MidnightMan

Couple of Issues "Scott looked over and found him had passed out in his seat." omit (had) ? "He took the time slip off the sleeping man’s shoes" time (to) slip ? Great Thanksgiving, until the older brother mucked it up. I had a feeling that was coming but hoped he would have come around by now. I'm steadily disliking this Rick Sr. more and more. There's something wrong with that man. Loved it that Scott carried Charlie into the house. That is very endearing to me. (okay one more chapter)

I have to say, that one of the things I enjoy with your characters in the story is that they aren't perfect. Small flaws mistakes and a bit of forgetfulness make them all the more real. Was going to take a nap... but I have to see how this thanksgiving dinner turns out. I'll cuss you later for my lack of sleep.

I'm curious now how Charlie's brother will take the news with regard to his current budding relationship. Thankfully Tonya has a spine! Okay... one more chapter and then a nap!

I'm fighting sleep again. I shouldn't have gotten up at 4:30 this morning. Not to say that the story isn't absolutely captivating, I'm just sleep deprived today. I'm going to get through at least one more chapter if it kills me! Nothing to complain about, and I'm glad were getting some closure here even with Charlie's world in such turmoil.

Wow! seems like Charlie finally grew a pair! Good flow, no issues. GREAT story... must read more.

OMG! Nothing contstructive to say, can't stop here. Next chapter!

Definitely a busy night and even crazier morning for poor Charlie. If these twists continue I'm going to have to get a neck brace. MORE!

It's already all been said. Usually I don't like a rehash of events but you slid through it with ease and progressed through the dinner. Thank you for that! I would have been royally ticked if there wasn't some advancement in the story line. (I'm getting greedy with chapters and am so happy that I don't have to wait for the next one) Scott is incredibly unabashed. I wish I were as brazen in the matters of the heart This sentence was a little awkward... (till I need it later?) “Thank you so much, Marie. Would you mind terribly if I left my laptop with you till I needed it later?” Okay... next chapter!

Great chapter, and at the risk of being vague, I'm rushing to the next one! No complaints, no wording issues, can't wait to see how Scott pulls Julie over the coals!

I KNEW IT! Well I don't know it for certain, but I expect to find out in some later chapter. That mother of is was meddling! The instance with Sam was down right hysterical. Can't blame a girl for trying though. I had problems with this sentence... "The tight sweater showed off just how good figure Scott Reeds could cut." Still not certain what you meant here, but it doesn't really matter. The rest was great! Next chapter!

Heh! GO BARBARA! Hope she guts Rick Sr. like a fish.Curious if the 'thank you note' didn't happen to instigate Mr. Reed's sudden interest in the school.

Can't say that I like Rick Sr one damn bit. I hope he comes around or that Barbara boxes his ears. I did notice however we didn't get any resolution in this chapter. I'm thinking that you're doing it on purpose! Just leaving me hanging. Next chapter awaits!

LOVE IT! BOMBSHELL! Sort of a shock and awe compaign if there ever was one. One thing I was curious about... I thought they wrapped the book in the previous chapter at the bookstore? Not that it matters... Great flow in this chapter. Eventhing moved at a fabulous pace. Can't wait to read the next one!

A bit of a rollercoaster ride this one. I was all hopped up waiting for them to meet... and then you cheated me out of it! You are a BAD MAN! j/k (well maybe not... we'll see in future chapters) Couple of issues.... seemed to be a redundancy in word usage. I hadn't noticed in previous chapters but this one had a bit. "He headed back out and headed to the mall" (headed headed) bag bag bag... people people people people... you get what I'm saying. This line gave me pause as well... "But, we doubt the rest will care as much as you where" As much as you where? It took me a moment to wrap my mind around what you meant. Then again I'm a dimwit and lucky to have made it out of perochial school. Okay... I have to warm up the car and carry my brother to work, then rush back so I can read more! Great stuff Comic! Loving it!

Mothers.... sinister creatures. Worse than santa and better than a best friend on our bad days. The play by play when making cereal was a bit stilted... but altogether a great chapter. Seems to me that Charlie is avoiding some other inner demons he's not quite yet ready to face. I really enjoyed Barbara. She became real to me as soon as she screamed Charlie's full name through the answering machine. Made me laugh!

'Charlie awoke before the first rosy fingers of dawn had spread across the dark sky' Fabulous imagry. I'm glad Charlie let her go, though I am surprised it disturbed him as much as it did to do it. I suppose parting ways after a two year investment of time and emotion is never a simple matter. I have time to squeeze in one more chapter before I carry my brother to work. Thanks again for another great chapter!

Noticed that you skipped a few words here and there. First sentence 'needed to something' I'm sure you meant 'needed to do something'. I liked this chapter. I read like a quick background scene. It's always nice to better relate to the character when you flesh them out this way. I love blueberries so thank you also for sharing that recipe!

Sorry for the late review... I fell asleep at the wheel.... Now I've woken up with a space bar dent in my forhead. Not exactly my most shining moment. Loved the chapter and glad that they finally were able to meet. I'm anxious to see where this leads!

Other than putting Tina's head on a stick... I'm enjoying the flow and the story. Good stuff! At first I though you mashed charlie and was cussing you like a sailor lol I re-read and calmed myself down a bit. Not that I should feel that protective... but those souls seem to need a barrier around them sometimes. Thanks for the story!

Retro reviews.... I should have done this after I finished chapter 2. Instead I'm doing it now. Well... because I can... and didn't have the forethought to do it when I finished it about 20 minutes ago. I kinda wanna kick Charlie in the nuts. Grow a SPINE man! Maybe that will come in future chapters... perhaps it's already there. I'll find out soon!

A great start into an intriguing story... Grips me from the start and makes me want to keep reading... (I'll probably cuss you for lack of sleep at some point). Thanks for your efforts. I have no criticisms that CIA didn't already cover elloquently.

cliffhanger much??? heheh evil

As always I love a great beginning that pulls you in. This does just that. No long drawn out mess with a littany we can't get further into the story... Great stuf... now on for more!!!!

<--- A geek... A gay geek! I'm other things as well. We all are more than any label put on us I suppose. I could probably get contacts and not let anyone see me reading my latest selection in books, but contacts cost money... and I refuse to buy a kindle. You can't dog-ear a kindle.

All I can say is WOW! After seeing so many beautiful people... there is absolutely no way I'm going to put my mug in here. It is so rare to see so many that are as beautiful on the inside as they are on the outside. Did you all happen to crop out the conjoined twin or something?