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One prolific writer on line got better with each story. His last work ended about chapter 102. It was a Si-Fi, fantasy, saga centered in the Hill Country of Central Texas. What I did was write my own chapter 103. I knew the characters and the story lines. I put icing on the cake. Star Trec has many spin off stories. I retired in December 1972 when I was 27. That's over 49 years ago. I've made it to 77. I got bye by my writing skills. My work product is almost non extent. I wrote business letters. Now I am what I avoided, if I live long enough, the first screen play will get green lighted, financed. It is said, 'the chances of that happening are between Slim and None, and Slim left town.' Well the business letters I write get the doors open to the biggest entities in the world. I know this note will not be read by more than a handful, but that's OK. Oh, I've only had two business partners over the years. One in the rag trade, now called the garment industry. He could put up a hundred million with no sweat, but I only will ask him permission to use his name as an executive producer. Why, because we are friends. I legally could use his name without his permission. I own his name. Years ago he asked permission to use his name for his law practice. Which was OK with me. I owned the company with his name. My first screen play is an 'Early 21st Century Cowboy and Indian Saga'. I now have the perfect title which is short and powerful. When a movie one likes a lot like say 'Back To The Future', and good story writer can write Number Four! Of course it will be better than Number One! For a writer, it is a challenge to keep a story going. Each new story line has its own direction. In this last chapter of Rich Boy, the JD was introduced, then dropped. The aunt/guardian might be mortally injured, but there was no lead up to such a crescendo, after so many decades of broken family history. The Uncle may be MORT, but if not, his dream of being President is gone. The top of the line Ducati, now the rider can dial the degree of wheelie it will max out at. 15%, 30%, 45%...... regardless of how much it is goosed. Long time ago at the CB in East Hollywood I chanced to meat one of Hollywood's most prolific screen writers. In a few minutes he told me what was needed to produce a good to great story. One, it must have poetic justice. The good guys must win. Second, it must be a happier story than the one the audience lives in. A movie that drains the humanity out, is not one that deserves a second watching. The hardest quality, the writer can not just have the characters show up all at the right time. Like a steak out where the cops don't have to use the coffee cups to piss in. It is a lot of work for the writer to take you through of how the steps fit together. Cops don't have the most dangerous jobs. They are # 22. Lumber Jacks are up there, so are convenience store clerks, maybe the guys who sit on the edge of a helicopter and play with high power lines. This was a fun enough story. I'll probably try to find another story of this very productive writer. His newer works should be better if he is growing in his trade. I don't know if he is published. Most books are much shorter than on line ones because it is a business telling a great story in a few words as possible. If you want to find some of the works of the Cowboy/Si-Fi/Fantasy writer go to Nifty and search for the author Waddie. Oh, I never give out my pen name. I can't have it attached to my own name. All over the LA Basin are 'screen writing' groups. None have as good works than I do, and most not as near as DKstory. I was not rich, and didn't have the need. I did own one of a hand full of Lincoln limousines in the early 1970s in the LA Basin. I have a couple screen plays I have never referenced to the point of the hook being discovered. It is simple but can only be used once, for real monetary benefit. I lost my editor because he is a passive aggressive 'taker', I wanted my Tuba back for just one day. He wanted $300 from me to get it back. He did have a valve repaired. However he knew I couldn't get mad at him, but he didn't know I had access to 'MAD'. He was happy to give it back after the 'talk' which neither of us mentioned. Years earlier I let him have an accordion he borrowed for a few years. It was he was also my computer tech guru. I love beautiful music, but I don't have a tune in me to come out. I believe I can analyze music and come out with powerful tunes. I can write the lyrics, titles can't be copywrited and I've played in a C&W shit kicking song. The latest is 'I've got two 'ass holes'! Funny but simple. I'd like to see how many readers access each chapter or story. A lot of the better on line writers will post on more than one hosting site. Many move on from Nifty, an often post first on the second place. Oh, a writer can burn out on a story line and years later, find more chapters. So three chapters of the third book may not be the last! When I post comments like this, it is often really meant as a slice of text which I save up for an autobiography, whether it gets put together or not.

Well, This is the first story I chose to read by Dodger. I guess I'll try another which was abandoned. This is understandable. I guess I'll select one which is complete or has enough of chapters posted to know the story goes somewhere. It's OK that nobody will read this chapter, two years along!

This is the beginning of a story that is just being filled in with main or important characters who haven't been intorduced yet. t I'm working on a SPEC movie script. It starts with five main characters being 18. Somewhere there will be a back story of them from the 1st grade through the 12th grade at the age of 14-15. I am guessing the author isn't British/ English because private schools are called PUBLIC schools there. In the early 1970s where I bought my first Lincoln Limousine, I saw a 59 Bentley Continental convertible in perfect condition for $9,500. Mine was one of maybe five in the LA Basin. In the same condition it would cost more than 10 times that. The difference, between the 59 & 65 are single to dual headlights. The only difference was the grill and many Bentley's had the grill, hood and rear badge changed, turning it into a Rolls! This could be a really good story, when I read the second chapter my hopes might be rewarded. This was a good start! Thanks .

