St-st-stuffed

[AnytaSunday]

Hello Peeps,

 

So, I've started another romance story. This one I'm writing purely for fun, and because I need to release some of my romantic energies so I don't over-do it in another story I'm currently writing. Anyway, if you have any thoughts, I'm most receptive to hearing them.

 

I do aim to get better.

 

This story follows Karl and Paul from Shane and Trey, but that's as far as the connection goes. Hope you enjoy it.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Hello Peeps,

 

So, I've started another romance story. This one I'm writing purely for fun, and because I need to release some of my romantic energies so I don't over-do it in another story I'm currently writing. Anyway, if you have any thoughts, I'm most receptive to hearing them.

 

I do aim to get better.

 

This story follows Karl and Paul from Shane and Trey, but that's as far as the connection goes. Hope you enjoy it.

 

Yeah, I get to be the first poster

 

I really like Chapter 2, 1 was good but 2 is fresher in my mind so I am going to start there. I like the feelings I get from this. You do a great job of giving us Karl's emotions, he frustration, his angst, his pride and his hurt at his family.

 

I was glad to see you said you weren't going to have a lot of reference to S & T, I am not much of a fan of flash backs, especially in shorter works - that assumes this stays short as you originally suggested.

 

As usual, your writing needs help. Looking forward to the next chapter.

 

Andy

[Frostina]

YAY! another story in the third person.... They're always great!!

 

Having said that, since u r writing in the 3rd person, why not a little more from Paul as well?? i mean we r looking at Karl and his misery... Its great that Paul is doing so well, i mean we don't HAVE to know the details of his personal life and his history of getting to where he is now... I mean a little about what he is feeling and how he was shocked into a stutter at seeing karl after all these years u know... Since u said this is gonna be a short story, it'll be nice to get to know both sets of emotions instead of just one.

 

 

Huge Grey Eyes!! **sigh**

[AnytaSunday]

Andy,

 

Yeah, I get to be the first poster

 

I really like Chapter 2, 1 was good but 2 is fresher in my mind so I am going to start there. I like the feelings I get from this. You do a great job of giving us Karl's emotions, he frustration, his angst, his pride and his hurt at his family.

 

I was glad to see you said you weren't going to have a lot of reference to S & T, I am not much of a fan of flash backs, especially in shorter works - that assumes this stays short as you originally suggested.

 

As usual, your writing needs help. Looking forward to the next chapter.

 

Andy

Sweet

 

Yup, chapter two became a little more complicated than I orginally thought, hence the need to give it more emotion. If I'm being honest, I can't see this being the 15, 000 word story I'd intended it to be. It'll probably end up something as long as invisible or even S&T, lol. It really did get away from me and fast.

 

Yup, there is not going to be any flashbacks to S&T, the only reflection of their past will happen in thought, or as the two discuss things... but I don't want to cut myself off from the possibility of any flashbacks (just in case). But I'm not really a fan of them, so I'd only use it if absolutely necessary.

 

Hope you enjoy the ride, Andy. Or/ And you'll tell me if something's not quite right. You're great.

[AnytaSunday]

Frostina,

 

YAY! another story in the third person.... They're always great!!

 

Having said that, since u r writing in the 3rd person, why not a little more from Paul as well?? i mean we r looking at Karl and his misery... Its great that Paul is doing so well, i mean we don't HAVE to know the details of his personal life and his history of getting to where he is now... I mean a little about what he is feeling and how he was shocked into a stutter at seeing karl after all these years u know... Since u said this is gonna be a short story, it'll be nice to get to know both sets of emotions instead of just one.

 

 

Huge Grey Eyes!! **sigh**

 

Thanks for the message!!! It's a maybe on having something form Paul's POV at the moment. I'm just not sure I can pull it off right. More about Paul will be coming up though we will learn about him through Karl. Or at least, that was the idea. Dang, I'm really unsure on that. I'll fiddle and think before making up my mind. Hmmmm...

 

Cheers for all the encouragement!

hehe, the way I picture his eyes, are pretty darn lovely.

