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  1. Milos

    benjamin

    It's really hard to put focus on a topic like suicide without being too heavy-handed or too flighty with it, especially being a huge advocate for organizations like the Trevor Project. It's a sad part of the LGBT community, and the statistics are staggering. In the case of this story, it's a catalyst for other events, but it was an event that still had staggering consequences for our main character, both in previous chapters and future chapters. I'm happy that you said I've balanced things out well; I was hoping I hadn't dwelled on the issue too much. Thank you for the kind comments!
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    benjamin

    A kick to the teeth is good for some A kiss with a fist is better than none You hit me once I hit you back You gave a kick I gave a slap You smashed a plate over my head And I set fire to our bed FLORENCE AND THE MACHINE - KISS WITH A FIST (2009) * * * * * Some rock nerd had found a Microwhip Scorpion in a ball of amber over in Asia. As Eli rested his head against the doorframe, watching the sidewalk whiz by, he wondered if the scorpion could have even fathomed the idea that primates would be
  3. Milos

    Sweet reality

    Rosa sounds like a force to be reckoned with. This chapter came together well. Can't wait to see more.
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    Chapter 1

    Damn, dude.
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    pink necktie

    Hooked by the title? Pun intended? Thanks for the comments!
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    pink necktie

    Digital stalking and catfishing are a scary phenomena. Much more to come. Thanks for the review!
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    pink necktie

    Thank you!
  8. When you find out who Bobberson actually is... Well... Stuff and things. ^_-
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    pink necktie

    I've heard of outreach cards similar to that before, but a little less obvious that they were asking for help. Not sure if it's a thing, but makes sense.
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    pink necktie

    Working on Chapter 5 right now. Thanks for the crits.
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    pink necktie

    So he can see the man in disguise So he can see the big surprise So he knows he's got to find Gotta find some peace of mind And he knows, he's the Fortune Soul BLACKMILL- FORTUNE SOUL (2011) * * * * * Birds indistinctly chirped somewhere in the distance; somewhere, a train sounded its horn. The large park was fairly desolate aside from a playground on the far, east side. For being the beginning of March, Eli thought it was a little too fucking warm. He sighed. He had reservations. He couldn’
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    moms and aunts

    It's written, I'm just waiting for the edit to come back. A little more mystery coming your way.
  13. Wanted to start an open discussion about the story, in case anyone wanted to talk about it. I also wanted to thank everyone for the fantastic comments and support that I've received so far. [sharedmedia=stories:stories:5199] And here's my cat tax, if you're into that sort of thing:
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    keyboards

    Thank you!
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    keyboards

    A lot of kids use aggression to deal with anger. I remember a kid in high school pulling the cord out of a mouse and throwing it at someone across the room. I remember seeing the keyboard thing in a meme or an online video somewhere. Thanks for the awesome edits!
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    moms and aunts

    And the mystery shall deepen.
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    moms and aunts

    Thanks! Chapter 4 is with the editor now, so whenever that comes across, I'll be sure to post.
  18. Wish we could turn back time, to the good ol’ days, When our momma sang us to sleep, but now we’re stressed out. TWENTY ONE PILOTS — STRESSED OUT (2015) * * * * * Eli shook violently. Who is Bob Bobberson? Who the fuck is Bob Bobberson? He collected his thoughts, what he’d do to Bob Bobberson if they ever crossed paths; it was by no accounts picturesque. 3/10, 11:57pm we're telling everyone at school tomorrow about you everyone gonna no you take it up the ass u shld just kill urself and
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    keyboards

    I find it looks the same, but everything has changed I find remembering gets harder every day Sometimes, I still believe who I pretend to be Sometimes, the little thing's exactly how it seems Exactly how it seems How to Destroy Angels – Ice Age (2012) * * * * * No matter how much he’d tried to force it, sleep didn’t come easy. The entire night, Eli tossed and turned, trying everything he could to turn off his brain for even a moment of silent bliss, but nothing worked. He finally blinked
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    fif-teen

    Working on it presently.
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    fif-teen

    I think you're onto something here. Thanks for the review!
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    fif-teen

    Lisa -- is it the 'chick code' you're thinking of? For the letter: as I understand it, in cases of possible suicide the original letter(s) left to loved ones have to be processed as evidence, and must remain sealed until a case is cleared. Photocopies are given to those for whom the letters are intended any time before that, in case there is DNA evidence, so more than likely it would have been someone working with the crime scene processors who wrote the name on the envelope. This is how I intended it.
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    fif-teen

    Everyone is walking on the edge of life, Like a ghost of a shadow, barely alive, Even time’s in a rush, But it’s going nowhere. Everyone’s connected but no one is connecting. The human element has long been missing. Tell me, have you seen it? Have you seen it? ARMIN VAN BUUREN, ALONE (2013) * * * * * Eli jerked back as a plate of flan was slid in front of him, a single candle jiggling in rhythm with the undulating custard, the flame thrashing around the wick. Behind him, a four-piece M
  24. To quote Jimmy Fallon in the Sara skit, "Like, seriously seriously. Ew!"
  25. So far, this has been a good story. You've had a good string of cliffhangers, and thankfully, anyone reading in the future won't have to endure the pain of waiting for the next chapter. (Please don't leave us hanging much longer!) With this last chapter, though, there is one little detail that sort of bothers me. When everyone was trying to hook David up with Kathy, Danny and Twooey had some pretty strong objections to it, and were fairly vocal with their concerns. Now David is trying to hook Sam up with Deena, and Twooey doesn't seem to have an issue with it, and seems to be encouraging him. Why the change of heart? Did I overlook something, maybe? Keep up the good work.
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