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Maybe she stumbled upon the witch in the forest- she might be the one to save Hansel and Gretel, I kid. Good work.
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I can agree with Nessa who wants to walk. I can relate, one hour of walking, followed by one hour of rest seems sane. Keep up the work
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Could there be a chance that the Demon Lord is her father trying to reunite the family Anyway keep up the work
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Defense is defense. However, guilt and anything alluring are as equally downfalls when given the right circumstances. Its sounds like Morumpi was only looking out for best interests, though mistaken identities have come through before, not to mention conspiracy. Keep up the great work.
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I loved the sense of isolation you brought in this chapter. Silence really does get to you quicker than almost anything else. Oh and Dianna The Diary has the ring to it
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Oskar & Noah (Revised)
D.K. Daniels commented on D.K. Daniels's story chapter in Oskar & Noah (Revised)
Thanks for the feedback it is greatly appreciated. True there are a couple of errors in the writing, however, I am writing in British English mainly for this story. So there could be a couple of errors their also if you are used to American English. Extending the story could be something I'd consider further down the pipeline- Aka D.K. Daniels -
Great chapter James, I love how you described the fairies losing her wings. It is simple and to the point which packs a great point. "Her life disintegrated in front of her eyes just as my own wings crumbled to dark, lifeless dust." - Keep up the awesome work
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I can relate to having fallen on ice, though the ginger bit is true news, i'm a ginger- so I'm guilty. Crashing parties is a cool thing to do. What a quirky fast-paced short this was. I enjoyed reading it, keep up the good work LitLover. - Plus Micha is too cute a name to shorten it
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Awhh... she's adorable. Oh and yes diary entries are a great medium for storytelling personal experiences. I guess I just never heard of a such a story being told like this before because it usually told in either first or third person. Not that it is a problem, I love trying out new formats. I wish you all the best with the idea, and I'll drop by to see how the series is going in my free time That's a good idea in itself, like a therapy session format, I recall reading a book a while back ago called Starstruck and it had vague entries about a psychiatrist.
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Fairys and mystical creatures are not usually my thing, however, i think this story would benefit from being told from the first person and from the exact moment the killing takes place. Jump-starting directly into the murder and the phycological thoughts of the fairy after she has committed this heinous act. Though I am curious as to how a story of this possible magnitude can unfold as a journal entry. Keep up the work
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This story has the potential for much more. It could possibly make an entire novella or even a book. Anyway thanks for sharing
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Awesome hook for readers to latch onto, the only conclusion is that it is a little short. It would be great to hear a little more of the phycological side to the events opposed to the driving action. It is a pretty solid opening chapter, keep up the good work
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What a curious prologue. It reminds me of something from a classic mystery thriller novel. Great start, short and sweet, and to the point. I look forward to more.
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Oskar & Noah (Revised)
D.K. Daniels commented on D.K. Daniels's story chapter in Oskar & Noah (Revised)
No problem, thank you very much for the feedback, I’m glad you enjoyed the short story. I haven’t gave thought much into giving the story a conclusion, it was primarily just a short, but when I finish some of my other large scale projects I’ll definitely look into it. It it would be cool to see how Oskar handles his new social group of course -
Who We Are D.K. Daniels Pale transparent rays of crepuscular sunlight poured in and warmed the slender, sculpted chest of Oskar. He held a rather simple, two-tone coloured soccer ball, with leather patches of black and white, toward his bare stomach. The boys' shirtless torso quivered with each rise and fall of his dynamic breathing. He had only been panting seconds before, and for the first time in years, he spoke to Noah like a normal human being. Noah’s appearance in this lig
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It had been years since they last spoke on equal playing fields. How would they react, or you: being locked in a room with your worse enemy, primary best friend. Though today, everything changes as two young boys struggle to find themselves amongst a bitter rivalry. Will they makeup and abandon their woes or will they further the confusion and mistaken mutual feelings for more bitterness. Who We Are is a story about finding yourself in the midst of confusion and mending old wounds.