[Frostina]

Frostina,

 

 

 

It's a maybe on having something form Paul's POV at the moment. I'm just not sure I can pull it off right. More about Paul will be coming up though we will learn about him through Karl. Or at least, that was the idea. Dang, I'm really unsure on that. I'll fiddle and think before making up my mind. Hmmmm...

 

Cheers for all the encouragement!

hehe, the way I picture his eyes, are pretty darn lovely.

 

 

 

Actually wasn't talking about Paul's POV. since the story is in third person, u can drop in a few snippets of what's going through paul's mind tho rite?

That's what i meant actually...

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Actually wasn't talking about Paul's POV. since the story is in third person, u can drop in a few snippets of what's going through paul's mind tho rite?

That's what i meant actually...

 

Now I know this was directed at Anyta but she and I have talked about perspective - which is what you are suggesting - and my position is in third person you really ought to stick to either 1) one person's perspective - right now it is Karl, or 2) two distinct perspectives, similar to the Rune and Scott each narrating things. To drop in snippets is IMHO not the best. It leaves you are neither truly third person nor are you completely third person omniscient. I think this makes you third person unlimited, which is not wrong, but I tend to find it confusing to read. Cia does it well, so does Nephy but even in those cases, it is hard to follow because when the two characters are in a scene, you end up as a reader wanting to hear both sides and the writer doesn't do it enough for you, and as a writer you end up using more perspectives and confusing people. Once you start down that slippery slope it hard to stop and hard to control.

 

Andy

[Agaith]

Anyta, loving the story so far

 

For me i can already get a feel for what Paul went through without needing snippets from him so I'd stay with Karl's perspective.

 

There are lots of things which i can see spinning off from this moment and I look forward to it all.

 

(never know exactly what to say) so I will leave it there and add that I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter

 

Stuart x

 

 

[Nephylim]

I like the story just the way it is. I think that Paul is being very magnanimous. I don't think that I would have been, so kudos. There are one or two people who made my school days miserable. I still feel worthless when they are around and I know it's totally stupid because I have made so much more of my life than they have of theirs. But one look at that smirk on their face, that look as if I'm a bad smell under their noses and there I am again, a panfully shy 16 year old crying in my room. Not one of them every laid a finger on me but oh gods they hurt me. I am way past that now but I really don't think that I coudl ever give one of them a chance to lick my shoes if I had the power and being in control wouldn't be enough, I just couldnt stand having them around. Paul is a way better person than I am. Awesome. This story really has me thinking and isnt that the best thing that any writer could hope for.

[AnytaSunday]

Oh, thanks all for leaving me messages!

 

Frostina

I do understand where you are coming from, what you mentioned is called a

[AnytaSunday]

Reviews For St-st-stuffed

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: Anyta Sunday

 

Just in case people are wondering what's happening with this story,

I will continue to post, but have decided to wait until the new

system's up.

Date: 12/11/2010 01:32 PM [Delete] [Respond]

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: adamo

 

I'm sorry that your family is sick, I hope everyone feels better soon!

Author's Response: Thanks Adamo. Still pretty miserable and sickly here, but hopefully the worst has been.

Date: 12/08/2010 02:39 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: Better Than the Lamborghini Reviewer: Frostina

 

Yes.. yes!!! it will hold our interest!!!

Author's

Response: Thanks, Frostina. I hoped to post again last night but the

family got sick. So it's not looking likely for a day or two.

Date: 12/07/2010 01:41 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: Better Than the Lamborghini Reviewer: Wyndham

 

Anyta you are a wonderful writer. This story is sooo good. I am really going to enjoy this one. Thank you

 

Author's Response: Thanks Wyndham, that means a lot. I'm enjoying writing it too. Thanks for leaving a review.

Date: 12/06/2010 06:31 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: minmar72

 

Love everything you write and this is already so intriguing! Want more!Author's

Response: *blushes. Thanks Minmar! I hope to get some more in

today/tonight. Well, I'll do my best to keep up the prompt postings.

