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Busted chapter 60


[i keep feeling like I ought to have Chris have a harder time with all this. I dunno, it feels a little too easy]

 

"What's going on? Dammit Steve, where the hell are we going?"

 

"Hospital," Steve said. He was driving like a madman. The car's lights were on, and he was weaving in and out of traffic.

 

"Why ware we going to the hospital?"

 

"Busy driving here," Steve said as he cut off a green SUV.

 

Chris spent the next fifteen minutes worrying. There wasn't any point in pressing Steve for information

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Lucy Kemnitzer

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I had a similar response at first but I think that Chris is going to do the slow double take and later on feel the jolt full force. He's had a few shocks -- notice he also hasn't reacted yet to the "grandpa" part.

TheZot

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I had a similar response at first but I think that Chris is going to do the slow double take and later on feel the jolt full force. He's had a few shocks -- notice he also hasn't reacted yet to the "grandpa" part.

The kiss at the end of this is going to get tossed out in the edits. They came together too quickly, I think -- the two plotlines really need to resolve at the same time, so it's time to throw a bit of conflict into this.

 

Gonna need to go back and smooth things out. It may be a bit interesting, since I really want to keep the scene in Chris' living room...

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