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Thanks! Yup, the Furballs are finally here after much suspense
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I know I have a rainbow flag in here somewhere...
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Chapter 10 By the end of our sixth day inside the bunker I had started feeling a certain shortness of breath and hints of lightheadedness if I stood up too quickly. I tried not to think about it, but the realization that our air was running out made the space seem ten times smaller. I started catching myself staring at the walls around me, but particularly at the ceiling, as if checking whether it had moved closer to my head while I wasn't looking. Jim and I weren't talking to each other. I
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Thanks for reviewing!
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Thank you. You're right, things have taken a turn for the worse now, and I'm glad it comes across through the narrative.
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Yup - hopefully the bleakness isn't too off-putting, but I did want to convey the seriousness of their situation.
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Thanks!
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Chapter 9 The first night I spent in the bunker with Jim was horrible. The storm still raged outside, and Jim hadn't been joking when he'd said that even the domes had a hard time withstanding the fury of the elements on Tantalus. Our own dome had been dashed to pieces by the bombs, and I got to hear every groaning wrench, snap, and rumble as the debris outside was bent and twisted by the storm. The lights were off to conserve power, and as the incredibly long night progressed, I found my
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You're welcome! Thanks for the support!
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We'll find out soon enough
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thank you for the compliment, Isaac!
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yay! the panic attack was a success!
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Thanks a lot for the review, and the like!
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ditto on the claustrophobia - I think it shows!
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ditto on the claustrophobia - I think it shows!
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Thanks for the compliment! As for the fight explanation, it's coming very soon
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Chapter 8 BOOM. "What the hell was that?" I asked, as the echoes of what sounded like thunder on steroids faded away. "I don't know. Let me check," Jim asked. I heard him stand up but I couldn't see anything. There was a sound of Jim's boots on the floor, a chair being scraped back, then the tapping of keys. I tried to go sit on the nearest bunk bed but ended up tripping and falling on my face. "Ow." "You okay, Kyle?" "Fine," I said, rubbing my chin. For some reason, not being able to see
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An in-depth, thought-provoking analysis as always. Thanks!
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Cool! Can't wait to read more of your awesome furballs
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Hmmm, time alone you say? Next chapter might bring a little surprise!
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Thank you, Robert. I like using description in challenging environments, like when there's no light, because it forces you to reevaluate how much your perception of the world can come through other senses.
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It's great to read how everyone is siding with the Furballs ^^
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Thanks - coming next Monday!
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Thank you! Glad you found it exciting
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hopefully this will redeem Jim in the eyes of readers - or not
