AranaDarkwolf

Chapter 3 has just posted! In the new chapter, we discover more about Remi's past, and what got him interested in law enforcement and the Bureau.

Andy, thank you so much. I suppose I will have to edit it to say the Delaware. Remi's motivations are explained in chapter 4 which I have yet to release. Chapter 3 is awaiting approval as I write this reply. As far as your spoiler, yes. You got that part right, though how will be revealed through out the rest of the book. Chapter 2 is, in fact, a flash back. I had done flash backs before when I wrote Castle Island, but the way they were done wasn't received well. The correction will be made shortly. I'm surprised that my partner, who grew up in Jersey, didn't correct me! LOL.

In chapter 2, we are given some background information about our antagonist. Chapter 2 can be found here.

In chapter 1 we meet both our protagonist and our antagonist. FBI BAU agent Remmington Montague is investigating a series of murders all with the same MO, and clearly was the work of a serial killer or killers. He is contacted by our villain who is revealed to be using a false identity, and the race against time begins. Chapter 1 of Malpractice can be found here.

*Bumps my lonely post, hoping to get more readers, or at least more discussion from my current readers*

For some odd reason, I can't post in eFiction Announcements, but I'd like to start a thread here anyway. Malpractice is my very first attempt at a full-length novel. It is a MA rated piece as there are scenes of extreme sexual and physical violence including, but by no means limited to rape and murder. There are a lot of plot twists already planned out, so I can promise it won't be a boring read. By all means, please be honest and brutal with reviews and comments. Constructive criticism helps me to grow as an author, so I welcome it.

Ok...I feel stupid, but what's NaNo?

I'd be interested. It would, if nothing else, keep my creative juices flowing even when I hit writer's block with other stories I'm currently working on.

That could definitely work, too. Just like Jim said, though, some kind of message or something to keep us in the loop would be nice.

Honestly, I'm with Jim on this. There should be some kind of notification saying, "We've received your submission. Please allow 3-7 days for full review. If we have too much to do in the queue, your story may take longer to be validated. Should this occur, we will notify you of the new expected wait time." Or something to that effect. Then, keep us in the loop! Let us know when our story has been assigned to a reviewer. Tell us when it's been approved and that it may take 24-48 hours to completely process. SOMETHING. Anyway. That's just MY two cents.

If my writing DOESN'T move me, I go back and re-write it until it does. I figure, if it doesn't move me, it won't move my readers.

Personally, I'm too much of a chaotic personality to work on just one project at a time. Right now, for example, I'm writing two completely different stories at the same time. One is a murder mystery/cop drama and the other is a sequel to the story I've already posted on GA, Castle Island. I think it's good to get all of your creativity out there, and if that means being chaotic and working on more than one story at a time, go for it. If getting all of your creativity out there means going balls out on one project at a time and moving on to the next, go for it. I find it more fun to work on two projects at once, though; I inevitably end up having elements from each one bleeding into the other. It makes for interesting plot lines.

I've only really meddled with flashing backward and forward in time in my own writing, but I've seen books in which the first "chapter" was more like a prologue written in third person and then the rest of the book switched to first person. If you look at "The Erotic Trilogy of Sleeping Beauty," Ann Rice, writing as A.N. Rocquelar actually manages to pull of the third person to first person and back again transition really well.

I think Keith's gay, just not out and proud gay. More like a "Will gay" than a "Jack gay." It would be interesting if the reason Pete came out was because he'd been with Keith and just wanted Keith to finally be proud of their relationship (kinda like Shawn is with Anthony). Though if there was a "Jack gay" character introduced, then he may be a good resource for any and all of the "Will gay" characters. In any case, I'm thoroughly enjoying the entire thing.

Another amazing story. Thanks so much for your work!

I don't even know what bishonen/kawaii/yaoi is, so I certainly didn't intend THAT. Although I like the idea Caedus had.

I could deffinitely see it in B&N or Borders! The cover art being two guys engaged in an intimate embrace, the backdrop white with a black star shooting across it, providing the background for the lovers who are softly lit by a seemingly sourceless dim light.

I enjoyed this chapter just as much as I have the rest of the book. I'm still left wating more and I can't wait for the week to go by.

This is a collection of my best erotic and love poetry. https://www.gayauthors.org/efiction/viewstory.php?sid=1687

My second submission to GA can be found here. Again, constructive criticism is welcome. Warning: Adult content, explicit sex and language. Michelle and Nikki have been working in the same office for quite some time, but Michelle's never really been able to speak to Nikki until one day whe Nikki asks Michelle out for drinks after work.

Thank you, Nephylim. I was trying so many new things with this piece. I hadn't written a story that jumped time like that, it was my first real piece of erotica, and not just a short sex story, and I was so concerned with making sure that I didn't go into too much detail that I fear I may have had not enough detail. The end I wrote and re-wrote at least 10 times, and I never could quite come up with something that had any real closure to it, so I finally settled on the ending that I have now. In any case, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Merry meet, and thank you to all of you who are making me feel so comfortable here at GA. My very first submission posted today, and I am beyond excited. Just so everyone is forewarned, Castle Island is an adult story with explicit sexual content, language and adult themes, so please, no underaged readers. Castle Island is also the first piece I've ever written that was longer than just a short story. I never organized it into chapters and I've never had anyone edit it, so it is a raw piece. I welcome any and all constructive criticism. Ok...on to what it's about. Alexis Montgomery is your typical college student in a cafe until she meets the Queen of Isla Castilla. Alexis is whisked away to Castle Island and discovers the mysteries of not only her own, but human sexuality. Now, she recruits new people to the Island. Little does she know, it's a dangerous business. https://www.gayauthors.org/efiction/viewstory.php?sid=1683 Enjoy!

Must we truly wait a full week between chapters? I don't read for long periods of time, and especially not on the computer, but I just spent the last 8 hours reading this entire story up to the last chapter posted, non-stop. Now I have to go smoke just because I'm that frustrated that there's not more to read! Curse you for being an awesome writer! Feel free to review the short story I've posted. It's my only one thus far but I plan to compile a bunch of my poetry into a book soon, so I'll post that as soon as I've finished. Thank you so much for sharing this amazing piece of work. I can't wait to see what happens next!