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  1. I'd like to find a story with a cute animal companion with ADD or alcohol problems. An opposing character flaw has to juxtapose the fluffy or cute appearance with said animal companion that's relatable. Not everything is cute in actual life, so why can't I find an adorable cat with anxiety issues and have a habit of taking catnip to extremes now and then?
  2. I guess there's a vast difference between erotica in fiction for the sake of getting off, compared to writing erotica as part of the storyline. For example: Compared to: I mean, if I wanted to get off by reading a narrative, I'd go to nifty and waste my time filtering stories with a good storyline, plot, narration, and grammar...to pop the cherry after an exhausting read. But if you want to be intrigued by a good sex scene, crafting sex scenes that don't seem jarring, but intriguing, is the challenge. Writing about two men humping each other for the sake of letting the readers know that they're having sex and they're good at or they're bunny rabbits hammering each other day and night without the context to the readers why they'd have to read through such parts, annoys me as a reader.
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    Sunrise Surf

    I'm not really in the business of being a grammar nazi douchbagger, but this one is triggering me. I apologize in advance. It's impossible to use 'slitted' in the context when used as a verb. Slitted means 'to make a long narrow cut'. Unless you're using it in a context where someone has just scalpel'd his eyes or slit his eyes, like in a reference to someone slicing one's throat--then yes, it's possible. Slit-eyed/slit eyes is the adjective used to describe the narrowing shape of an eye. ...the accompanying spray forced my eyes to keep squinting. ...the accompanying spray forced me to keep my slit-eyed gaze. or ...the accompanying spray forced me to keep my eyes narrowed to slits. And if slitted-eyes are an adjective, it is to describe reptilian, cat-like eyes...like the vertical slant of the pupil of felines or reptiles. I think owls have them too...not sure. (returns to the shadows) 
  4. Sometimes writers purposely create epilogues so they won't need to continue the story. Because the force is real when they need to stop themselves from creating book 100, on stories that have several series. Sometimes it's like...Listen to Elsa damn it: LET IT GO. It also applies to certain book genres: you can't expect books dealing with drama or loss to have an epilogue. "Sarah finally got her kidneys via a black market donor. Jimmy finally sold his kidneys to a black market specialist. He died 7 weeks later. The end." "After boarding the flight to see Gary, whose flight would crash on the 18th of July, Michael took off his ring and said, "I'm getting a divorce." Michael got remarried 8 weeks later after Gary's funeral. He got dysentery on his honeymoon in Africa. The End." But of course, it really depends. Unless it's a dramatic novel speaking about hope, a story about a certain cause or driven propaganda that helped a situation--an epilogue would be ok. . Adventure books are filled with epilogues though. We just want frodo to have a happy ending, don't we? I guess, it's natural to have that need to have closure from going through the character's adventure. It's that happily ever after sentiment we get from feel-good stories, or even movies. Epilogues for forgettable characters based on plot driven novels. Bad idea. A reader would be like, "Who the hell is this again? Didn't he die from an airplane crash? Geezus...he's only mentioned in one sentence. It's not even a complex sentence." *cough* wattpad *cough*
  5. My mom lives in Sunnybank Hills, Brisbane. I'd been keeping tabs on her everyday. I can't believe what's happening down there right now. I can't believe so many horrible things have been happening just this year. The start of the new decade and we get this for starters. 
  6. I personally prefer to write with no distractions. Although sometimes there are songs that resonate with what your writing. I just can't focus if I'm in a busy crowded place--tried the Starbucks route, I ended up Youtubing and googling random crap unrelated to what I'm writing. I get distracted easily that it's not healthy, specially if I'm googling information. One thing leads to another. Let's say I'm searching for a skipper boat in the Mediterranean. Skipper Boat > Greece > Holiday Destinations in Europe> Malta > Hotels in Malta > Wiki Malta> Axis Siege > Phoenicians > Byzantine Rule > Alexander The Great > Alexander Bisexual?... Although I have a screenplay writer friend who cannot write...I mean, cannot frigging write without action music blaring in his ears. You know 24 (The series) type of background music that gets your adrenaline pumping. That's his thing.
