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Dancing in the Dark - 7. Chapter 7

Chapter 7.

Viktor doesn’t say it, but I can tell he’s proud of the way I now have Emma cowering and trying to slide down the drain of the tub the whole time we were in the shower. I lean over and remove the ball gag from her mouth and the words spew from her like she can’t control them.

“No more please, no more, don’t do it again I’ll tell you everything, I will, please just let me die now,” she babbles in a hoarse voice and Viktor giggles. Honestly, he giggles like a fourteen year old girl.

“What did you do to her Mark?” He wraps his arms around my waist from behind, and he’s tall enough that he can rest his cheek above my ear. We were dry and dressed now, Viktor looking only slightly ridiculous in my too small clothes. Emma stares up at us in abject terror.

“Flechettes and salt,” I say.

“What are flechettes?” Viktor asks curiously. I look up at him with a frown.

“You don’t know what flechettes are? Seriously what do they teach you kids these days?” I don’t actually know if Viktor is younger than me, but I say it on a hunch and it pans out.

“Hey, I’ll have you know I’m one hundred and sixty three this year,” Viktor says with a pout. Oh, he’s cute when he does that and I stand on my toes to capture his pouting lip in my teeth for a second.

I release him and answer, “Flechettes are very fine blades, so fine that you don’t actually feel them cutting you until after it’s done. I cut her up, then rubbed salt into her wounds until she passed out. I healed her, waited for her to wake up and then did it again. I only had to do it twice before she was ready to talk.”

“How many times did you do it after she broke? And how did you heal her?” he asks, staring down at Emma who is now looking up at as and whimpering.

I shrugged. “I don’t know, maybe five or six times? And I healed her with my blood. Which reminds me, has it had an effect on you?” I ask curiously.

Viktor looks confused by my question, but shakes his head. “You’re my mate, of course your blood is better for me than anyone else’s. Although I did recover from - what did you call it? Revenancy? We just call it the mindless hungry stage, most of us only go through it the first time we wake after the change. Why is your blood different?”

“Because I'm immortal,” I answer. Viktor stares at me with an open mouth and doesn’t say anything.

I shift my attention back to Emma, who is waiting for us and looking like she’s disappointed that she didn’t fall through the plughole while we were distracted. It just takes a raised eyebrow on my part to have her babbling again.

“Oh, oh God, please no, it’s the government, some kind of subsection of the FBI, but they’re in charge of removing supernatural threats and they wanted Sofia gone because she was blackmailing a senator and he’s in charge of the agency and they’ve been planning to get rid of her for a while that’s why we kidnapped Viktor so we could starve him and then we could use him to safely eliminate you─”

“How did you know that I would take Viktor home with me?” I interrupt her babbling. She starts crying.

“We . . . we didn’t,” she sobs, “Pierson was going to make you take him if you didn’t volunteer to.” Viktor is growling softly in the back of his throat, a threatening animal sound. It’s sexy as fuck.

“Are they going to come for us?” Viktor’s question comes out with a snarl of displeasure at the thought. I wonder how he makes those sounds? I'd just sound like I was trying to be a dog if I tried to make those noises, but Viktor sounds more like a pissed off leopard.

“Yes, they’ll give me until sunrise to check in with you, and when I haven’t they’ll come looking,” she answers with a series of frantic nods. She’s getting calmer now, and I can see that change in her that comes over most human’s right before I kill them. I think it’s them accepting their fate and letting go of their life, but I could be wrong. I’m vaguely envious of the death she’s about to embrace, until Viktor presses his lips to the side of my neck and I realize that I have something worth living for now. That thought is followed closely by the thought that he’s a vampire. And vampires, as I know all too well, only think they’re immortal.

Emma has been babbling on while these thoughts run through my head, and in a flash I slip from Viktor’s embrace, grab one of my flechettes that are still by the tub where I left them earlier and slice it across her throat.

She trails off with a confused look on her face and then her head lolls back and she’s dead. The whole thing took about twenty seconds. Viktor stares at me with something like awe on his face, but I’m too enraged to really notice.

“They’re going to try and kill you Viktor,” my voice is flat, emotionless. I haven’t been this angry since that time I got chopped up and buried.

“Hey, hey, it’s ok. I’m a vampire, and you’re immortal,” he grips my face in his hands and forces me to look at him. He appears to have already forgotten that they managed to almost starve him to death.

“Yes, you’re a vampire that they’ve already almost killed. Viktor, I…I just found you. I don’t even really understand this whole mating bond thing, but . . . .” I looked up at him, into his heterochromatic eyes and drew in a deep breath, controlling myself. Viktor looked back at me and I could see him struggling with the idea that he was the one in danger here.

“Mark . . . when you say you’re immortal, exactly how immortal do you mean? I mean, are you like us and you just don’t─”

I cut him off sharply, “No, Viktor I’m immortal in the literal sense of the word. You can chop me up and destroy me, and eventually I’ll pull back together, or be remade new if a part can’t come back to me. You vampires got the better end of the deal if you ask me. The option of death is what makes you want to live I think.” That last bit was me mumbling to myself as I started to think about what we would need to do.

My vampire sat down abruptly, but gracefully on the floor. I don’t know what’s going on in his head, but he doesn’t look like he’s going to be capable of making plans with me anytime soon. Well that’s ok; we have until sunrise to get to one of my safe houses, and it’s not even eleven yet. First things first, we have to get rid of Emma.

