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Beautiful. And, as someone else has already said, poetic. I hadn't noticed that the first-person narrator doesn't mention his sex. You're right: if we were reading this in a "mainstream" anthology, that would be a moment of revelation. TRiG.

How are things going, J? TRiG.

Take the time you need. We're looking forward to this. This story has been consistently excellent. TRiG.

Hmm. I spent a day doing that last weekend. Rather good, I must say. TRiG.

I think I'm going to have to start again from the beginning, just to get my fix. TRiG.

Yahay! Worth the wait. Well worth the wait. And the Colin narrative is ... interesting. How will that develop? I love the way Ryan bursts into rooms without warning. I'm still waiting for him to walk in on Jake and Shane snogging. That would be interesting. A story which doesn't mind being reread. Good stuff. TRiG.

I had a serious dash addiction at one time. I'm almost over it now, but it's still there. You're an excellent writer. TRiG.

True. Which is why I didn't complain about this

I see you're keeping up the standard with chapter 15. This story just goes on getting better. And I'm getting to really like Jake, now, which is nice. I did notice one small typo: