and Pornography

[myself_i_must_remake]

Hello, GA!

 

Some of you might remember a version of this story I had posted several years ago. I got mad at it and took it down. I thought I had put it to rest.

 

But, this summer the characters reappeared, and I'm giving it another go. Hopefully I'll be kind of speedy about getting it out, and hopefully I won't do what I always do and give up after the first few chapters.

 

Something that online posting isn't quite conducive to is the annotation section at the bottom of the chapter. First of all, it is part of the story; it's not me commenting upon it. Second of all, it looks better in Word because it's spread out through the chapter instead of in a big brick at the bottom.

 

Anyway, enjoy!

 

and Pornography

[Gene Splicer PHD]

It's an interesting direction you've taken. I look forward to the next chapter, where the perspective might reveal more about what the narrator is trying to achieve.

 

Was that your intent?

[myself_i_must_remake]

It's an interesting direction you've taken. I look forward to the next chapter, where the perspective might reveal more about what the narrator is trying to achieve.

 

Was that your intent?

 

I want to dramatize mental illness without falling back on suicide, violence toward others, or fairy-tale sudden recoveries. It's hard to show the struggle of mental illness, because staring at the wall hating yourself just doesn't make great reading.

[Ashi]

I think I would love to see more from the uninformed fluffer, Billy's POV of the story. I like how you start the story that way, an almost voyeuristic, but aloof third person take on the story. Do you think Billy will come back? Quentin seems to be a smart guy.

[Canuk]

sorry but what is an "uninformed fluffer"???

 

I found this interesting, but your comment about "dramatising mental illness without falling back on suicide" seems not connected to the story , well not the story I read. Perhaps (I say to myself, more than as a question) if i had read the original version you comment would have made more sense?

[myself_i_must_remake]

there's more to come. it'll make sense.

[kguralchuk]

Watching porn is always associated so much with emotion and passion and getting the viewer excited about what they're watching on screen. I love the look behind the scenes and the acknowledgement that the art of doing porn is probably a lot more scientific then we realize. It was interesting being inside the actor's head and would love to see more.

[myself_i_must_remake]

https://www.gayauthors.org/story/myself-i-must-remake/andpornography

 

I updated some stuff and would love constructive feedback. I'm struggling to get this story to do what I want. I definitely have something in mind; it's just kind of hard to pull off.