Mark M

OH REALLY WHERE?!?!?! I NEED TO FIND IT NOW!!! I"M SO EXITED!

Just throwing it out there but what if it's wrinkler all of a sudden? the poor boy has no sexual release that we know of...so maybe??? But Calvert is the Most likly one to do it, if it's fellows....who yes at 35....and 18...still a little wierd...but then i think of the "Sir" making a person Fat and Old rather then a Respectfull term to use anymore. Either way i find the situation rather useless cuz fellows is not Grangers Soul Mate, nor do i think Travers or Calvert are either anymore, i'm begining to think Granger is still looking for that one person who will solve all his sexual needs...... Like Greg for Stephan in CAP. But i won't like this man needs a big dick, to be slightly versetile, and one hell of a smart man. and amazingly hot. None of this Scrawny stuff....should be similar to travers....Little Fat, Bulging Muscle.....If any of you have seen Craig Honer from Legend of the Seeker That would be perfect! Picture of him here, Take at own Risk...though it's from a google.ca Search and i used it http://yansored.typepad.fr/.a/6a00e008dcef0a8834010535cbba3e970b-800wi Anyway i bet Wrinkler now

Chapter 8 failed to impress me much....fellows...well discusts me...i think it's perverted for that big of an age difference to enjoy one another, but i wouldn't condem it entirly. (assume fellows is 50+ while Granger is 18ish....i wouldn't even know though as details like his age are left to the wind). Calvert and Granger are totaly awesome, but i miss travers, when o when will he be back! No Music for a while either?? where's the singing...i wana see a sailor who has a soprano Voice and Shocks the Crew! Anyway... i am off to bed! it was a wonderfull read be4 sleep

It is awesome that Calvert and Granger are together!! If your Sharpening your Claws...I'm Sharpening my Teeth....(i had a Vampire Picture in my DP from Halloween before!) If Travers Dies i'll be sad. If Granger dies i'll be sad. If Caroline or Calvert die. I wouldn't be to terribly sad. Though iknow Granger would be heart Broken

Uh so High tech into the depth of the research for this story. But the minor Details are moreso Ignored.(my ownly Critic) Anyway i'm Pumped for the Next Chapter....By the way the development in my COAP Disease is worsening...I finaly started puking Flem....My nose is stuffed also and my Sore Throat is lessening..a little. Tomorrow a Cough will probably develop. then....Either i'll have the COAP Cure...Or i'll worsen into HIV and Hep A,B,C and Craps...and Herpies...and who knows...SWINE FLU?!??! AHH!! MAYBE SARS!??!? my death is imminate

Interesting! i assume this storyline will continue much like Chronicals of an Academic Preditor....buy the way i'm suffering from COAAP!!Its a deadly Disease! Eventually i'll die. So far No cure has been Made. Anyway i mean continue because there's a long way for Granger to go, but Frankly if he just Rockets to the top....whats the point of the story? there has to be a bigger purpose then what i'm forshadowing. Granger must have something big coming up....Calvert or Travers... Politics would be ok, but to write about would be horribly complicating. I hate the fact that Granger really has no say in his orders, just does what he's told, i wouldn't hate you if a dispute on orders game around.....like Promoting his brother to governor....what if he's taken a "Hitler" Stance and has taken over the colony forging Good Reports....Stealing money from the british themselves....now that....would be something! Anyway i'm just Babbling and Day dreaming of what could happen! What ever does happen i'll be Excited with Nontheless!!