  7. Trust me. If you're quitting smoking, your brain is recalibrating the hormone levels as it adjusts the loss of nicotine. Think of the chemicals in your brain as a weighing scale. By quitting smoking, you've tipped the balance of your brain chemicals by taking out nicotine as the source of a primary booster for dopamine--the mood elevator. So anything that you associate as pleasurable will be re-tuned and readjusted by your brain as it resupplies itself with a more natural source for 'happiness' that you'd once gotten from smoking. When I quit smoking in 2016, the first month, I was drinking 3 to 5 litres of water a day as my body flushed the nicotine out of my system. 2 months later, it was hard for me to get boners...I'm speaking of forcing myself to jerk-off in order to get off for the sake of getting off paired with semi-hard erections. I was dating someone working in the field of medicine at the time, and he said it was normal for those suffering from any addiction to undergo physical and emotional changes. And yes, I even had a 2 to 3 week phase where watching videos about owners reuniting with their pets, wedding proposals, animal related videos, soldiers coming home always made me cry. It was so random...I think I even cried from watching a car commercial. And that lasted until the third month when it was the complete opposite. I was getting boners almost every single frigging time. Supermarket--random boner at the produce aisle. Picking my dry cleaning--random boner while waiting for my turn. Walking to the mall while texting a friend--random boner that I had to readjust and I don't wear underwear so it was troublesome. At a meeting--I'd cross my legs while discussing work. Eating dinner outside--I'd cover my lap with a napkin. And then a few months later, it subsided. I'm not overgeneralising my experience with everyone's experience--but I did quit smoking as in 0 cigarettes from day one until now. It didn't quit in moderation, I stopped cold Turkey. I also had a bet with a friend that I wouldn't last for a month without cigarettes so...challenge accepted. Going back, I understand what you're going through. The highest likelihood is that whatever you're experiencing right now, I'd bet it has to do with your body adjusting its brain chemicals. You'll like dick again--pinky promise. It'll come back with a raging vengeance...bonerfied.
  8. My early 2020 goal is to finish the story I'm writing and have it published here. But I may have bitten more than I could chew.
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    School Survival

    Wow. He just spotted a model whilst in the middle of a shootout in a zombie apocalypse. 😁
  10. It's supercalifragilisticexpial-ecstatic Even though the sound of it Is something quite ecstatic. If you say it loud enough You'll always sound ecstatic. Supercalifragilisticexpial-ecstatic. I imagined my uncle singing the ecstatic parts. It's deftly atrocious.
  11. "Late one evening toward the end of March, a teenager picked-up a double-barreled shotgun, walked into the forest, put the gun into someone else's forehead, and pulled the trigger. This is the story of how we got there." - Beartown by Frederik Backman. That's his prologue. It was short and interesting; it got me hooked to be honest. I always imagined prologues are like the 5 second start to a movie or a minute intro of the story to an investigative crime-drama series. Not every film has it, but most likely if the plot involves some mystery, it will have one. Just like the first episode of House where the teacher was scrambling on her way to school. And then, she has this brief interaction with a co-teacher about her tryst with a guy the previous night (yes--horny faculty exemplified). And seconds after starting her lecture, she falls down and undergoes an anaphylactic shock and starts seizing. Then insert house opening soundtrack plug-in credits blah blah...then the screen pans to Dr. House. I've always felt that if that first episode was written as a novel, that intro would be the prologue. It's related, but not the meat of the story. It's like the hook to the main plot or to a bigger plot.
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    Chapter 1/1

    Wow. The writing is impeccable.
  13. The English Patient by Michael Ondaajatje was written in both Present and Past tense. Live events in the Italian villa were written in the present tense; and when one of the characters was having a flashback to a previous memory or event, it was written in the past tense. When I read the book for the second time, I was too young to understand how complex the story and narration is. I read it when I was 14 and reread it out of boredom while waiting for a friend at a coffee shop. My second read-through required slow and careful attention to rhythm. I got a sense that every word was straining and bursting with every meaning. The physical descriptions were sensuous and very intimate, and Ondaajatje's gift for using well-timed silences and ellipses to speak volumes was in candour to his tense structure that everything, in short, works. I have no qualms with books or stories written in the present tense. There just has to be a sense of reason and rhyme to the way it was written. 
