Tanka Play 2015 - 1. Chapter 1

I like the strength of your word play. Interesting.

I agree with carringtonrj, there are some really strong words at play here, although perhaps the over all image that one is supposed to get is a bit fuzzy. Um, i guess i get a keychain dangling over the fires of hell. Is that about right..? Maybe i'm way off

I am glad you are exploring one of my favorite genres of poetry though, please keep stretching the form until it does what you want it to do.

On 01/20/2015 07:29 AM, carringtonrj said:

I like the strength of your word play. Interesting.

I hope you'll continue reading, and continue sharing your thoughts. Means a ton.

On 01/20/2015 08:29 AM, AC Benus said:

I agree with carringtonrj, there are some really strong words at play here, although perhaps the over all image that one is supposed to get is a bit fuzzy. Um, i guess i get a keychain dangling over the fires of hell. Is that about right..? Maybe i'm way off

 

I am glad you are exploring one of my favorite genres of poetry though, please keep stretching the form until it does what you want it to do.

I was concerned about this image, especially since it was so closely attached to the word carabiners.

You are nearer than you know with the idea of a "key" and being suspended over a "hell" (and that most definitely feels reassuring to me) though the image you received is not the one I intended. The failure on that count fully my own.

Tanka Play continues on. I hope you'll continue your feedback. Means so much.