I don't really know what will happen, Calvert probably will or has fallen for Granger. But Granger with his resilliant streek can destroy Calvert so to speak. Calvert seems to be putting alot on his navey career....same with Granger......like personally wouldn't a backup be ok for Granger to plan for his future?? like being so young on a ship of his own, what the hight of his power? king? Comander of the Navy next to the king?? Calvert made an interesting propistion to Granger that i'm currious to see how it comes about, Granger as he is very intelegant should heed this advice and use it. Otherwise he'll be Commador in no time.... as for his libo....SETTLE IT DOWN haha

Well i'm pretty happy with the story, i just watched the Show Master and comander with russle crowe, Good movie. There are things that you are failing to keep prominant in this story though, 4 chapters and Granger has yet to pick up his flute. can Mr. Calvert play anything??? The whole show master and commander was with violin playing. and the ACHRON(spelling??) is a awesomely designed ship. I think we need the INTERCEPTER in this story line......with Commador Granger at the helm! lol. That or some pirates.......but they don't need a prize now anyway.... they would need to keep all there men would they not?? Anyway i'm excited for the next few chapters.

COMON THAT WAS A CLIFFHANGER! haha Best chapter! lol

SinceBrian is said to be a younger version of JP, i cannot see brian being his son rather then brother...i just don't get why they just jumped to conclusions...like wouldn't JP think it out and MAKE 100% sure that it's Bills son? DNA test? Jp's Vs Brian.... I duno i'm excited for the next chapter but yet it could be something i don't want....or something that i do? i duno! although i love how brads getting alot of talking in there and is a vital Character to the situation.... When is the next wardroom or Captian Voyages chapter gona be up...(made up "Captain Voyages") lol

Well well well finaly some DRAMA!!!! was not expecting this ever to drop haha....anyway great chapter...horrible cliff hanger!! lol the look poor clair must have gave JP it must be insane....anyway! Great!

wow people truly read this for the SEX??? Ugh....i feel so not a sexaholic......you must be young Paya! I like the storyline more then any of the sex...unless it's brad and robbie....then i'll for sure Read!!

i'm only like 4 months into this website...only cuz Be Rad Dragged me in.... but yeah i liked chapter 20 alot...very refreshing...i came out to my dad last time i was in my hometown he doesn't understand how i can be attrackted to men...but i just say the same feeling when you look at a good looking women....is what i get when i see a good looking man...lol. It's Cool....i know that....4 people for SURE know i'm gay....other then that....i wouldn't know haha... It's cool having Parents who are accepting not gona lie...it's sweet cuz i was terrified of my financial situation cuz my dad supports me alot through school...so i was like errr...do i tell him or not?? i didn't want someone else telling him or someone else spray painting FAG across his house or something. Great chapter Mark!

ah brad i love Brad...to bad there's robbie in the picture....to bad these characters are fictional i'd rape alot of them haha!!! The Boat manuver was awesome very awesome!! As a Critique though, there is not much description of the surroundings the characters are in. It's like "they go down stairs to play playstation" why not "They head down the starcase of the ship to there bunks in the lower compartments to play playstation" or when you describe Escorial in other storyes...i know theres a pool....and a main hall....a kitchen....JP's Study....but all we know is that they came into the room....frankly i betcha there all empty too!! haha. Like i duno i sometimes like the Description of the place it sets the mood. Stefs Living room......."They sit on the Couch" Assuming that stef is so rich and stuff it should be like.....longer..... Bitty and the Social worker enter Stefan's Living room though the ordinate doors into a brightly lit, furnished with black leather couches and a handcrafted from france coffetable with remarkable design, showing stefs wealth. As they continue to look in amazment as more of the living room comes into sight with a marble encased firplace.... etc etc For some reason i feel as if Escorial is yellow also....is that true? haha

yay a few to go thenm:D

Uh oh.....i'm getting peach all over....WAIT WAIT that's the natural tone of my skin....hmmm is it inner ilness

This was a Cliffhanger.....the other one didn't bug me as much!! seriously mark i think you need to give us a peacefully break, it's only making me think the end is near!! :'( but on another note.....very well done chapter! thanks mark! Bitchy..again i also mean bitty best have some firepower if she wants her kids...like seriously....wow...5 or ten perople will millions in the bank and she thinks she can just up and take them from them...Think again. She will probably be dead before then i bet.

