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Another great chapter. It's so like Michael to bluster in on Kendall and not think about the consequences. Kind of why I like character so much. He wears his heart on his sleeve. And I love how Chet sees more than simple friendship in Michael's response to Kendall, and because he is such a good guy, even to his own detriment, carefully brings it up with Kendall. Only to get shot down in flames, poor man. Excellent as usual. Keep up the good work. Brian

Brilliant chapter, Gary. So refreshing to have approving and supportive parents like Michael's shown in a story, not only sympathetic but encouraging him to uncover his feeling, identify his sexuality. And also a great ending with Michael coming to the realisation that he already is in love with Kendall, already has a relationship with him. So the playing field has been set. Who could not want to go straight to the next chapter after reading this. Great work, as usual, Brian

Hi Gary. Another great chapter that peels away at Kendall’s conflicted emotions over his decision to remove Michael from his life. Great in the way you show how physical things, such as places and activities, can be changed, but the emotional attachment to them cannot. Also how people such as Sandy and Chet are always there in the background and will have spotted the closeness of the two friends. Chet was a nice diversion in the story, seems like a really together and extremely hot guy, and had it not been for the fact that I am still rooting for Michael to wake up and smell the Kona blend, I might have liked the idea of the two of them hooking up. Thanks for the read. Brian

Not only a lovely story, but well written and with a heart firmly in the right place. Of course, it's also one of those endearing stories where you want to know so much more about what happened before and, especially, where this goes afterwards. Beautiful. Just beautiful.

Such a pleasure to read your writing. Michael is turning out to be a true friend and probably much more. I love the way he pre-empts all the things that Kendall is planning on doing - changing coffee shops, gyms, etc. And I can see how it makes Kendall crazy even though it is done with the best intentions. Great little story at the end, too, about how Michael nursed him when he was ill. All building the emotional impact of the story stage by stage. Keep up the great work.

Another good chapter. Michael deciding to fight to keep his best friend is powerful and right. His interaction with Candy was a good way to let the reader see--through his thoughts and feeling--his realisation about the difference between her ten cent version of love and what he feels for Kendall. Good job. You could have used this chapter to show more of the cop coming out in Michael, being more directive with Kendall when he is sitting feeling sorry for himself behind the wheel of his truck. Your call, of course. Then you could have let the emotional part play out back at the apartment. The ending was also a bit abrupt, I thought they would have a much longer conversation about Kendall's admission. Not sure how you're going to take this story but I imagine at some point Michael is going to realise his feelings run deeper for Kendall. Right now, however, it might have been nice to have Michael leaving with the intention of going out to a different bar and getting laid - but then finding he can't, because his mind is still on his friend.

Excellent. Such a brilliant way to start a story, to bring the reader straight into the conflict of emotions between these two well defined characters. This is seriously a darn sight better than any of the published books I have read recently. The only thing I'd suggest, something already mentioned by another reviewer, is breaking the paragraphs down a little (not changing any of the content, which is excellent) just to make this an easier read. Onto chapter two. No pressure, but I hope it's as good....

Hi Robert. I appreciate you've posted quite a few chapters already but it would be wrong not to start from the beginning. A good set-up to the story right from the off, hard-hitting action followed by nice exposition, with plenty of ways you could take this story forward. Having the safety of the boys to consider and not just having the protagonist dealing with this on his own leaves me more invested in the plot. Looking forward to more action and seeing how you weave in the romance angle.