AnytaSunday Posted January 17, 2011 Author Posted January 17, 2011 Firstly: Frosty--hehe, donna worry, it's definitely romance--or at least the parts that count of it are, LOL! So, the wait is over. Here's chapter 15 for you. What do you think? 1
Sara Alva Posted January 17, 2011 Posted January 17, 2011 Well, I'd say you hit those emotions pretty damn well. Mentioned that in my review, too, but in general I just wanted to say that I like how you make such an impact with the emotions while still managing to keep them realistic. In situations like this one there might be a tendency to sink into the overly-dramatic, but the authors who can make more plausible reactions so captivating are the ones with a special talent. SPOILER (I'm supposed to warn people, right?) * * * How cute was drugged Paul at the end there?? 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted January 18, 2011 Posted January 18, 2011 Personally I hated this, i think you have to have the worst Beta reader EVER!!!!! Actually I think this was a great chapter. Not sure what's gonna happen next - [really I don't - i haven't been given 16 to look at yet] but I just love the tiny details - puffs of cookie breathe, wrong keys, chip bags on the ground. All of that tells me more about the character and what they are doing. It adds depth to them as we try to keep up with the action. It gives us little smiles along the way. You are very good at making us smile, be sad, be anxious and rooting for your characters. Its a gift and I for one am glad you share it with us. Andy 1
Frostina Posted January 18, 2011 Posted January 18, 2011 Well, I'd say you hit those emotions pretty damn well. Mentioned that in my review, too, but in general I just wanted to say that I like how you make such an impact with the emotions while still managing to keep them realistic. In situations like this one there might be a tendency to sink into the overly-dramatic, but the authors who can make more plausible reactions so captivating are the ones with a special talent. SPOILER (I'm supposed to warn people, right?) * * * How cute was drugged Paul at the end there?? so cute.. Oh sooo soooooooo soooooooooooooooooooo CUTE!! puffs of cookie breathe, wrong keys, chip bags on the ground. All of that tells me more about the character and what they are doing. It adds depth to them as we try to keep up with the action. It gives us little smiles along the way. You are very good at making us smile, be sad, be anxious and rooting for your characters. Its a gift and I for one am glad you share it with us. The details are just so perfect at subtly hinting what the person is really like... like Andy said.. its definitely a gift and thank you for sharing it with us! 1
AnytaSunday Posted January 18, 2011 Author Posted January 18, 2011 Sea-- Why thanks! and, hehe, yeah, Karl might think that too. Andy-- Yes, (coughs) worst beta ever. None of you want him. No. Terrible.( In head: Mitts off, he's my beta reader!) hehe Frosty-- Thanks for reading! What's a story without anyone to tell it to? 1
AnytaSunday Posted January 22, 2011 Author Posted January 22, 2011 Okay peeps, Chapter 16 is up! Thanks for still reading my stuff, you peeps are all awesome! Feel free to discuss anything, I'm always interested in people thoughts!(and or suggestions/ constructive criticism ) 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted January 22, 2011 Posted January 22, 2011 Okay peeps, Chapter 16 is up! Thanks for still reading my stuff, you peeps are all awesome! Feel free to discuss anything, I'm always interested in people thoughts!(and or suggestions/ constructive criticism ) Anyone who criticizes Anyta's stuff has to deal with me. :2hands: :sword: :axeman: :battleaxe: :mace: Just so you know before hand Andy 1
Agaith Posted January 22, 2011 Posted January 22, 2011 Anyone who criticizes Anyta's stuff has to deal with me. :2hands: :sword: :axeman: :battleaxe: :mace: Just so you know before hand Andy meh you're a pushover Andy.... JK! Anyway I really love this story Paul seems to slowly getting over Laura but I feel he needs to clear a few more obstacles in order to do that. Sorry for short reply my reviewing skills need work Great writing Anyta hehe 2
Frostina Posted January 23, 2011 Posted January 23, 2011 Anyone who criticizes Anyta's stuff has to deal with me. :2hands: :sword: :axeman: :battleaxe: :mace: Just so you know before hand Andy Omy... just these many weapons Andy?? sure that will be enough??? Please write sooner Anyta... That's all I wud request of you.. I'm bad at reviewing anyways. therefore wont even try! I really like the story, for what its worth.. 1
AnytaSunday Posted January 23, 2011 Author Posted January 23, 2011 Anyone who criticizes Anyta's stuff has to deal with me. Just so you know before hand Andy I feel very well protected, LOL. Glad I'm behind and not opposing ya! hehe. But tips how to improve are helpful. I mean, one day I'm gonna write a story for you that will really blow your mind--but first I need to learn how!!! These are my experimenting/learning days --definitely having fun, of course, but you know... Oh, and I already decided my next gay romance story will be set in NZ... different feel though, but hopefully interesting. We'll see. Oh goodness, I can't wait to get to the States--there are so many workshops/conferences for authors I want to attend!!! *rubs hands together! Sweet. Should really get back to writing on 17! I haven't touched it for a day and a half. In my head there is a scene that should be really quite mushy, hopefully, lol, we'll see. 1
Agaith Posted January 23, 2011 Posted January 23, 2011 Well if these are your experimenting/learning days then wow can't wait until your mind-blowing story comes out You are a very special write already Anyta (emoticons in excess again lol) 2
