coffeejunkie88

I wanted more instantly. I really hope you continue this!

So, I waited until I got to the end to review the story. Other than the obvious spelling and grammar issues, I think this story was missing something. It seemed too choppy in places. I get that the Steve thing is a set up for Steve/Tony's story. However, I felt like there was too much tell and not enough show. I couldn't picture what was going on in my head a lot of the times. It felt like I was being told a story second had where some of the key details are missing. The story concept was great though. I think with some reworking, this could be a great story.