Tabbycat

Awww....such a great scene to romanticise such a tacky, but necessary task for modern lovers!

"Does the pope shit in the woods?" BWAHAHAA!! Love it!! More great dialogue 🙂

So many ego-driven religious peeps! I guess they are in the right place, as they are the ones that REALLY need God! 😂 Sister Fiacre! LOL! Is that a real name? I shudder to think what nicknames the kids would have given her. (Sister I-farked-Her) LOL! I still remember Sister Catherine Brazier from Gloucester, who we all called "Sister Brassiere" That never failed to amuse my little primary school self. Hehee!

Good backstory and you have fleshed out the characters well. My only critique would be that there is a lot of telling, not showing here, but showing can be difficult with backstory...though I thought the scene in the backyard where Justin's dad tries to hit his mum would be the perfect opportunity to show, not tell. I was in the dark for a long time about exactly HOW to show and not tell, until the wonderful memoirist Patti Miller told me there are three basic ways: 1. dialogue (yours so far, is very good!) 2. action 3. sensory perception eg: SHOW us how Craig's heartbeat raced or how he got hard at the mere thought of Justin, instead of telling us that he thought that giving J his number went well, just as a random example. Looking forward to the next chapter!

I love the double entendre of the title! LOL! Description of the intercourse is very well done. Beautiful use of words...

LOL! Same. I am a bisexual chick who accidentally found my dad's gay porn video collection once and have been a fan ever since! 😆