Stellar.. I just spent the last two nights soaking in this treasure through midnight eyes. Thank you so much for all the work you put into Hidden Sunlight. I had to go to work half way through, but I went through my day feeling strengthened at the idea of such noble characters, facing such dark challenges, and the possibility of love and hope prevailing against all odds.
The way you paced the chapters was riveting, with big gulps of despair and bright hopeful hooks. Thank goodness I found Hidden Sunlight in complete form. I found it hard to stop reading.
It is fascinating how human colonies might evolve around different cultural and environmental factors. While the whole book is about one such story, your Epilogue opened up that kind of exploration for 13 other colonies and the sketches of your larger Universe get me excited to read more.
Your description of characters and settings came alive from the way you described them (in fact it triggered video game memories - Metal Gear? Silent Hill clues? Haven't played Half-life...).
It's easy to get attached to Mira and Shay from the way you dive into their emotions, but even better, the emotions of Mira and Shay are a crucial part of the solution to a scientific puzzle; it would have seemed a bit too alien-programmed if they had just fused together with no resistance but Shay's shyness provided that. I did think a few times that Shay comes close to taking Mira's devotion for granted, but he never fully loses his wonder about it, and why begrudge him the love and confidence that supernatural-dom brings him? The first few times that Mira speaks are moving because of their rarity and brevity ("we", "no", etc.) The revelation that Mira and Shay are some kind of defiling force for the virus, its Song, its arbiters and its hinted evolutionary architects is a gritty anti-hero move which made me grin.
Konstantin Is my favourite character because of his humanity, principles, fearlessness, platonic/paternal love, and kick-butt abilities. That he would choose a farm, not a fortress, as a haven is logical and personally endearing.
At the beginning of Leagues of Night, Shay says he would leave Memorial Accession Plaza with a concrete lesson: "Power - real power - shows a person's true nature". I'm curious what you believe that whole episode shows about Shay's true nature. Perhaps that he is still a bit immature, even as he realizes he is an adminstrator to the core? I kept on wondering why he didn't try to heal everyone by burning away the virus, instead of throwing buildings around and setting off orbital nuclear detonations.
I'm glad to have discovered your creation here. It's inspiring. I vote for sequel next.
Lathe