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Alright, boys, get to it and good luck! :]
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Chapter 11: Mana Dual, Part II
jamiiewhiite commented on jamiiewhiite's story chapter in Chapter 11: Mana Dual, Part II
I hope you can be patient with me. I won't have time to write for a while b/c of school. But if you can wait, you won't be disappointed! -
Chapter 11: Mana Dual, Part II
jamiiewhiite commented on jamiiewhiite's story chapter in Chapter 11: Mana Dual, Part II
Thank you so much! FF series are one of my favorite games!I take a great deal of inspiration from them among other things. I will try my best to meet you expectation and there will definitely summonings! So no worries. I appreciates your review and follow. -
The sky suddenly darkened as clouds rolled in above the courtyard. There was static in the air as the winds picked up. Thunder could be heard from above as the whole courtyard was entranced. Fayth lifted up his right finger and pointed at the ice sphere and drew it down in a slashing motion, “Thundaraga!” as lighting flashed across the darkened sky and multiple white hot bolts of lightning struck down onto the sphere, breaking it into hundreds of tiny pieces. The spell left a huge charred spot u
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It was just for fun and a way for me to see people preferences. Honestly it's not that serious. No one is saying it's a deal breaker if we don't get those traits. Obviously no one is perfect and I wouldn't want that to applied for me as well because I'm not perfect either. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, even when they don't know it. And I would like to point out, no one is making you make a 'list.' Don't act like you're so above knowing what you like. Just sayin'.
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Chapter 10: Mana Dual, Part I
jamiiewhiite commented on jamiiewhiite's story chapter in Chapter 10: Mana Dual, Part I
Part II is even cooler! Just you wait! -
The courtyard was filling up with instructors and students varying from underclassmen to upperclassmen who were on their break period, curious to see what was happening. It seemed like the entire Academy was congregating to view the upcoming event as word has spread. Fayth stood there stiff as a broad trying to hold it together. He knew now it was a plot to humiliate him. Mana Dual was never performed in the courtyard but in the arena. Head Master Joel wanted the whole school to witness the sham
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It was a long walk to the Academy from the Royal Palace. Glenn had already arranged means for transportation earlier, as they awaited them at the Wall of Everett. As Fayth, Evan and Glenn arrived at the Grand Entrance, it was already high noon. The three made it across the fifteen feet tall double wooden doors, made from Melbo Trees. Melbo is a wood so tough it rival most ores. The doors were also protected and enhanced by many enchantments just like the Royal Grounds and the Wall of Everett. Mo
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Okay, so this chapter was a very interesting one... the whole atmosphere seemed to shifted and in a ominous way in my opinion. For the characters and storyline I like to clarify. Lets recap, I feel like the rush of the relationship between Logan and Eric was just throw at me with no explanation. There was no development between the two and I feel at a lost. I would like to see more of a relationship built between the pair. I like to see more passion and friendship building other than the hot sex and money. The change in the setting was also confusing. It was like Logan embraced this new life and totally forgetting his roots. It doesn't seem to make him anymore likeable to me. Your use in "Great Lexus Chainsaw Massacre" was absolute hilarious. I also like the comparison of "Centre Courte in the Wimbledon." One thing I foresee is that Logan's blackmail is gonna backfire on him. Since Eric and him are now an item, the pictures are less credible. And I think Tori definitely have something up her sleeves. And seriously what does 'public' even mean?! Haha like who even uses it like that in the context I also wish someone to please lavaliere me! <3 #dreamcometrue. Logan still seems like a douche to me and he's on his way to become a top A d-bag. Fingers crossed. I'm not fooled by Tori's innocent act. She has definitely gonna take revenge you hear me! And Eric is gonna be the ultimate victim. He is by far my favorite character. Logan takes him for granted and does not fully appreciate what he has... The sex scenes where hot but again Logan is a lazy f**k. I feel like he gratifying only and doesn't seem to reciprocate. And I really don't like lazy sex. So one sided "Lower our carbon footprint" LOL. Logan, honest? Doubtful. He seems like he just wants to be apart of "crowd," not like his attitude from the previous chapters and I guess that's why I've like him even less. He so easily changed to someone he's not. Let's hope he sees the errors real soon. He's hardly "one of them" or rollin' in the deep." LOL. All in all the chapter was a success even if it was all about the riches and glamor. I would like to see some soul and heart in the upcoming chapters though. I hope I wasn't too harsh. The story is filled with drama, which I eat up. I wouldn't be so critical if I didn't love it! Nice job and can't wait to continued this hot mess! -Jamie
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Well that was one intense chapter. I'm finding that I have mixed emotions of Logan now. Yeah Tori is a bitch but I hope her brother doesn't get turn in the cross fires. One things for sure, I didn't know there was an app for that. I guess there really is an app for everything After that one, I'm sure a drama storm is about to strike and what's left is anyone's guess. Logan better watch his back. I hope he doesn't turn into a douche. Again great chapter, -Jamie
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“You look overwhelmed,” a voice said behind me. I turned to see a welcoming smile and bright blue eyes against dark features. I was a sucker for creative facial composition and everything about this boy’s charming face was creative. His nose was slightly larger than a plastic surgeon would consider appropriate, but it fit his chiseled face and square jaw perfectly. His dark hair was softly fingered back, creating a flip that could easily be shaken off his face. And then the eyes. Bright blue, see right through you, eyes. Deep blue, dive right in, eyes. Piercing, f**k me gently, eyes. This is my favorite paragraph in this first chapter! I think you did a fine job in description as well as what I will be expecting from the rest of the story. Great start, its witty and classy. The character seems knowledgeable to his surroundings and you write with such style and heat. Makes me want to pour myself a glass of wine and hold out my pinky first. Keep up the awesome work! -Jamie
