Twisted

Loved the drag queen poster! Too funny, especially since Will assumed Michael was into drag.

I really like Katy and Joey. Will' s growing on me; I feel bad for him; he never knew he knocked up Michael's mom.

I don't get Jason though. Why did he shove Michael on that first day? And then to purposely hurt him again on the second day; what's this guy's problem? I'm glad he's suspended, although I happen to agree with Will and think Jason will just try to exact revenge on Michael now.

So what's with the iPod? Michael seems obsessed with it. He's out on a f**king DATE for Christ's sakes, LOSE THE f**kING iPOD! My God! If I were Joey I would have been insulted.

Anyway..love the story, could you tell? lol

One thing though I wanted to point out: when you're writing dialogue and one person finishes speaking, put a space in between so when the other person speaks it's not on the same line. It gets confusing that way. Each person speaking should have their own separate line.

I'm looking foward to the next chapter!

On 09/05/2011 03:11 PM, Lisa said:

Loved the drag queen poster! Too funny, especially since Will assumed Michael was into drag.

 

I really like Katy and Joey. Will' s growing on me; I feel bad for him; he never knew he knocked up Michael's mom.

 

I don't get Jason though. Why did he shove Michael on that first day? And then to purposely hurt him again on the second day; what's this guy's problem? I'm glad he's suspended, although I happen to agree with Will and think Jason will just try to exact revenge on Michael now.

 

So what's with the iPod? Michael seems obsessed with it. He's out on a f**king DATE for Christ's sakes, LOSE THE f**kING iPOD! My God! If I were Joey I would have been insulted.

 

Anyway..love the story, could you tell? lol

 

One thing though I wanted to point out: when you're writing dialogue and one person finishes speaking, put a space in between so when the other person speaks it's not on the same line. It gets confusing that way. Each person speaking should have their own separate line.

 

I'm looking foward to the next chapter!