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    Celethiel
  • Celethiel
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2014 - Fall - Scars Entry

The Crow's Fist - 3. And We Are Alone

And We Are Alone

It is over now
I ask you why
You broke your vow
For you did lie

She holds their seed
She wants it dead
Who can I plead?
For where you lead

My son so small
He is now lame
Heard not his call
You are to blame

And these my hands
Let them both rot
And fall in sands
For I could not

But you never did
And we are alone
For what you bid
Wish I had known

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2014 - Fall - Scars Entry
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joann414

Wow! You can take a few words and make an explosion of emotions. All three entries are so well written and painful. Great job Cele! :yes:

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Lisa

I ditto Jo Ann; this was another powerful, emotional poem. Where do you get all your inspiration from?

 

You make beautiful jewelry, you write exceptionally wonderful poems...is there anything you can't do, Cele?

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Yettie One

Ok, I am not sure I got the sense of this one as vividly as the other two, but still it is an emotional poem.

Awesome submission, I have to say Celethiel.

:)

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Celethiel
On 09/12/2014 03:22 AM, joann414 said:
Wow! You can take a few words and make an explosion of emotions. All three entries are so well written and painful. Great job Cele! :yes:
Thanx.
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Celethiel
On 09/12/2014 05:46 AM, Lisa said:
I ditto Jo Ann; this was another powerful, emotional poem. Where do you get all your inspiration from?

 

You make beautiful jewelry, you write exceptionally wonderful poems...is there anything you can't do, Cele?

from deep inside that dusty library that's my head :P

PUT AWAY those surgeon tools :o:P

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Celethiel
On 09/12/2014 07:57 AM, Yettie One said:
Ok, I am not sure I got the sense of this one as vividly as the other two, but still it is an emotional poem.

Awesome submission, I have to say Celethiel.

:)

Thanx.

Well I developped this on the idea of three different types of pain... the first one is physical...

The second is Emotional...

and the Third is spiritual... he's blaming his god for not saving his family.

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comicfan

This one was not as easy to see or understand. Then again poetry isn't always my strong suit. he seems to be blaming his wife for everything and his son is now lame. You have to wonder what was done and why. Still left feeling for the voice of this poem.

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Celethiel
On 09/12/2014 03:18 PM, comicfan said:
This one was not as easy to see or understand. Then again poetry isn't always my strong suit. he seems to be blaming his wife for everything and his son is now lame. You have to wonder what was done and why. Still left feeling for the voice of this poem.
he's blaming his god for not saving his family from what happened in the last chapter.
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Bill W

I'm not sure I understood this one. Obviously his wife had broken their vows, but did she cripple or kill their child? Or did he blame his child's condition on her dishonoring him? I feel his pain, I just can't quite define it.

I also apologize for the multi posts to the last poem. Not sure if it was my computer of the site that caused the problem.

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Celethiel
On 09/12/2014 08:07 PM, Bill W said:
I'm not sure I understood this one. Obviously his wife had broken their vows, but did she cripple or kill their child? Or did he blame his child's condition on her dishonoring him? I feel his pain, I just can't quite define it.

I also apologize for the multi posts to the last poem. Not sure if it was my computer of the site that caused the problem.

last 2 poems actually :P

he is blaming his god for not saving his wife and kid from the last poem. thereby loosing his faith....

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Celethiel
On 09/14/2014 12:40 PM, Headstall said:
Some poetry falls flat with me mainly because it is such a personal thing. This did not....
i am glad.
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