Davide

Your writing makes me feel the difficulty of the recovery, they was very well done. I'm raising an eyebrow on the name feeling like it doesn't fit. That combined with the lack of pictures makes it feel like there's more to it than normal amnesia feelings. I'm glad he found a family that are accepting oof gay people and even already have a gay son.

They way his internal thoughts work during this chapter was really cool. And a cute male nurse triggering a whole rainbow parade in his brain was funny.

(No one will see this comment months later and on the second page, but anyway.) Wow! That way that beginning part was written was so unique, I love it. The rest was great too, the writing was gripping. And, after later learning the extent of this teenager's injuries, it took a incredible mental strength for him to manage to drag himself out of there. The amnesia and the mystery of what lead to the accident is an interesting premise, let's see what you do with it.

What Olly did to Mack in the previous chapter was definitely wrong, he thought Mack was asleep, which would have made him unable to decide on whether to give consent. I just hope you all realize a main character doing something wrong doesn't mean the author thinks it's not wrong. Beyond this, it's hard for me to comment without giving spoilers for a later chapter.

I'm really sorry to hear about what happened to that guy, getting beaten up is awful. But I think Olly's situation is different because he didn't do this out of nowhere. Back in chapter 4, in a way that came natural in conversation, Olly said "“It’s not a prowl, it’s more like…what’s the worst thing that happens, even if I don’t know if a guy is into dudes…worst case they reject me and I’m embarrassed? Both Mack and Declan agreed with that and Declan went further by saying “I gotta broaden my strategy here, think more about doors opening that maybe I might not expect to…” This didn't guaranteed they'd be open to Olly making an advance, but I'd say it means they'd either say yes or reject him politely. Of course, if Olly got rejected once, he'd need to not make any further attempts with the same guy.

I'm way ahead of this chapter on Patreon, but I'm enjoying reading people's opinions. I also have the comments over there for that, but more is good.