davides

I liked the story. It was very interesting. I just couldn't seem to get a lock on the characters. Did you leave out their physical descriptions or did i just miss them? hair colour,eye colour, height. I just didnt know how to picture them. Other than that it was great.

Your stories are amazing! An intellectual whirlwind! Please continue!

Great story! I like how powerful your lead character is. Usually when a story includes the supernatural element there's a distinctive villain. However your hero doesn't seem to have any classic villains powerful enough to cause him much concern (the fbi agent is so woefully mortal). That's the thing i like most. The story is about him learning to feel again. I wouldn't consider the purpose a villain. i think it's whole robotic, unaffected demeanor is bullshit. I think the two spirits need each other like lovers do. These are my reasons: 1. It described their relationship as two parts/halves of a whole 2. It implied that it had chosen to come to our world and not that it was a necessity. Well its a decision both spirits made then. I think that indicates that they are of some social/romantic significance to each other if they decided to come to a new world together. I think the only reason the spirit is trying to act all detached is because it doesn't want Will to realize the bond with the other spirit because it would mean revealing a weakness. Seems like the two spirits have been struggling like crazy to finally be together. Now that they are they're never letting go. Will and Ryan are definitely indisposable. Anyway i went through all that just to explain why i don't consider the purpose a villain. And that's why i love this story. Because it is in essence a love story. The supernatural is just an amazing complement. Thank you for writing it and please keep going. <3