  14. There's this story set in Australia about this guy named Matthew Kingston, this surfer bloke named Brad. It's probably one of the most thoroughly articulated stories here with excellent writing. But I can't seem to find it anymore from this site. And I can't find the author either. I read it back in 2017. i want to recommend it but I can't find it unless someone has the link.
  15. 50 shades of Gurrey would like to know your address. Hahaha.
  16. I abandoned this 1st person narration of two best friends living in New York who had slept together after their ten years of friendship. Basically, the entire running plot runs on that one night they've slept together, while the one who was having second doubts was the one telling the bulk of the story through flashbacks regarding their history. It was bittersweet because I was planning on killing the best friend who had fallen in love with the other best friend, and the reveal at the end that the best friend who had survived was the one reminiscing everything on the day of his wedding. Already wrote 40k words...until my laptop died. I forgot to back up everything. Yes...probably one of the stupidest thing I've done so far.
  17. That's why telling is an integral skill that most writers gain from experience, I guess. Gabriel Garcia Marquez utilises telling so well that the first few pages of his Love At The Time of Cholera shift from telling and showing without you realising which is which. You'd know it's a good story if it switches from Telling into Showing without sounding jarring...and I guess that breaks the monotony of reading: "He went to the store and grabbed a ladle and decided to get a bigger ladle once he got to the checkout." x100 similar outlines spread across the story. As for story length, the chapter format isn't necessarily realistic if you're planning on having your work published, unless of course it's already segmented into parts as you're writing it. Or you've already outlined everything even before writing the story. I really have no complaints if the author posts a 15k chapter, as long as it's INTEGRAL to the storyline. I honestly forgot about this novel I read in college. The first part was like 20k words of mundane repetitive actions that drove the character to do the same chores over and over again. And then it slowly informed the reader that the character was living in a loophole with his OCD. The story then suddenly morphs into a full-blown sci-fi novel with talking ducks and whatnots. I had to reread the first part because as I got to the middle part; I realised that the coffee jar was the only thing in the kitchen where the character had to go to the supermarket because it kept on running lower than usual. It felt as if someone in the real dimension was drinking coffee at the same time as the same character in the same house...which turned out to be the character's doppelganger in the loophole universe who got switched to be him in the real world. And I'd imagine if the author of that novel posts it here as the first chapter, where the context of the reason why it was written that way would be explained in, let's say, 3rd chapter, I wonder how many readers would be turned off'd by how it was written. I just think the chapter format doesn't necessarily apply to some genre's. And it really is the writer's prerogrative to stick to his/her guns on how he/she would like his story to progress in the manner of how he/she'd imagine it. Of course, I'm referring to stories that are written well. No shade. Hahaha.
  18. To be honest, it does take time to get things rolling, especially if you're so focused on writing a story. I've been writing this story for two years, and it's gone through a couple of revisions over the years. For me, the harder part of writing is the voice and the quality of writing I'm aiming for which sometimes doesn't translate especially if you're trying to rush into things. I believe in giving the mind space to rethink and usher in creativity, which takes time and patience. I remember writing this chapter, where it took me an entire day just to google the necessary details before starting on it. Just for that one paragraph that summarises what the character was going through. There was one chapter where it took me three months to write again, all because it was mentally exhausting just to go through the motions of writing it. It honestly just takes time... What I do to get inspired is read snippets from famous novels, which triggers something in my brain that tells me to write something like it, quality wise and to try to aspire to what I felt when I read it and have it translated into my writing. Or I'd give myself a week to take a break and read a book... You really can't force your brain to think if it doesn't want to. But you also need to find ways to find some oil to gear the wheels to get yourself going. Doing nothing is the same as giving up.
  19. Most of my straight friends have that Jason Mamoa personality--the laid back adventure seeking dude who's fun to be around. I have too much in common with dearest Jason, hence my imagination tends to steer away from fantasizing about our future wedding. I like them geeky and nerdy. As for Idris...he's scrumptrilescent indeed. I imagine him sitting downstairs, drinking coffee and reading the paper, with nothing but his trousers on, telling me to remind him to drop by the shop to pick-up some milk before going to work. While outside, our gardener, dearest Jason, is tending to my bushes. And...this is why I'm single. *faint laughter* I'll be heading out to the nearest newsagency now to get a copy of people magazine thank you very much.