Not a chance! Kids who lived their whole lives burdened with great wealth, are part of 'old money'. When kids have wise adults and an environment where all your friends are rich, there is nothing new. Lottery winners have a good record at wasting away in a few their winnings in a few years. In this story they must become 30 before the strings are loosened at the control, have time to mature. When anyone lives with acceptance with who they love, without guild, are truly lucky. Loosing parents leaves a big hole in ones soul, but with time, 'it gets better'. We often give feedback before our thoughts are examined. Being wrong is something we deal with almost daily. I have a friend who would be much richer if he didn't have the disability of having to believe that he is 'never wrong'. He couldn't keep workers, because he abused them by needing them to blame when things go wrong on the job. Things always go wrong, but he is a 'sly curmudgeon' It only happens to old men, but they work on it for decades. My friend only gets mad at those he thinks are below him. Those who mean money to him, he controls the anger. When there is great wealth, it is difficult to loose all ones assets. I do know a practicing alcoholic woman who lost one multi million dollar home, but my friend helped save one for her. She got a fair value of 5 million but the guy who bailed her out was able to resell it fast for a million or two more! Her teen aged kids were in private schools and she would miss those payments. I don't know what her ex husband played, but she's in LA, and he in Miami. I did not follow their development because I didn't know them. It is hard to write about as any character in a story, where the writer does not share the condition interest or exposure to. Good writers especially fiction, must spend a lot of time researching the story lines they want to develop. Si-Fi writers expose themselves to a culture which does not let them get away with 'sloppy science, physics, astrophysics.... Fantasy writers can build their unique world. Most Si-Fi stories are part fantasy and of course fiction. The way I judge a good story, it is a book or movie I like to revisit sometimes many times over. One reason, good writing often has more in it that the reader or watcher can absorb more there by rereading and rewatching. It is a compliment to the author when readers say, they would like the story to go on. I followed one Si-Fi / Fantasy story for a couple years up to when it stopped at chapter 102. I wrote my own chapter 103, following the story line and trying to figure out how the story would continue. It was on Nifty then another URL. I contributed information that the author appreciated and used at times. I found a viola on ebay for a quarter million dollars. I learned about the Busendorfer Imperial 290 97 key classic grand piano. You can find them on Youtube. Old ones that are maintained retain their value. They go for a hundred fifty thousand to a half million. They built one for Chopan. You can buy a new one, because they still make the model. Those who become prolific authors often show growth in being able to come out with ever much better stories which become a better read and with good editing, are more enriching. With close to 6,000 submissions, you're a veteran of something. I have only discovered GA, and it offers a lot that other hosts don't. I have a pen name, or moniker, but I never connect the two names. As far as the world is concerned, I write as myself, given name. I write as a writer. When I give one name, I never tell I'm also that one. One gets attention one is anonymous. Some writers enjoy feedback from readers. A good but difficult friend had his dissertation published. It was a tough or gross topic, burn victims. People who survived wanted to thank him for the good his book did for them. He could care less. His need was to get a PhD. In Junior College, some of his friends called him Doctor Shorty. They knew he would get a doctor's degree is something. It ended up being Sociality. He had fire line passes from the LAFD and LA Co FD. We had a business, Frequency International Group. We supplied warning devices on emergency vehicles. I had no interest in following fire trucks. He was a curmudgeon as a teenager. He got pictures of a large ship explosion on the cover of some Fire Fighters Magazine. He had an article rushed to publication because it was considered so important. I don't know if you will get this message or not. I got notices I recently had about five messages, but I don't know how to access them. I have not learned how to get around this site. If I read through all I have written, I will probably cut it down by 90%. Since I need to try to get a couple hours of sleep, I won't. I wish you and the author of BBB well.

70+ chapters cover 7 years 1 chapter covers 13 years Only one other story did this. It was the editor who announced the death of the author. A really good story in spite of major faults, "President's Son" on Nifty. No first child ever has just one Secrete Service body guard. BTW, America already had its first gay president. He wore frilly delicate shirts and satin tight pants. He fit in in the Victorian Era. His lover was a member of the cabinet, maybe the 'Secretary of War' and lived in the white house. The shrink profession hadn't found a name for buggery for another 20-30 years. He was known as the 'do nothing president #15, just before a president who only served one term in congress, so he couldn't have been very good! Yes, Abraham Lincoln, who slept 3 years in a bed with another guy, which seemed to be common for the time. He was known as a great public house drinker and dirty joke teller. Both this and that one were fun reads even if they left the readers wanting. Thanks for good reads. 13 years cover 1 chapter