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Chapter 8: Playing the Part
jamiiewhiite commented on jamiiewhiite's story chapter in Chapter 8: Playing the Part
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Fayth woke up to find that he was in a warm embrace. Startled, he was confused and disoriented as to where he was. But a warm smile soon washed over his young face when he realized who was holding him. He was spooned from behind, wrapped in sturdy strong arms. One was around his chest as the other around his waist. He sighed contently and turned over to dig his face into the crook of Evan’s wonderful arm. He took in the sweet clean scent permeating all around him. It was heavenly. As he wrapped
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I'm generally a very sound sleeper. Not really light but not really deep either. For the most part I'm lucky enough to be bless with sleeping soundly most nights. I really have no trouble at all. My head hits the pillow and I'm out until my alarm wakes me up. Generally I'm most comfortable in my own bed. But it's a whole new story if I'm in a different surroundings. For as long as I can remember, I have always slept with a hugging pillow. I'm not really sure what's its called technically but its very comforting. Since I was little I've have always slept with one and its gives me a sense of security to be able to hug something to myself. Its supposed to be really good for you back to as well. With it, I think I've have trained myself to sleep very naturally. Another thing you can think about is a new mattress. My parents sleep on one of those Tempurpedic mattress. My father is a firefighter so he has trouble sleeping all the time. But since we got the mattress its has really helped him out. Hope this helps!
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I am hot off the press, Dot Matrix. Live in now, not bother with the why. Not concern about the how. For the most part, I don't really agree. I do live the 'now' but I question about the 'why' and 'how' all the time. Thanks for sharing.
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Chapter 7: Messengers from Evergreen
jamiiewhiite commented on jamiiewhiite's story chapter in Chapter 7: Messengers from Evergreen
Will do! And I'll think about another name -
It had been a very long night yet King Kailan still couldn’t sleep. This mind was racing and there was still so much to do. Looking back to the night’s events he still couldn’t believe what had occurred. He was a confused mess. He thought bringing Fayth down into the Antechamber of Trails would help reveal some sliver of truth, but it only brought back was a man named Evan and more questions to be answered. King Kailan sat at his desk within his personal chambers. In front of
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Hey guys, Just wanted to know what's been stuck in your head lately. What you been listening to. Give me an artist(s) or band(s), I'm looking to expand my library. Here's what I been listening to as of late: Here's more since GA won't let me embed anymore: Jack Johnson, Sara Bareilles, Can't wait to see what's GA been jammin' to!
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Thanks, I'll ask about it. I think its a cool idea, simple but classic
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Dude Trev, that's pretty sweet! I have to see about that! Its still buzzed (something I'm conforable with) but a little updated. Thanks man!
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Hey Guys, I have a hair appointment this Friday with a new salon and a new stylist. The problem is that I've been going to his one place with the same stylist for the past five years! My old stylist moved to a new location that is too far away. I am very nervous to say the least because I'm very particular with my hair even though I wear it buzzed most of the time. I wanted to get everyone's opinion what I should do to it. It's at a medium length and its pretty straight. How should I get it cut? And style? If you guys can post up pictures of style trends, that would be most welcome too. I'm tired of the old boring buzzed cut. I hope I don't sound like a drama queen, I'm not usually this dramatic. Thank ya'll, Jamie
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I wasn't expecting for them to sugarcoat anything. I was not surprised or offended. I am not so ignorant to not know the world. I maybe sheltered but I am not stupid. And I do not act as if I am an expert. If anything this whole discussion has gone off topic. It is not what I originally asked.
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And I completely agree with you. I just thought what you said earlier had nothing to do with what I was saying. I feel you man. Its a horrible world out there sometimes
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I can safely say that if I did confront her, I am sure we still would be friends. I was just confused to why she might have thought that but you make a good point. Thanks for the luck
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I have to say I'm not completely sure what you are getting at. Is it the whole nature vs. nurture argument? I can understand that evironment plays a role in it maybe. I am not an expert or that I claim to be. I'm just as confused to it as how it happens. But from my upbringing, I had a very stabled if you will environment. I was adopted at a very young age to a very loving and 'straight' parents. We are basically the all American family. I'm am an only child. I grew up with a normal childhood. I played sports and join the band. My parents all supportive. It was straight as straight lifestyle can get. All of my friends are straight as well. I live in the south of the United States and if anything I'm very sheltered to the whole gay community since I live in the 'bible belt.' But in the end I know I"m gay. I'm not sure if the environment has to do with anything but I could be completely wrong. I will agree that not everyone is born the same way and things happen in the environment to change you perception. Like I say I am not an expert. I'm sure people can 'change their mind' if you will due to their environment. You make some really good points and I will take them into consideration.
