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Poetry - 2. Poem 2

Finding tomorrows
in the clouds of a sky
made like a deep blue bowl, overturned and filled with sunshine that melts us

as summer skies do


My hands tangle with your hair and your smiles snare my heart.
The clouds go blithely on


as clouds do


Tomorrow I have many plans
but here with you its safe to say
that it'll be nothing like yesterday expected

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  On 10/25/2018 at 4:19 AM, AC Benus said:

This one :) I think you will appreciate how similar the sentiment and analogies are :) 

 

 

 

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         "Hello, all! I worked on translating a Tanka by Ōgai Mori this afternoon. Do you think my version makes for a compelling poem...? I'm hoping it does, but I'm not so sure.

 

Let poetry be

Like a crystal bowl of ice;

Allow it to seem

Inviting and transparent,

With no spots of doubt showing.  " 

 

 

- I like this AC. where it should be inviting and transparent is really meaningful to me.  I get stuck in poems where everything is so clouded in metaphor and "poetic language" that it seems heavy. 

And sure making room to leave  certain meanings up to the reader is good and a hallmark of poetry.  But perhaps you've come across poetry where the meaning seems buried so deep you would need a shovel and strong back to find it.  

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