08:46 AM, AC Benus said:
I feel humbled that my prompt allowed you the structure to convey such a personal set of feelings. But guess what, that's the essence of poetry – connection – and a work like this can resonate with every Gay kid, or Questioning kid, or Bi kid – or anyone who has ever felt alone and isolated, and that's everyone. You have done an amazing job, and I hope you do not need our encouragement to keep writing and trust that others will know what you have to say within their heats, because they will. Thank you for letting me read this.
Truly ecstatic with the feedback I'm getting, I definitely prefer a more structured form. Your prompt was the encouragement and guidance I needed to start writing and create a piece that I'm really proud of.
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Having taken a first run at Tanka myself, I can really appreciate the effort that went into this. There's more involved than a simple glance at the page would suggest, isn't there.

 

It's great that you picked up the pen after so many years and shared. You should continue.

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On 01/18/2015 03:42 AM, PBax said:
Having taken a first run at Tanka myself, I can really appreciate the effort that went into this. There's more involved than a simple glance at the page would suggest, isn't there.

 

It's great that you picked up the pen after so many years and shared. You should continue.

It certainly was a fun challenge arranging and rearranging words and syllables to fit the structure of a Tanka. I was able to find a flow that really helped in constructing this poem.

 

It was funny to me realizing that we joined on the same date and both happened upon writing a Tanka I loved yours as well!

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