Date: 12/06/2010 02:11 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: Better Than the Lamborghini Reviewer: KingdombytheSea

 

I'd be thrilled if this turned into a longer piece

 

Author's Response: Hehe, great, because the story seems to be growing on me.

Date: 12/05/2010 11:59 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: KingdombytheSea

 

I was just wandering around this site . . . and wow, this really

caught my interest. I don't think it's too sparse, it gets right to the

"hook," which is great in a shorter story.

 

Date: 12/05/2010 11:47 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: adamo

 

OH and Paul overcoming his stutter...

And then, OBVIOUSLY, Paul and Karl despite their past falling madly in love

 

Author's Response: tee-hee-hee. Obviously.

Date: 12/05/2010 06:29 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: adamo

 

I would definitely stay interested if you decided to make this

story longer than originally planned. There is so much going on, in a

good way...How does Paul (who presumably is gay ) have a son?

Karls past with his family?... his coming out....

Karls past as a bully...

Karl's cooking...

Lots of really interesting things going on! I hope you decide

to make this a long story

 

Author's Response: hehehe,

yup a lot of what you have up there will be a part of the longer

version of the story. I look forward to writing it, Thanks Adamo.

Date: 12/05/2010 06:20 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Better Than the Lamborghini Reviewer: YueKen

 

so he has a child? I must admit that was unexpected. I still can't

make up any future sightings of the story but I guess I'll leave it that

way for the better.I really like the story makes me feel inspired.

CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART HUN!!!

 

Author's Response: hehe,

well, I'm making up the story (for the most part) as I go, so I'm just

as excited. Thanks for the message, yay.

Date: 12/05/2010 04:50 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: Nephylim

 

What a surprise. I am really liking this hun. charlie eh?

Looking forward to meeting him. Strange situation. I'm not sure that I

could be as magnanimous to the bitches who made my life hell at school. I

would still like to spit in their faces but they still make me feel

worthless no matter how stupid i know that is. Good for you Paul

 

Author's

Response: Hmmm, okay, truth be told I am not magnanimous either. I had a

friend who lived across from me and we had a bit of a fight. Although,

we lived across the road for the next seven years or something, I

practically never said anything to her again. I am the worst at holding

grudges. It's something I would like to change, maybe that's why I had

Paul react so? Thanks so much for your review, Nephy.

Date: 12/05/2010 08:49 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: Agaith

 

Anyta everything you type turns to gold :)Please keep at it you're a star! (I'll talk more of the story in your thread)

 

Author's Response: You make me blush, hehe. Thanks so much for your review. I'll answer your other note soon.

Date: 12/05/2010 07:54 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: auel

 

Moar moar moarrrrrrr!

 

Author's Response: As soon as I have a firm decision for the next little scene, I'll write and post. Thanks for reading, yay.

Date: 12/05/2010 02:28 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: SteveH

 

Hurry up!!! I cant wait to read more!!!Author's Response: tee-hee-hee. I will do my best. Thanks for reading!

Date: 12/04/2010 11:09 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: adamo

 

Its definitely not too slow or bogged down with information but as

for the descriptions it might be nice to know a bit clearer what Paul

and Karl look like :)Also I was wondering if the speech therapist Paul worked with might have been Shane?

 

Author's

Response: Yeah, I should give a little more physical description. I

don't want to overdo it so the reader can picture them a little more how

they like. But I will add to the details, promise. Thanks for getting

back to me on that point. And no, the speech therapist wasn't Shane

(after he graduated he got a job across the country and gave up working

for Treewok. He only came back to visit during the year he and Trey had a

long distance relationship). Thanks for everything!

Date: 12/04/2010 09:04 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: Inuberry

 

I'm....highly interested. I love your stories, and I see no reason why I shouldn't love this one.I'm especially interested in Charlie. Hmmmmm.BUT YEAH. Keep updating, please. - Janee'

 

Author's

Response: I'm interested in Charlie too! This really is a fun

write--and I foresee it being a little challenging too. Thanks for

following!!!