  20. I think that's the problem I have, since I'm a visual learner and certain facial ticks or identifiers whenever I envision a character are either a hit or miss, especially nuances. For example, how does the character A express anger compared to character B, or is character A reliant to facial expressions as opposed to character B who prefers with body movements. I think personality-wise, it's easier to create distinctive traits than reanimate what a character expresses in your own head. My friend who I'm basing one of the protagonists in my story is very outgoing, whereas the character I've depicted is an ambivert, somewhat recluse. And those differentiation creates interesting facial expressions, to the extent of how much the said character is willing to convey their emotions through their face. I guess there's a said psychology attached to it, that even as a writer, I'm assuming most of us takes into consideration given that these characters exists in the realm of one's imagination. "For a man of handsome features, he sure seemed grumpy. Erect and poised of elegant stature; his sober coloured custom-tailored suit showed a supercilious distinction of class amongst his colleagues. His aquiline nose and chiselled jaws amplified a pragmatic effect to his slicked back golden mane impregnable of young adulthood. And his beard perfectly groomed of austerity mirrored the stout figure underneath the layers of clothing: a musculature of a Roman statue and height, bulging at the seams, intimidating even the most important figurehead in the country, while soliciting the attention of men who envied his surname, and grown women who lusted over those otherworldly eyes like hordes of teenagers raving at the sight of the most popular quarterback." I wrote the description as part of my story. But I tried so hard in remembering that chance encounter on this really gorgeous looking man who was in the train. Everybody was staring at him. I mean, come on, he looked like he was going to a parliament assembly while arguing on the phone and his booming voice sounded like he was whispering sweet nothings. As soon as I got home, I coerced my bestfriend (who's also my neighbour) to google and find someone online who closely resembled him. And viola, a bit of grey hair here and there, adjust the eyes apart, narrow down the nose...and thanks to her photoshop skills, she somehow created a similar facial structure of what the man in the subway looked like. His photo now serves as *coughs* inspiration.
  21. This pending story I've been writing for almost a year and a half now--yes, it's that long...I'm a lazy writer--well, I was inspired to base the physical attributes of one of the main characters to that of my friend who has Waardenburg Syndrome. There are types of symptoms, but mostly the one he has is basically...the lucky bastard's been blessed with the most lightest shade of blue eyes. It's lighter than that of Paris Jackson (she has Waardenburg as well). So I somewhat associated it as a physical trait to a main character in my story. I have this problem that I need to base what my characters look like from real life. And since they're living inside my head, might as well put a face to it. So I need to imagine their facial expressions when I'm writing. I feel like sometimes I'm a producer scouting for an actor playing the role to a character I'm writing about when I'm googling for references. I'm like, "Hmmm...this German actor looks good but there's something missing. Let's go other countries. How about Switzerland. Yes, let's photoshop his eyes to dark brown and adjust his jawline." So have you ever based any characters attributes or physical traits in your stories from real life?
  22. I'm having an existentialist crisis with this song right now. Like an 80's disco track played at prom in the late 90's. I heard this song playing at Jamba Juice and I'm like, "This is depressing. But I can't help but bop my head."
  23. Them natural greys...Ooh, you touch my tralala.
  24. To be fair, this has got to be one of the better conceptualized titles around here. I'm so tired of seeing story titles that looked like it was imagined by a ten year old, who's writing an English paper about how their summer vacation went about. And I don't mean the stories with mediocre titles have crap stories...some of them are extremely good, but was packaged in the wrong gift-wrapping paper. Plus, your story is amusing and lighthearted as well, which thoroughly fits the title.
  25. I identify as a fire hydrant. I'm kidding. I don't neccesarily consider myself a part of the community but I have been to gay pride, mardi gras, and gay clubs, often cruising the bar for...their buy one take one margarita since I'm a cheapskate. But yeah, I was a former editor of a gay mag and I think I've done my part segregating quality *ehem* (insert shirtless photo of John Hamm) content for the betterment of our gay community.
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