Comicality

Wednesday - You know what's weird? Sometimes I feel like I have a bunch of these automatic 'habits' that pop up all on their own and do whatever they want without me even knowing about it ahead of time. Like...some kind of weird social survival instinct. Does that make me a bad person? I don't mean to do it, honestly. It just sorta happens sometimes. I saw Stevie in the hall today. We were basically just passing each other. We've done it a million times before, and even though we weren't nec

Caution: This one does have some disturbing content. So be advised. Any comments? Feelings? Did you like/dislike? http://youtu.be/IFFN8Vh3VdM

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Taryn and I found two small chairs behind us, and we sat down with a slightly uneasy feeling. Except for the glow and occasional flicker of the monitors behind our host, the room was so very dark. Large, iron walkways hung over our heads, stairs leading to the basement level. The buzz of mechanical contraptions, lightly humming in unison. And then there was Erick... Even while silhouetted in darkness, his boyish beauty was evident. A playful beauty, void of arrogance or pretense. Natural, with

The first one is "Fitz", a comedic short film that you might like: http://youtu.be/rwOAKcdSt9U And the second is "Latch Key", just for giggles: http://youtu.be/fYsjiZxlO1g More on the ComicalityShack YouTube account! Check it out, and feel free to comment!

Hope you like it.... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/comicality/thesecretlifeofbillychase7/13

Tuesday - I woke up in the middle of making a mess this morning. GOD, I hate that! I'm fifteen for crying out loud. Does this wet dream thing ever just stop or...'go away' or something? I honestly think AJ put a curse on me. He's some kind of demon, and he's actually invading my dreams like Freddy Krueger! I can't even stop thinking about him when I' unconscious. Still...it was pretty hot. Very simple. We were naked...me, and AJ, and Robin. Standing up in the center of his room, trading sof

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Monday - I worked my ASS off on my homework this weekend. And you know what my teacher did? She said, 'thanks'...... 'Thanks'. And then she tossed it into a pile of other papers with classmates that I'm sure she told the same. 'Thanks'. A word here. A sentence there. A grade written on a test in red ink. What a half ass handjob THAT was! I swear this end of the semester bullshit is like the most depressing, most emotionally draining, part of any teenager's life. And they wonder why we go s

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Feel free to check out the newest chapter on the "Blood Bank" site! And thank you all for the reviews and emails so far. I really worked *hard* on the updates for this month, and it means the world to me to know that you enjoy them. Thank you! "GFD: Dead Language 2" http://gfdbloodbank.com/stories/gfd-short-stories/gfd-dead-language/chapter-2-16 And be sure to check out the FIRST chapter down below! "GFD: Dead Language 1" http://gfdbloodbank.com/stories/gfd-short-stories/gfd-dead-language/chapter-1-22

This week's short is called "Keel", and I hope you guys like it.... http://youtu.be/kEelqW_y2Ww

Two new "GFD" goodies have now been posted on the "Blood Bank" site! "GFD: Fanboys" http://gfdbloodbank.com/stories/gfd-fanboys and "GFD: Bloodstained Duet" http://gfdbloodbank.com/stories/gfd-bloodstained-duet More to come! So stay tuned!

Enjoy, folks! And if you stop by to give this completed story a read, be sure to let him know what you think! https://www.gayauthors.org/forums/topic/35747-review-unaccompanied-minor/