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Man, he is just so sadistic! He broke her, but kept on doing it, just for fun. Truly shivered on that one. I noticed in this chapter you have a lot of punctuation dialogue issues. If you check the writer's forum there is a topic in there on it, and I've shared a really comprehensive rule sheet that I found online a while back. Or, you can pm me.

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This story amazes me. Immortality has to make one see things from a unique

perspective. It makes some critical adjustments regarding morality, and certainly

regarding mortality.But it's also a curse. How will Matt's new mate change him?

Will it relieve the abject boredom and dissatisfaction with his endless life?

 

I'm fascinated.

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I agree...sadistic characters you have...and they sure do get joy over inflicting pain! At least they will have something to do over their long years together lol. I'm not usually one for gratuitous violence but somehow I'm enjoying this enough to overlook it or take it too seriously since it's about supernaturals. Anyway, I know you mentioned that you want advice so I just wanted to put down a few things I'd have noted if I beta read it....

-Has he ever met another 'person' like him?

-I think saying he's an immortal human is silly. Obvously humans aren't immortal.

-I found their interview to be severely lacking in terms of what they could have gotten from her, info that they would need to fight these people. Some things they should have asked, like who the senator that was threatened and who leads the agency was? What was her job?

-what is the name of this agency? Why was she sent alone if this is a gov't agency with tons of resources?

-How would the doctor force him to take a vamp he doesn't know home? I mean, even if he agreed to get him out of the hospital, what would force him to take him home?

-Is the doctor part of this agency or was he just directed to the things he did?

-Why was Victor chosen to be the revenant? Did they just grab any vamp?

-I get how the plan was smart in terms of killing off that madame vamp, but sending Viktor to pay him was strange b/c he had been starved to the point where he would be a killing machine, so what would have stopped him from jumping onto Mark when he brought the payment to him?

-Why would they think Mark would take this vamp home? As far as they know, he's a person who handed him a payment? They didn't know Mark was his mate and if it hadn't been his mate, he isn't the type to take a vamp home b/c he feels bad for the kid.

-I was surprised they didn't ask what they planned to do with Viktor. Yes, the plan would cause Viktor to drain Mark and not remember he did it, but he'd have to be taken out of there before he woke up or he'd have seen a body, how could one woman take him out if he's unconscious?

-Once he drained Mark, he'd have most of his strength back. Why would he not drain Emma, a human, and take off? She is alone clearly since she was supposed to check in with the agency, so she's no match for a vamp. He certainly would remember the part of his being starved to the point of madness, so what did she plan to do? Did she think she'd hold his hand and lead him back to the people who captured and starved him?

I'm not trying to rip you apart...I like the story and look forward to more. I'm just trying to help if you ever decide to extend it or something. I do a lot of beta reading so I kind of think that way even when I read for enjoyment :) I am looking forward to more.

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On 03/29/2013 08:09 PM, Cannd said:
I agree...sadistic characters you have...and they sure do get joy over inflicting pain! At least they will have something to do over their long years together lol. I'm not usually one for gratuitous violence but somehow I'm enjoying this enough to overlook it or take it too seriously since it's about supernaturals. Anyway, I know you mentioned that you want advice so I just wanted to put down a few things I'd have noted if I beta read it....

-Has he ever met another 'person' like him?

-I think saying he's an immortal human is silly. Obvously humans aren't immortal.

-I found their interview to be severely lacking in terms of what they could have gotten from her, info that they would need to fight these people. Some things they should have asked, like who the senator that was threatened and who leads the agency was? What was her job?

-what is the name of this agency? Why was she sent alone if this is a gov't agency with tons of resources?

-How would the doctor force him to take a vamp he doesn't know home? I mean, even if he agreed to get him out of the hospital, what would force him to take him home?

-Is the doctor part of this agency or was he just directed to the things he did?

-Why was Victor chosen to be the revenant? Did they just grab any vamp?

-I get how the plan was smart in terms of killing off that madame vamp, but sending Viktor to pay him was strange b/c he had been starved to the point where he would be a killing machine, so what would have stopped him from jumping onto Mark when he brought the payment to him?

-Why would they think Mark would take this vamp home? As far as they know, he's a person who handed him a payment? They didn't know Mark was his mate and if it hadn't been his mate, he isn't the type to take a vamp home b/c he feels bad for the kid.

-I was surprised they didn't ask what they planned to do with Viktor. Yes, the plan would cause Viktor to drain Mark and not remember he did it, but he'd have to be taken out of there before he woke up or he'd have seen a body, how could one woman take him out if he's unconscious?

-Once he drained Mark, he'd have most of his strength back. Why would he not drain Emma, a human, and take off? She is alone clearly since she was supposed to check in with the agency, so she's no match for a vamp. He certainly would remember the part of his being starved to the point of madness, so what did she plan to do? Did she think she'd hold his hand and lead him back to the people who captured and starved him?

I'm not trying to rip you apart...I like the story and look forward to more. I'm just trying to help if you ever decide to extend it or something. I do a lot of beta reading so I kind of think that way even when I read for enjoyment :) I am looking forward to more.

This is great, thanks for taking the time to write this out for me :)
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