Hmm strong one?? darn i'm thinking i'm talking to a muscle hunk now -.- i'm jealous! working at walmart is definatly toning me out though since were understaffed we run everywhere all the time haha fun stuff. lol

Ill just stick with my phone provider...and not vote at alll but last year i got Bill W to make 100 votes for David A!! Saddend that he didn't win....seriously i thought it might be the "gay" reason again even then because how many many white men other then JesseMccartney and Justin Timerlake....there's only a few. but it's getting more accepting....taking forever for people like Jesse to hit the big timelike Timberlake.

Good notes: Hmmm chapter13 was another cliffhanger as usual lol...these stories always get intense at the worst of times. Anyway i liked the fact you sent lou to my country only....i'd die if he was real. lol. Shirtless in the winter! bahahaha not many do that anyway....it's usualy inside where it looks like winter. lol I like the fact JP and steff are together but i find the whole thing wierd...haha more surreal for steff.... Bad note: Sorry, but i find myself getting very bored with the story, it's all family crap that i don't have making me feel i duno jealous of fictional characters....so i'm wondering if there is an intense story you or someone else has read on here that has the perspective of going from nobody to a family. like JP but he just sort of transfered from his parents family to his own.

Bruno with HIV....now that i think would be ok. But i think Marcel needs a Scare, like a Mistake saying he's got it...then a correction saying no he doesn't like JP had back in though's old days :'( As for steff well true he's very anilitical but why can't he be outwitted for something he needs before he retires haha.

Hmmmmmmm I find them quite entertaining...."Terry Goodkind" The Author Of the Sword of Truth Series....or the Basis for the T.V Series "Legend of the Seeker" did an awesome job at writing in two differnt people at the same time. I pretty much know his Characters Kahlan Amnell and Riched Rahl like no tomorrow, and i love them both. Very good! Now i hate movies like Lord of the rings who tried to do the same thing.....Frankly i skip all the Hobbit parts and get to the WAR! lol Seriously it sucks now but i love the movies. I love Descriptive stories that really get into the technicall aspect of reading people and Society and well everything. The Technical Aspect of Stefs Business Intrigued me totaly, although i'm surprised he's only had one SCARE and never any more....I think Stef could use a Money scare again!!! Maybe Throw Some Stones Brads way who i adore for a Character! Max....i love too....Cody, still a little off about him....i don't trust him....i think he could come between JP and Stef Now!! How come AIDS is Out of the picture These days also??? no one close has died yet....i think someone needs to die again and creat emotional trama & disaster in the family only to bring them closer.......Clair with a Stillborn?? That would be so Painfull! But that's just suggestions and things that may give you ideas on how to go with future stories. lol i don't want to change what you have i love it all!!! But since your rewriting maybe this will create a very different ending!! Great work Mark #1 (That's you Tiger #1 lol)

Yeah i definatly Got a little kick abou the lezbian thing...i do wish we could be in brads persona again....he was developed so perfectly....although JAcks persona would be interesting....although we know he's straight maybe Cheating is in the mix? haha if only. It was nice to see Clair again. Uhhh Cody is cool....Devolped wierdly though and i can't pinpoint it either...he gives me a feeling that he's dangerous and untrustworth. i Feel his relationship with seff is fake... Oh by the way you left us on ANOTHER hook....Seff walking away from JP after he Drops that BOMB. lol One other Thing have you ever thought of Writing a Parelle Novel???? like Jeffs Side to him meeting JP or Rogers or Erics or Isadore's even Robbie's. Orson Scott Card did it with the Book Ender's Game, with Enders Shadow...if you get a chance to read....VERY good. But Fiction!

0.0 there's a list??? i hope it doesn't exceed 124857382935723849237401243487234X0 +10.............if you did catch that it Equals 10... i'm SMART! haha Well i'm glad i pointed it out then. lol

Phew like seriously how i'm supposed to check on stories like "If it fits" or "The Wardroom" or "Max and Josh" if i can't see when there posted...it would be so saddening if they were posted and i didn't know!!! haha jk jk but i definatly love the idea of a recently posted list. Makes life Easy, but i thought i was definatly going mad. haha But No Problem i can wait as long as i know my computers arn't messing more stuff up haha