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    I could spend an hour dissecting this chapter. Loren stood on his podium, proud of the brand he’s created. I think there was even an aura of conceitedness as he spoke, like he was better than most for how he used his platform. He was so sure he was doing everything right. I think he saw similarities between himself and Jay. He even praised Jay for how Jay stood out from the rest. There is a difference between surface and depth. In the end I think Loren had to look in the mirror and see that he was a lot closer to the surface than he thought. That’s hard to admit when you’re so sure of yourself. I know he’ll get there but I don’t think humility is his strong suit
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    Getting Physical

    Pickalane commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Getting Physical

    He’s right, Jay is a vibe and he’s throwing Loe for a loop. I really like this chapter. Learning a little more about Loe. I admit, I was a little ragey when Loe and Sven fu*k. I don’t want Loe to be with anyone else. In my head, he’s with Jay. Doesn’t he know Jays been saving him self for Loe? How could Loe go do that? I know it’s stupid, Loe is single and clearly loving to mingle. I think the whole extended warranty bit is super telling. Jay has the extended warranty (relationship) Loe needs but Loe is way too hesitate to do anything with it. Will we find out why? last, the whole row bit made me laugh. I can just see aloe’s surprise disappointment.
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    Jay's Loelife

    Pickalane commented on Mrsgnomie's story in Fiction

    Came here from another site because the rumor was you were posting here and not there. Looks to be the case. Glad to see your newest stuff!
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    Chapter 6

    Pickalane commented on Jacob Windigo's story chapter in Chapter 6

    Young love. Sometimes, coming of age is so hard to relive
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    Where's Loren?

    Pickalane commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Where's Loren?

    Another great chapter. I’m so glad to see a peek from Jay POV. I foresee a good power balance here. Curious to see if one will be more dominate. I think Jay. Loe seems like he WANTS to be in charge but it’s mostly an illusion. Are you swapping POV every chapter?
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    New to the site. Great stories so far. Really interested to see how this one goes. I like that you don’t give too much away. Some writers can be too obvious. My interest is piqued.
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    Eight of Pentacles

    Pickalane commented on Mawgrim's story chapter in Eight of Pentacles

    I just started this today and I’m hooked. Great writing and the story line is 👌🏼👌🏼 Curious to see how it continues to go.
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    Chapter 10

    Pickalane commented on oat327's story chapter in Chapter 10

    Just binged your story. Couldn’t like everything I wanted because I’m too new. But wow. I feel so attached to Kevin and when he hurts, I hurt.
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