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Jó and I found Eiri in the kitchen shaking some ice cream off a slightly bent spoon into a bowl. He gave us a huge smile when he noticed us, but Jó nearly had a heart attack. My cousin had turned the kitchen table into a small battle zone, with one of the ice cream tubs ripped open and dripping melted red goo. A spoon bent to almost 90 degrees stuck out of it. The tub with the chocolate ice cream had its corners smashed and a brown stain on the table matched the shape of its lid. Two more bent s
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Thanks! I knew it was just an observation (if I was happy to tell important plot points to anyone who asked on a comment, what would be the point of writing the story?), but I figured I could let my evil side have some fun in the replies... I hope you keep enjoying the story!
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Well, the consequence of the rescue mission not going well is our dear main character being lost forever in the clutches of the demons and their mind control. We can't have that, can we? Can we? As for why Nessa has been targeted... You know when the villains have this big badass plan and they make the crucial mistake of revealing it all to heroes when it looks like they're about to crush the heroes for good, only for the heroes to use that ill-timed gloating to turn the tables? I definitely don't want that. So I won't be playing the bad guy here and reveal all my motivations in one quick comment. That said, that something weirder I mentioned to Wesley might be of your interest too. Just saying...
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You're welcome! See you next week for something... weirder? *building up expectations for something that will take at least 2 weeks to properly appear)
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29th January 1995 Dear Nessa (and Kris if you’re still there) The drilling has begun! Lydia is carving the tunnel as we speak! (or rather, as I write!) It might be a while to get to you, though, because we decided it would be safer if we started digging from inside the house. Lóránt removed some floorboards (the kitchen is a mess! It’ll be gre—————————-at cleaning it all up when we get back!) (I bet you felt my eye roll through the paper right now) At least this way we also a
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I'm glad you liked the scene. Kris has plenty of reason to hate/distrust Zhofie even more than Nessa, so it's unlikely he would be working with her on this. And unfortunately, the success or failure of the rescue mission will take a bit more than a scene to become apparent. We're about to stumble on to... something important... on the way.
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62 - Flashback, Flashforward
James Hiwatari commented on James Hiwatari's story chapter in 62 - Flashback, Flashforward
To be fair, I think Siggi is on the fence about Siggi... Glad you liked the chapter! -
Dmitri landed next to me on the bed. His hands fumbled not with my belt, but with my hair, taking my hairband away to let it flow freely down my back. “This is as safe a place as you can get, isn’t it?” The flowery wallpaper agreed with him. Gunnar had never stepped foot in Arnar’s house. “It’s been a while since I’ve been in this bedroom. I guess since you moved in with us?” “Probably.” “This room brings back memories, though, doesn’t it?” Dmitri grinned. Pulled me close until our shoul
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I feel you! Well, the next chapter will be here in a few minutes... hopefully by now you've had time to absorb the current situation... Does it help to say we're only sort of half way through the plot? (So technically they have as much time to fix the shit they broke as they spent breaking it...) I hope the next chapter comes out a little better than the last two...
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I agree Siggi is not the most likeable person in the universe and he does some pretty shitty things. That said, I am now curious about what you'll think after the chapter I'm about to post...
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29th January 1995 Dear Nessa and Kris Thank you for this comprehensive guide on the dangers awaiting in the demon’s lair. We found this extremely useful. Thanks to this information, we know exactly how to infiltrate and rescue you. Be ready. We should be with you in a few hours. As heroic and melodramatic as it would be to run the rescue operation on the last possible day at the last minute, in practice it only means delaying your rescue and prolonging your suffering for nothin
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Lóránt's pronoun is "they" - there's more to it than just a singular-plural difference... Isn't it great to look back to past scenes as we try to pin-point the exact moment when things started going downhill?
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Say that again when we get to 100... (Will we? *dramatic beat*)
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They definitely got a plan now. Kris helped them quite a bit with that. You now have a week to guess what that plan involves, and who (if anyone) might be a decoy. Or who (if anyone) will have to do an ultimate sacrifice in order the let the others escape...