AnytaSunday Posted January 23, 2011 Author Posted January 23, 2011 Maggie Stiefvater author of Shiver wrote 30 novels before her first book Lament was picked up. From each one she learned something that led her to be the wonderful writer she is. Becoming an author (of that pedigree) is a process, it's a lot of hard work and above all committment. It's something I also aspire to, and I'm willing (also enjoying) putting in the hard yards to get there. To date I have six novels finished and two that are half complete. I estimate at least another good five-six years before I hit thirty novels--and that's only the beginning. I admire writers. It's damn hard work. Not just writing the story, which is the fun part, but the editing it to death and re-writing that comes afterwards! Anyway, I hope that we all support each other on this process--through both encouragement and constructive criticism. What are your gut feelings on a story/chapter, does something not quite feel right--maybe it's hard to figure out what it is, but even pointing out vaguely something felt off indicates that something may need work. I have this story I wrote--I love it to bits. When I wrote it, I really thought 'wow' I'm so getting there, (immodestly) yeah, this is great stuff. What did I do? I left it alone five months and re-read it. While parts of it are good and there is definitely potential, I also see now soooo many issues with it--confusing, consistency, too much going on, rules of the fantastical world need more clarification, subtle hints at secondary romance not coming across...etc... I'm rambling, LOL, just wanted to point out writing is a process. 1
Agaith Posted January 23, 2011 Posted January 23, 2011 Hehe I know what you mean by the last paragraph. I had a story I was writing when I was in my earlier teens then stopped writing on it. Looking back on it (and it's at 45K + as well) I hate the style I wrote it in, I feel my current story is better, probably because I'm more mature (hard to believe I know ). But I keep it as it serves as a reminder that as an author I am only getting better I also hope to see many more novels from you 2
AnytaSunday Posted January 23, 2011 Author Posted January 23, 2011 Hehe I know what you mean by the last paragraph. I had a story I was writing when I was in my earlier teens then stopped writing on it. Looking back on it (and it's at 45K + as well) I hate the style I wrote it in, I feel my current story is better, probably because I'm more mature (hard to believe I know ). But I keep it as it serves as a reminder that as an author I am only getting better I also hope to see many more novels from you More mature? You sure about that? LOL (*thinks of the rammy convo in chat room, hehehe) JK. Of course you grow into your writing and into a style that works for you. 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted January 23, 2011 Posted January 23, 2011 Hehe I know what you mean by the last paragraph. I had a story I was writing when I was in my earlier teens then stopped writing on it. Looking back on it (and it's at 45K + as well) I hate the style I wrote it in, I feel my current story is better, probably because I'm more mature (hard to believe I know ). But I keep it as it serves as a reminder that as an author I am only getting better I also hope to see many more novels from you Stu, It's not hard to believe, it's IMPOSSIBLE to believe JK. Actually, I have to keep reminding myself you are not even 20 when I read your work, you will totally out shine most of us on here if you keep to it. Oops this is Anyta's topic not yours - Rah Rah Rah Anyta - go St st stuffed go!!! Andy
AnytaSunday Posted January 26, 2011 Author Posted January 26, 2011 Oh yeah, so chapter 17 is up. This one's a bit of a sweet reprieve. Hope you enjoy. 18 will be a while in coming--I haven't written a jot in the last couple of days. Blame the stupid cold, LOL. 1
Frostina Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 This is for Anyta... From a hopeless romantic to another one.. 1
Agaith Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 This is for Anyta... From a hopeless romantic to another one.. I think its wonderful Frosty and I'm glad that the stories you read on here inspire you to draw and paint 2
AnytaSunday Posted January 28, 2011 Author Posted January 28, 2011 Ohhhh yay! It's up!!!! Soooo many hugs, Frosty, this is really great of you. I'm touched. I'm so excited about this, I wish I could put it in the story somehow, but I have no clue how. Hmmm.. Keep getting inspired, I like that you give others visual contributions to their work, it's really great! Thanks!!! 1
Marzipan Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 This is for Anyta... From a hopeless romantic to another one.. Love this!!!!
Frostina Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 I think its wonderful Frosty and I'm glad that the stories you read on here inspire you to draw and paint Thanks Stu.. and I'm glad too.. I love the fact that i have a reason to Draw.. I love it.. Ohhhh yay! It's up!!!! Soooo many hugs, Frosty, this is really great of you. I'm touched. I'm so excited about this, I wish I could put it in the story somehow, but I have no clue how. Hmmm.. Keep getting inspired, I like that you give others visual contributions to their work, it's really great! Thanks!!! U r welcome.. It's My pleasure.. Honestly.. and i have NO idea how u can do that too.. Nephy asked about it too.. maybe Lugh knows.. Love this!!!! Thanks Hun! 1
Kavrik Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 Marzipan inspired me to also dedicate something to Anyta. This is me dancing and cheering you on. 1
Sara Alva Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 Frosty, you're so talented! That's awesome! I can barely draw a stick figure lol Kavrik 1
AnytaSunday Posted January 28, 2011 Author Posted January 28, 2011 LOL! That dancing cat's hilarious!!! Thanks Kavrik I feel very much cheered on. hehe. 1
Marzipan Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 Marzipan inspired me to also dedicate something to Anyta. This is me dancing and cheering you on. Are these lol cats! Super funny! And how on earth did I inspire you... ?
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