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Chapter 5. The Deal Trapped. I tried to move, but my arms and waist were fastened to the wall somehow, on either side of me. Carefully, mindful of the pain in my head, I looked down. Thick metal straps held me tight to the wall, two on both of my forearms and a single big one around my waist. They were what was keeping me upright and seemed to be part of the wall somehow. I struggled against them but they didn't budge. I was beaten, helpless, and before my eyes Andy was free to hack into th

I get the feeling that I've stumbled upon a rich, detailed world that reaches far beyond the confines of this awesome story. It was amazing. The introduction scene in particular managed to keep a steady flow of tension, discovery, and empathy for the characters. The shift in POV was smooth, and it was great seeing the interaction from both sides. There was just enough background information added so that a completely new reader, like me, can become immersed in the universe without weighing down the narrative with too much added info that might break the pace. I also liked the biological accuracy of portraying ligers as bigger than either of the parent species. I kept imagining the ripple of muscles beneath the tan-white fur of a liger pacing in a zoo every time Calix moved.

Thanks! At the risk of sounding like a cheesy TV show, stay tuned for next week!

Thank you! it's amazing to hear that the fight sequence accomplished its purpose

I deliberately kept the references to Jane vague for this reveal. I couldn't resist!

Oh, man. I have answers to all of your questions, and an entire world thought out as the backdrop to this story. If you guys are interested, I could post small snippets that detail just why spark is so necessary, the reason for the rivalry between the Island and the Mainland, and so on.

Thanks! I'm glad my action sequences work so well!

Chapter 4. The Fight What I saw in the tunnel was unexpected. I imagined a corridor just like the ones above me, but as I hurried down the shortest way to the genesis chamber I saw that I was crossing a very old, corroded-looking pathway that looked more like a tunnel than a hall. My quick footsteps echoed in the emptiness and silence of the place. There was no hint of the blaring alarm that had been going on in the upper levels and the lights here were very dim, reminding me of fireligh

Hi there, cocoon! Thanks for reviewing. There's still a lot left to tell in this story, although once again I'll refrain from any spoilers despite the temptation to reveal stuff! I'm originally from Mexico, although my native language is English (long story). I currently live in Mexico City. I've been to Europe a fair number of times, though, and I love it there. I'm even traveling there this summer! I hope you like the remainder of this story, and thanks again for the review.

Thank you very much! that's exactly what I was going for when I created Rick. As for Andy, let's just say that I still have a couple of tricks up my sleeve when it comes to character development

You are absolutely welcome. Poor Andy. Rick doesn't mess around, though. If it turns out that the entire thing was planned, Andy's going to have a very bad day. Rick might be a sub, but that doesn't mean he will hesitate to use his fists, should it come to that…

Glad to see that Andy's been given the benefit of the doubt, lol Thanks for the review!

Thank you! We'll indeed find out

Lol! I'm glad I'm able to provide at least a small reason to not hate Mondays as much ^^

Thank you!

Thank you! Andy has got a lot of explaining to do, that's for sure. Rick's to catch him first, though.

Yep, poor Rick was too blindsided by his first meaningful connection with another man to realize the obvious about Andy. I think that, sometimes, if you're lonely enough, people might be willing to suspend judgment simply out of hope.

We'll get to know soon enough…

Chapter 3. The Plant Flying, vicious shards of glass streaked past me with deadly force even as I threw myself to the ground. The shockwave alone popped the sonics in my ears and left me dazed. I felt a cut on my arm, then the impact of my body as I hit the asphalt and a second later the sudden furnace heat of the roaring fireball as the explosion rocked the street. Car alarms went off everywhere. Somewhere there was a crash, loud enough to reach my addled hearing. I reached up to take out

It seems rather obvious that Andy appears suspicious, doesn't it? I guess I can justify Rick's lack of deductive powers by the fact that Andy is the first guy he has met who didn't turn out to be a disappointment.

Thank you for the feedback! Glad you liked it.

Glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing

thank you, as always!

Thank you for reviewing! you are very perceptive in the fact that there are variants of spark. also, it looks like I'm never going to live down that careless name change

There won't be smoochiness anytime soon. Rick is looking for something very specific in a mate. Maybe he will find it, maybe he won't. Thanks for the review!