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I have not commented for some time but wanted to say you have very much again peeked my interest in your writings with this story and especially the storyline of the last 2 chapters. The one thing that stands out to me in this chapter is the lack of Family checking on JJ's well being. Will chases Darius to express his anger/concern but we see nothing of his concern of JJ (other than a look at the dinner table). Brad seems to support Darius and has his plan to keep him safe but then has to bang his boy-toy's brains out again without even checking on JJ. This even though Brad keeps telling the Boy-Toy how important his family is... Really? Matt is supposed to be always so close to JJ but we have nothing from him and JJ in this chapter. Of course Wade feels he has a right to know about how Alex and JJ will go forward by prodding Alex. I know JJ is the Diva Bitch from Hell and realize there are space constraints in each chapter but with the cliff hanger of a possible return to JJ's past emotional and cutting issues we see no family member there at all when they know his past traumas. Maybe we will see something in the next chapter after Brad's emptied his nuts enough to finally check in on the kid or maybe after Will has also banged Zach for a few hours.

My review is short, simple and to the point....... A most excellent Chapter!!!!!!!

If Will was 16 or older I would vote yes. But with him being barely 14, I think that is just too young for someone to be emancipated. I think the court appointing a family member as guardian to be a more realistic option. Especially since there are many family member options available to the court.

I felt this was actually a better feel good chapter than the last chapter. Here Brad and Will actually reconnect by communicating. Plus Robbie and Will reconnect now that he knows and understands what Will was going through in his fit of rage. Since Robbie has a history of "Guilt Trips", one wonders if he will now have a new "Guilt Trip" over Will's lastest abuse. Robbie felt guilt over the whole Paris episode so realizing Martin's beating brought that pain back to Will would understandably bring back a Robbie "Guilt Trip". Will's flashback to Paris at the hands of Martin's abuse, I thought very realistic for anyone abused, sexually or otherwise.

Good and necessary chapter even though much less intense than the last few. As a reader it was as if I was traveling down the highway at 100 plus mph the last few chapters and then suddenly coming to a stop sign and asking for directions. At first I was surprised at the extent of Jeff's involvement in this chapter and then it made perfect sense. I don't remember if we know if Jeff was a runaway or was kicked from his home making it onto the streets and then the Mission. But either way that would have resulted from some rejection, hurt, or perceived lack of love from his family. Therefore, he more than any one of these guys, can relate to Will and his side of things, the hurt and rejection he is feeling. I was hoping to see a little bit of JJ in this chapter. Is he feeling guilt for turning on his brother a little and then losing his brother? Especially after Will was there for him after their mother's breakdown. JJ may also have had some interaction with Ryan at school to also see Ryan's reaction? What is JJ's attitude toward Brad and Robbie after losing his brother and seeing how mad Will is toward them? Ok, I am ready to move thru the stop sign and find out what direction we head in now.

Very interesting and I felt very good chapter for several reasons. One of which was the surfacing of Will's rape damage. I had felt he was being perceived in the story to be dealing with that issue a bit too easily. This chapter showed that the trauma from that was still there, lingering below the surface waiting for something to trigger his real feelings. The violence of Martin, though maybe hard to read, I thought realistically brought that out. Also I think many if not most teenagers have the thought of running away from home when that get pissed at their parents, though most never follow thru on those thoughts. I think that is just a normal teenage reaction. So Will's running way or wanting to run away would have been normal for a teen his age. I also thought that as an author Mark did a very good job of making the reader see and feel the multitude of emotions flowing thru Will, changing sometimes at light speed it would seem. From rage to loneliness, anger, purceived hatred, hurt, rejection, revenge etc... The ability to consistantly get one's character's emotions portrayed to the reader where the reader feels those emotions, is one of Mark's writing strong points. That was done well with Will in this chapter.

As a Sports Fan I very much enjoyed the chapter. Not just the interaction of the game but how the story characters, even as spectators, are incorporated into the action. Also the pre-game locker room drama really helped set up the game story in the rink and what followed after the unexpected win.

This is an extremely well written chapter. As a reader one can get a feel for the full range of emotions and conflict that are going through Wade, and the battle he is having internally trying to focus and deal with the situation he has been placed in with the one he loves. Even though Wade is the narrator one can also get enough of a glimpse into Matt to put multiple thoughts in the reader's head to wonder what is Matt thinking. I must say that this story has the potential for so many good storylines to continue to develop it has been a truly interesting read so far.

I agree it is not just about children. I mentioned children in my comment as an after thought for 2 primary reasons. First being that previous post in the thread mentioned the possibility of Will getting a girl pregnant. Second being that with the history of the CAP series one might expect Will to continue Brad's Bloodline as his natural son. My primary comment was to point out that it is very realistic for "many" GAY men not to have a heterosexual moment. I did not say most, half, or any specific percentage because I would have no idea of a correct number. I can see where it would be realistic and predictable for this family with the history of every main Gay character, male and female, having a heterosexual moment for Will to have one also. But from a non-fiction standpoint it would be very realistic for a Gay guy not to have a heterosexual moment. Maybe Will will be the first in the CAP series? I can also see where the bi-sexual readers of this series would be wishing for Will to have a heterosexual moment. I have found this new story very interesting so far and I am just sitting back enjoying the ride to see where it takes me.

Why does every Gay guy have to have a heterosexual moment? I do not find that particularly realistic. I know many Gay men, both of younger and older generations, that never had a heterosexual moment. Having a gay guy that did not have a heterosexual moment would seem pretty realistic to me. Many gay men of Will's generation will turn to surrogates by artificial means if they want children. That would be realistic.

I seem to remember that being mentioned when you asked for suggestions for Tiffany's last name in a past thread. Oh yell, I seem to even remember who suggested that.

Ahhhh, an unexpected "blast" from the past could be very interesting for this family. BTW, I did like Tiffany's last name and I am looking forward to how that plays out in the storyline.

Well this story should be interesting with playboy Cody and level headed Wade as Daddies, leaving both babies outside the normal family bloodlines we have seen in the CAP series. The first chapter would seem to setup an endless number of possibilities for drama.

After finally getting the picture to download I couldn't get past the HOT Body to really look at his face, even though this thread is "Faces for Mark's Stories". Hot guy.

Kick off my shoes, empty my pockets, and change into something loose and comfortable.