It's been around for generations for the rich. A short history in the West. There was news story in the late 60s-70s, maybe in Newsweek, of a well known character like Henry Kissinger attending a camp in Central California where big shots would spend a week romping naked in the forest. It was very expensive maybe $40,000 and only for men, but no hint of sexuality discussed. That place may no longer exist. In East Central Arizona in the 1970s a place called 'Healing Waters' had an 1890s four story white clap board hotel, solid but unrestored in Indian Country, at mile marker 312, in the middle of nowhere, on the state road between Lordsburg and Apache Junction. Fine mud with micro small red worms is spread over the whole body. In a couple minutes in the sun, one would look like a hundred year old fart or hag. The chocolate body would crack in hundreds of stress fractures from slight movements. When washed off, ones skin would itch, because the oil on the skin was stripped. It was a non profit run group of hippies, with no charge to visit and nobody asked for a donation. Staying at the hotel cost something. I parked a 30' new class A motor home and had to walk in a few hundred feet. Bill Walton was expected and my vehicle made some think that he had arrived. A young woman and I walked in together, when we looked up, there was scaffolding, we both looked up and both started to laugh together. There was a skinny tall guy with one foot on the building and one on the platform. He was scraping the old paint. Of course he was naked, no tan lines, and in the heat, his dick and balls were flopping around as he worked. He was at least 30' up, and its a sight hard to forget. Now it is a nudist colony, called 'Eden'. Its traditional name long ago was 'old indian hot springs'. Its in a movie SPEC script I've been developing. It'll be 'green lighted'. Black beech is clothing optional, near San Diego, as is Pirates cove on the Palos Verdes Peninsula near Long Beach, and Pirates cove north of Malibu, where gay sex was easy to find in the cliffs in the 70s. Hot creak is in an mountain stream 1.7 miles east of the Mammoth Mountain Air Port. All state parks in Oregon are clothing optional. Signs are not posted to direct but caution the public favorite nude places. North of Austin Texas is 'hippy hollow' has 'skinny dipping' maybe on lake Travis. Hot springs in the Sierras and Rockies are known for nude bathing if they aren't commercial spas. Glenwood Hot Springs on interstate I-70 in the Rockies has a large old hotel in the town with a large out door naturally hot water. To the south a few miles is Aspin. Exit 25 just to the West had a rail road bridge over the tracks and the Colorado River. Up the wide unpaved forest road were springs around the first bend, with two tubs which held about a dozen people each. The upper one was warmer. There were always rumors that the local authorities were threatening to blow up the hangout. Maybe because the young people would hang out and smoke pot. It was always great in the winter, and one's body was erotic when a person had to sit up to cool one's body core down even with ice on the rocks. Steam comes off every square inch of the body. At night in limited light it is the most exotic. The rich and Republicans aren't for topless bathing for girls or nude bathing in public beaches because they have their own private resorts. Long ago there was a private resort only accessible by private airport that required one to have a million dollar plane to be welcome somewhere in a Western state. The story line of a nude corporate retreat is not a stretch but very doable today.

This is a good and fun read. However, it shows the writer's work product could be much stronger. One does not need to be what they write about, gay, young, rich, ethnic talker, smart..... However, reach can help to have one's work product grab, educate, entertain readers. The better the writer, the better editor that is needed. Editors help the writer cut the number of words and while helping improve the story line and make it a better read. It is a partnership. A good writer doesn't need 'kudos' from readers. A good writer can grow with candid feedback. However, an excellent on line, prolific writer considered his gigantic works as his children and was offended with a critique suggesting he could have cut his 1.5 million word work by half and had a stronger story. It would still be as long as the bible! He requested the feedback. I'll share the points I got from a very successful screen writer. It is what must be found for a good to great script. We were in the hot tub at night outside, next to the Hollywood Freeway at the CB/ Club Baths. I told him a joke I made up and gave away to a young guy who was a sound engineer in a Beverley Hills bar/restaurant on Beverley Blvd. He told me a good friend of his was a writer for Phyllis Diller. I told him she couldn't have joke writers because she uses the same 10-20 tired dirty jokes every time she was on TV. The joke was about her. He became speechless when I told him the joke. We were BSing, and he realized I told him the truth. He then said, 'my god she used that joke last Tuesday when she guest hosted the Tonight Show for Johnny Carson.' In today's money he'd be making six figures a week. I knew a fat old guy who lived on the strand in Manhattan Beach had a Mercedes convertible, wrote one of the all time most successful big budget movie scripts. I'm guessing he wrote much more. He was living high on the hog as a writer. That 3.94 square beach city near LAX has more homes sold over $1million each year, than any other city in California! LA is at least a hundred of times larger, so is the city and county of San Francisco. If there is any interest in the few rules of thumb, for producing a good to great piece of written work, let me know. They are easy to understand, but put a great burden on a writer, requiring research, making the stories easier to follow and be good to great reads but the burden on the writer requires mental discipline. Story lines that need help for the 'boy billionaire'......the teenager way of speaking, showing a brilliant incomplete brain, getting security right, getting rich right. If there is little or no interest, that's OK. I don't beg. Some of my most successful writing filled one page and had one reader. (often the work filled six or more pages before it was ready for prime time) I could have made this feedback to your story in less than a page. I will not post another, except maybe when it is finished, so good luck. If you want the few points on a private email or text message, I can do that. Much less than one page.