After years and years of weirdness, I am happy to say that I am FINALLY getting the chance to review a story by Cirrus! This has been a long time coming, and after a few past mishaps, you'd think I'd be anxious to rip my NZ buddy a new one! LOL! But nope! I can honestly say that I enjoyed this story from beginning to end, and the time and effort that he put into every sentence shows in the writing. I will definitely say that Iwas truly impressed by "Unaccompanied Minor", and while the ending was perfect s it was, if he ever felt the need to continue on with the story, it wouldn't be dificult for him to pick it up right where he left off at all. The story starts with 14 year old Liam, who is flying all the way around the world to continue his family's big move from New Zealand to England. Being an unaccompanied minor, flying without an adult present, gets him seated in a certain part of the plane. While at the airport, he comes across a young cutie named Devon, who luckily seems to be heading his way. And as an unaccompanied minor himself, the two boys end up sitting together for a very VERY long flight. And then sharing a room together during an overnight layover in Korea. What transpires from that point is a very sweet and lovable story. You want to fall in love with these characters. You cheer for them every step of the way, the shy sweethearts that they are. The situations are believable. Not rushed. And Devon makes me smile. Can't help it. I've got a bit of a shy guy fetish myself. Hehehe! Also, Liam and Devon have some very 'interesting' tastes for their Kindle reading lists. Hehehe! :: Bows For Cirrus :: That, we'll talk about later. But you know you're my buddy. Always. And thank you.... Now, I'm not really a big fan of using parentheses in stories. And if they are used, I'd saydo so sparingly. But that's my personal preference. As I reader, I'd say to maybe cut back on that a little bit, as usually a comma works just as well. Also, there were a few scenes that were detailed in the 'narrative' sense, but seein as the characters were so adorable, I kind of wanted to se them interact more with their dialogue. Like, there's a part on the plan where the story tells us that Devon is telling Liam about his backstory. I want to HEAR that story. I want to hear it from his lips, in his voice. How does he tell it? How does he feel about it? I think there were a few parts in the story where the narrative got the job done, but a little more personal dialogue between the boys would have given it even more of a flare. Like the spa pool scene, extending that just a LITTLE bit longer with a few bashful flirtations and giggles could really give everyone reading a warm feeling in the stomach. Those emotions are there, I say just polish them a little bit. It'll leave people grinning from ear to ear. One other thing that I noticed... If I were Cirrus, for a story like this one, I would avoid the 'C' word. Now there's nothing wrong with mentioning 'cock', hehehe! Not at all. But for this particular story, I think I would have gone a different way with it. It sucks trying to come up with different ways to say it that A) Don't sound vulgar or cheesy, or Don't sound as though you pulled them out of a medical book, but finding a few other terms for that sexy tool we're all drooling over can sometimes help to keep things consistent. It wasn't bad, but I noticed. Because it was a really sweet 'PG-13' type of story, and that kinda bumped it up to 'XXX' in a hurry. I thought the sexy parts of the story were beautifully done, but....the ONE word...sometimes it makes all the difference in how readers react to the story as a whole. So there you have it! My first Cirrus review! This was th result of his 'Writing For 30 Days Straight' challenge, and he created something that I thought was really heartfelt and engaging. So check it out when you get a chance. It was a submission in Imagine Magazine, Issue 13 (http://imagine-magazine.org/im-online/volume-13/unaccompanied-minor/)! Give it a read, and comment and let him know what you think!

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Sunday - I saw Stevie today.... I think I did it mostly because I called Brandon this morning...and found myself getting really really nervous over the sound of his voice. I mean...the feeling was almost exactly like it was the first time I ever talked to him. That really mushy, queasy, jittery feeling in the center of my stomach. That chill. That full body buzz. Wow....I thought I had gotten over all that weirdness with him. But the second I dialed his number and heard the first ring, I fel

This week's review is up! Enjoy! (I remembered to link to the story this time! ) The review is here: https://www.gayauthors.org/forums/topic/35702-metropolis-review/

If you've only been reading it here and not on the Library, my apologies for the delays! The "Billy Chase" series is now caught up to chapter #310! So enjoy !ALL of the "Book 7" chapters can be found here - http://www.gayauthor...feofbillychase7 More to come soon! And grab your ebook KINDLE versions today at http://www.imagine-magazine.org/store/comicality/ !!!!