Date: 12/04/2010 07:32 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: ckprime

 

Excellent chapter. I love the fact that Karl is being well

developed as a guy who had it all (still has his nice car though) and

who has lost it all and is trying to get his life together. It feels so

real. Can't wait for the next chapter.

 

Author's Response:

Thank you Ckprime. Yup, Karl is a bit in the mud at the moment. Karma

really has come back for him. But I think there might be quite a bit of

learning... Thanks for reading!

Date: 12/04/2010 06:54 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: Frostina

 

Ooooohh! winning the heart through the son??? hope Charlie gives Karl a hard time....Paul is a gem of a person... the eternal optimist... :Dlooking forward to the next chapter!

 

Author's

Response: hehe, maybe--I have to admit, this time round I haven't

written out a story plan. I have a few notes for scenes, but I guess I'm

discovering things as I go. Paul is a gem, but not without his issues,

which will come up soonish, I suppose. I read your remarks on the

forum...I haven't yet decided it I'd do duel pov. Maybe. If I do, it'd

have to be the next chapter already. Or maybe just for a part of it.

We'll see. Thanks for the review.

Date: 12/04/2010 05:00 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Darn it, and Desperate Reviewer: adamo

 

Haha. He's broke and has a Lamborghini... that's different :)Hmm...a

kid. That should make things interesting. Great chapter in all, I how

you get the next one up as fast as you got his one up

 

Author's

Response: Thanks adamo, lol, yeah, I debated a bit about the car. But I

decided it was a must for three reasons: 1) I have a scene in my head

that sort of makes me laugh including the Lamborghini. 2) It will come

up a little more in terms of Karl's past, and...future. 3) It's just

cool. I hope to post as regularly as possible. Can't promise every

day, but I am aiming for more frequent, and shorter chappies.

Date: 12/04/2010 04:21 PM

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: Nanmander

 

When I saw this on the Most Recent page and read the description, I

got really excited. Shane and Trey was awesome, and I'm totally looking

forward to this one. I think the brief descriptions work here, and I

love how the surprise of discovery comes towards the end. This is so

great! Please post the next chapter!

 

Author's Response: That's

so great, Nanmander. The primary couple are a bit older than in Shane

and Trey and will deal with slightly different issues, but I'm really

enjoying writing it (okay, I'm only at chapter two, but, you know, still

fun.) I hope to post the second chappy later tonight.

Date: 12/04/2010 11:26 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: YueKen

 

interesting......I can't wait for the next part----KentAuthor's Response: Thanks, Kent! Nice to see you around again. Hope all's well.

Date: 12/04/2010 02:04 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: Anya

 

I'm the biggest fan of this story as you probly know lol. I'm so

glad you ent through with it Anyta! Though 27..wow wouldn't have

thought they'd be that old but I really liked the first chapter and

can't wait to read the rest

 

Author's Response: Thank

you again, Anya. Yeah, I wanted their ages to be older. I can do more

with them (at least in the idea I have for the story) . Looking

forward to writing more.

Date: 12/03/2010 06:51 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: auel

 

Hello!Please do continue! Would love to read more! Cheers =

 

]Author's Response: Heya! Thanks so much, yay--I hope to get some time for more writing over the weekend!

Date: 12/03/2010 02:01 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: Frostina

 

definitely Want to see more.. read more lol..Did Karl get what he deserved? (a Karmic bite in the ass??) Paul was Lovely in the other story! hope he gets what he deserves!

 

Author's

Response: That's only a karmic nip in the ass, the real sting'll come

later, but perhaps it'll be soothed by a few things... hehe. Thanks for

reading!!!

Date: 12/03/2010 01:27 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: Nephylim

 

Well, I reckon Karl got his karma. I still feel somewhat sorry

for him though Paul seems to have done very well for himself. It is

going to be very intersting to see what comes of them both

 

Author's

Response: hehehe, yeah, Karl isn't all innocent, that's for sure. Let's

see how things develop for him though... Paul will just blow him away,

uh, no pun indeed. Well, maybe, lol. Let's see.

