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Walking Through Darkness - 2. My Demons

Twisted and Mangled ,
Tattered and Torn -
Shredded beyond recognition ,
How my flesh burns in misery ,
Oh how it bleeds in agony .

The demons cackle in delight at my distress , at
my misery . How did it come to this ? My life in
ruin , beyond all repair - beyond saving .
The horror of life surrounds me enclosing me in
eternal darkness , I try fighting but the despair
I feel is to great a burden - a burden I can no
longer bear .
Fear has taken over , I can no longer hear
anything for the pounding of my heart racing
in terror it drowns out the sounds of
everything else .

Everything is a mystery to me . How could I
ever have let it gotten this far beyond my
control ? How will I ever survive ?

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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Lisa

This is such a dark poem, Angel. Very powerful also - so much raw emotion in it.

 

I just wanted to point out two errors: demon's should be demons b/c you're not using as a possessive form such as: 'the demon's eyes were blood red'. Ok, so I'm not a writer, but you get the point. lol

The next error is bare should be bear: 'a burden I can no longer bear' - bear as in carry a load, carry a burden...

 

I look forward to your next poem, Angel. Hopefully it'll be a bit more cheerful?

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Suvitar

I agree with Lisa, this is a very dark and powerful poem. And I hope that at least some of your poems will be more hopeful and happier.

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On 06/13/2014 01:40 AM, Lisa said:
This is such a dark poem, Angel. Very powerful also - so much raw emotion in it.

 

I just wanted to point out two errors: demon's should be demons b/c you're not using as a possessive form such as: 'the demon's eyes were blood red'. Ok, so I'm not a writer, but you get the point. lol

The next error is bare should be bear: 'a burden I can no longer bear' - bear as in carry a load, carry a burden...

 

I look forward to your next poem, Angel. Hopefully it'll be a bit more cheerful?

Thank you for pointing those 2 words out it went right by me as I was writing

This and quite a few others were written during a dark time that I went through I can't promise what the next one will be but I'm glad that you are willing to stick around for it

Thank you for reading and commenting

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On 06/13/2014 03:04 AM, Suvitar said:
I agree with Lisa, this is a very dark and powerful poem. And I hope that at least some of your poems will be more hopeful and happier.
I do have a FEW that are light but so many are dark ,I had written them during a dark time and it was just an easy way to get out how I was feeling I'll try for something lighter but I make no promises. :)

Thank you for reading

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