What do you do when you're stuck in the middle of the complete and inescapable breakdown of society as we know it? Darion's story, "Metropolis" attempts to offer a glimpse at an answer.<p> The story takes place nearly 100 years in the future, and civilization has seemingly fallen prey to the clutches of anarchy. Wandering pillagers, military forces, hardcore rebels...with the exception of a few safe zones, the world itself has pretty much fallen to pieces. And this is where our story begins. Our protagonist, Brent Gibson, is a 16 year old boy who is stuck in the middle of this world. Living with a hard working father, his younger brother, Daniel, and mother who is suffering the last stages of a returning cancer...Brent is simply trying to keep his head up and do what he can to survive.<p> Then....tragedy strikes. There is a huge prison outbreak that the Felix Registration Security guards cannot seem to contain. Some of society's worst criminals are free to roam the streets, and the situation has gotten so out of hand that the part of the city they live in has been forced into a swift and immediate evacuation. Caring a great deal for their children, Brent's parents send Brent and his brother along to a mysterious family member that they had no previous knowledge about. The mother is too sick to go along with them, and the father stays behind to help take care of her until the current crisis passes.<p> Our story begins from there, and while I did read a little bit further, I've got to confine my review to the first five chapters. So, as everyone knows, I'm a big stickler for detail as I feel it builds character. And characters build storylines. I think "Metropolis" has an AWESOME setting and a feel to it that could really be used to create an emotional ride. A teenage boy, trying to take care of his little brother in a strange place, and separated from his parents for the first time (one of them seriously, maybe even terminally, ill)...and having those parents being trapped in a virtual war zone? That's genius. I think the possibilities are endless for a story like that. And then....enter 'Mark Kelly', and things get even juicier from there. <p> However, I think there are a few ways to strengthen the actual 'connection' to the main characters. So when the shit hits the fan, it has an even bigger emotional impact on the reader. I'm actually really intrigued as to what happened to make the world the way it is in this story. What major even happened to turn the tide and cause this unraveling of civilization as we know it. <p> Don't get me wrong, I think it was a great artistic choice to just thrust the readers into this apocalyptic world and let them deal with it as the main character deals with it, but I think just a FEW more sentences about what actually happened to light the fuse to this powder keg would really help to further create the potency for the mood and setting in a story like this one. The thing about certain parts of science fiction, in my opinion, is that you have to create and quickly explain the futuristic folklore behind it. You have to get everyone on the same page so we can all say, "Oh, that's how things work in this world. Ok, gotchya." Darion does a good job on this as the story progresses and evolves over time, but I think a few quick punches in the beginning would help to hook the readers and pull them in to the story he's telling. <p> I do love the closeness of the family, and Alan Chapman, the older gentleman that lives next door. the father works to keep things together, and Brent has to take care of his little brother and sick mother, which is addressed in a few instances in the story. That's got to be hard on a teenager. I think that's an emotional side of him that could be explored a bit more. I sympathize with this character. And that's awesome to have happen when you're reading someone's story. I think that could be explained more in detail. A boy going through something like that might be a bit conflicted, tired and weary...he may even develop occasional feelings of resentment for being forced into that situation. I think taking advantage of opportunities like that will create a stronger involvement with the main character and the story itself.<p> Darion's writing has a visual appeal to it, and you are definitely getting a feel for what's going on. I would just love to se him step into the shoes of his characters and really flesh out certain parts of the plot. All of the elements are there. Just expand. What is it like being stuck in the frantic hysteria of a city wide evacuation? What is it like to talk to your mother on a video screen, knowing that danger is just outside her front door and that he could lose her at any moment? What is it like to sneak past the violence and chaos in the streets? More more more! This story brings up a lot of intense situations, so I'd love for Darion to pour all the emotion and intensity that he can into every paragraph. Go for broke! Because I think the premise alone is the beginnings for a really epic sci fi saga!<p> Also, Darion...watch for stuff like this. I know, because I do it all the time myself: <b>"The only untouched part of the <u>city</u> is in the southeast part of the <u>city</u>. Evacuees are being led out of the <u>city</u> as we speak."</b> When you go back to edit, try to keep from using the same word more than once. I, personally, have to keep a thesaurus next to me at all times when I write. I actually have an old one that my grandmother bought me years ago. I like having an actual 'book', because I can thumb through the pages in a search for one word, and I'll come across an even <i>better</i> word by accident. But it's just as easy to find a free Thesaurus online. Try something like: <b>"The only untouched part of the <u>city</u> is in the southeast <u>areas</u>. Evacuees are being led out of the <u>the chaos</u> as we speak."</b> It just keeps the sentences from sounding the same. Keeps the flow of the story smooth.<p> So there you have it! Darion's "Metropolis" is a story that you can seriously get into once you start reading. And stick with it...because things take a few more turns as the story goes on. <p> "Metropolis" is a COMPLETED series (I believe it's about 15 chapters), and can be found at The Chat Shack (http://irc.shackoutback.net/index.php?option=com_content&view=category&id=139:qmetropolisq&Itemid=124&layout=default) Stop by and let him know what you think!<p>

Saturday - I spent most of my day today feeling torn between my thoughts. Both good and bad. I didn't even leave the house for anything other than taking out the trash. I feel so....soooo very drained. Not like...an actual exhaustion or anything. It's more like I'm 'missing' something. A spark. That little extra something that made getting out of bed in the morning an exciting experience. That thing that motivated me to look at a sunshine day and think that there was something outside for me

Friday - It burns. This feeling inside. It burns, and it's getting hotter all the time. I wonder if this is what it's like for Dr. Banner in the beginning stages of turning into the Hulk. I totally messed up on two of my tests today. A 'C-' and a 'D'. I think I've been trying to do so much that it's hard to concentrate on school that much. It's coming up to the end of the school year. Only a month and a half left. And if my grades are too low my mom will send me to Summer School to make up

Thursday - I had this weird dream last night. I don't remember much of it, but it was just some faded old memory about my mom and dad taking me to this huge amusement park, and having me drag them to every fright inducing ride that I could find. I remember how...happy we all were back then. I remember them being so close, sharing the occasional smooch, smiling from ear to ear as they watched me having a ball. Things seemed so easy back then. I can barely remember where the road forked anymor

Wednesday - I think I'm a terrible person sometimes. But this time it wasn't just because of something that I did. It's also because I don't feel as bad about it as I thought I would. I'm almost trying to punish myself, but I just...I don't feel the guilt and anguish that I should be feeling. What is this all about? Sometimes it's ok to feel selfish, and sometimes it isn't? Sometimes it's ok to hurt people, and sometimes it's not? People matter, I matter....but what happens when both sides

Tuesday - It rained today. Maybe it was the grey skies and damp clothes that had me feeling kinda down all afternoon. Well...not even 'down' really, just...blah. Some moods just weren't meant to be explained I guess. I just have a lot going on in my head. Concentrating on schoolwork seems to get in the way. I just think real life and school don't always mesh like they're supposed to. The whole school is whispering back and forth about what happened to Stevie. Even though nobody came right ou