Date: 12/03/2010 12:19 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: The Suit Reviewer: adamo

 

Definitely. Absolutely. Positively. You MUST continue.

Wonderful start. Funny too

Can't wait to see what happens next.

Brilliant writing.

 

Author's Response: Excellent.

Wonderful. I will continue away. This is a side project, so I'll plough

in spare time during the evenings. Thanks so much for reading and

leaving a review.

Date: 12/03/2010 12:17 PM

[AnytaSunday]

Heya peeps!

 

Now that the new GAstories is up, I've re-posted St-st-stuffed. Chapter four is new, and five will come up tomorrow. Enjoy.

 

Find chappy four: Here

[Sara Alva]

And for anyone else waiting (im)patiently, I saw Chapter 6 was up

[Paige101]

Please may I just start by telling you how much I admire you as writer. I was hooked when I first read Shane and Trey and I managed to read it 3 times over in just 2 weeks!

When I saw St-St-stuffed, and read the characters names it didn't quite register with me who they were. And when Paul stuttered I nearly cried remembering who he was! I love your work, please keep posting

[AnytaSunday]

Nice to meet you, Paige.

 

Thanks so much for leaving me such a wonderful message. It makes me happy to know that you're enjoying these stories, yay!

 

I really enjoy writing, and can't wait to get more on St-st-stuffed posted. So, I hope it won't be long, a couple of days or so, before chapter seven is up. Though, it may have to wait until after Christmas, because my beta reader deserves a nice break, lol.

 

Sweet, now I'm getting onto writing some more.

[Sara Alva]

Is it bad that I want the holidays to hurry up so I can continue reading this story?

[Sara Alva]

Okay I haven't even read it yet but I was just sitting here whining about how I wanted the next chapter, and then magically it was there! Alright, now going to read

 

Is it bad that I want the holidays to hurry up so I can continue reading this story?

[AnytaSunday]

Is it bad that I want the holidays to hurry up so I can continue reading this story?

 

hehe, I just posted one more chappy. That'll be the last one until the holidays (at least Christmas) is over. If I had it MY way, I'd write right through the holidays, but I can't see my family appreciating that, lol.

 

Thanks for the note.

 

Oh, and for anyone interested, chapter seven can be found here

 

[Sara Alva]

Oh no, chapter 8 is up and I don't have the time to read it! A terrible tragedy; but I'll get to it soon

[AnytaSunday]

Heya Peeps,

 

Chapter nine is up! Enjoy! You can find it here.

[Frostina]

Loving it Anyta!1 and u r right!! i am a hopeless romantic!! I simple love the 'moments'!!

 

I dont expect them to go all hot and heavy so soon, given that paul's really stepping into unknown territory here, but the contrast was huge... lol

That's all

 

to the Q-Man!!

 

Waiting for the next one...

[Sara Alva]

Ooh, I really liked the backstory of Karl and Will's breakup. Something different than what I was expecting!

[AnytaSunday]

Loving it Anyta!1 and u r right!! i am a hopeless romantic!! I simple love the 'moments'!!

 

I dont expect them to go all hot and heavy so soon, given that paul's really stepping into unknown territory here, but the contrast was huge... lol

That's all

 

to the Q-Man!!

 

Waiting for the next one...

 

Ohhh, it might get more huge.

[AnytaSunday]

Ooh, I really liked the backstory of Karl and Will's breakup. Something different than what I was expecting!

 

Yeah, I want Will to be a sympathetic character. Who knows, maybe one day I'll write his story, lol. We'll see.

[Frostina]

Yeah, I want Will to be a sympathetic character. Who knows, maybe one day I'll write his story, lol. We'll see.

 

OOOOH really?? WOW!

you know u really shouldnt say things like this!! now i'm waiting!! looking forward to it.. so basically, i'm waiting not only for paul and Karl, but also for Will and maybe Heath from "Get it".. hmmm... that wud be nice!!