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If she did it would be too easy. We can't have Lóránt just waltz there, pick up Nessa and Kris (one on each hand) and walk out as if they were just going for a stroll, can we?
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29th January 1995 Dear Lydia, Unn and Lóránt, This is Kris writing to you. Nessa cannot remember anything of the layout of the house. Zhofie's spell was so strong it wiped her memories of how she got here. Now I wish I had taken the time to teach you how to defend against that spell. If I had done as Lóránt said and sought other people's friendships instead of trying to deal with my issues on my own, we would not have to worry about you falling for Zhofie's trap. But Daisen should ha
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Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition Demonic Diary! Who knows at this point if even the author did? For all we know, the diary itself wasn't aware of its demonic nature until it become plot-relevant... Isn't that what great story-telling is like? (Jokes aside, it was planned. Though now that we're here I do think I could've done a little bit more foreshadowing...)
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Look at me, changing my comment reply strategy so I can actually talk about stuff said on the comments on a timely manner. (I'm still planning to say something about most of the older ones, I'm just prioritising the most recent stuff for now) I don't think Nessa and Kris understand why his family has kidnapped her either, so don't worry, it's a feature, not a bug. It turns out the diary is somehow magically connected to Nessa, so it manifests wherever she is, even if its physical body is somewhere else. It's because the diary is able to be in two places at once that Lydia and Nessa can send messages to each other. Handy power, eh? We'll see about the rescue when the time comes...
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Those definitely are... Which is no way implying that only those cops are dicks, of course.
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What was Siggi thinking? How was it worth for him to hurt his best friend just to make me look bad? I had been so careful not to say anything that would upset Dmitri, only for Siggi to come and use my own words against me, the words I told him because I believed I could trust his wish to help his best friend. Siggi betrayed me. He hated me that much, didn’t he? Hated me so much he didn’t care who else he hurt in his need to express it. Didn’t he see how Dmitri looked like his world had coll
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60 - Dinner Negotiations
James Hiwatari commented on James Hiwatari's story chapter in 60 - Dinner Negotiations
Thank you! I'm glad to know I wasn't the only one who missed those guys. And here's another regular update for you, so hope you enjoy this chapter too... sort of??? -
29th January 1995 Dear Nessa and Kris I’m sorry I didn’t check the diary earlier! I never really believed you would be able to write back… I’m so relieved for hearing from you that I can’t even question how this magic works! I gave Kris’s writing to Lóránt. Tomorrow is the deadline, the court case that will likely end with us being sent somewhere else and Lóránt stripped of their career. We tried to give Kris’s writing to the police, but they laughed at us, as if this was Lórán
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28th January 1995 Dear Diary and Dear Lydia and Dear Beloved Mother Deity and Dear Everyone Who Made this Miracle Happen I just read everything you wrote to me. Kris confirmed it is true about the spell, the mind control. I didn’t even notice! (Though if I had noticed the spell wouldn’t have worked, right?) I hope you can read what I’m writing to you in the same way I could read what you wrote me. And I hope you’ll look at the diary again before tomorrow, so you can see it soon
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60 - Dinner Negotiations
James Hiwatari commented on James Hiwatari's story chapter in 60 - Dinner Negotiations
Don't worry, Nessa's chapter will come along a bit later today, once I'm finished with my paid work. *says the one answering the comment while technically on the work clock - bad, bad Jamie!* And it's very, very bad that you think angry Gunni is hot. Haven't you heard a thing Siggi has been saying since the beginning of the story? Gunni is a little precious kid who is as innocent as a cherub and as naive as a little white flower in the meadow. Well, this is the beginning of Gunni's road towards growing up, so it's only as bad as you think it is to have the hots for a 17 year-old kid who's only about halfway into adulthood. -
“Is everything OK, Siggi? You made such a fuss about not want to waste time stripping, but now that I got your dick in my mouth, you don’t seem that much into it.” “It’s nothing. Keep sucking.” “Fine. I’ll make sure you can’t think of anything else, then.” ‘I thought you would be sensible enough to throw your feelings for me aside when I asked for help with your best friend.’ “Leave me alone, kid.” “Did you say something? I thought I heard you mumbling. Do you want me to do somet
