rossn

Great chapter!!

Well; I must say, so far this is the best story line of the series. Well done! Then you better get to writing. You have a lot of words to type!!! LOL

Well; I must say, so far this is the best story line of the series. Well done!

Laura will be the friend killed, Angelo will be the betrayer, and Vicent will be the one that brings pain and has a pure heart. Now who has the beating heart? LOL We will see if I am correct.

I am going to do just that drpaladin.

Thanks for the suggestion Astone2292. I will. Phases of the Moon was a Wednesday only publication and that story's chapters were longer. Regardless of the length of the chapters, Cia is writing an excellent story and my hat is off to her for it!

Well I guess I got Miss Cia's gender wrong. My apologies Ma'am. I still wish the chapters were longer. I realize why they are not, but I still wish......

Hey man, I love this story; but I have one suggestion. Please make the chapters longer. Excellent story man! Thanks Ross

DAM......... that was an EXCELLENT chapter!

**pulls the line in slowly** oh, oh... not so fast... Man, No need to try and set the hook. I am already hooked..LOL.........

Well said Man. A good author knows a novel is as much about suspense as it is about the story line. Keep us hooked!!!!

An excellent novel. I read all 201,000+ words in one day! Please don't stop the story here. Keep pounding out excellent chapters! Happy New Year to all! I hope 2021 is better for all of us!

Hello FanLit, Actually Ethan did not leave a clue. He str8 out told us where it will go. And for the record, I am not attacking Ethan for how the story ended and I believe Ethan wanted this sort of reaction from us because it make us think about the story and how WE have made the same mistakes Jamie made in this story. Well written stories always elicit an emotional and rational reaction from the readers; very good stories will lead us to some realizations about ourselves or life in general. This story teaches us to NOT form conclusions until we know the entire facts. I believe, we are all guilty of the mistakes Jamie (and to some degree Ali) made. Yes, this is a very well written story. What I am bitching about is that I want one more chapter, maybe several years in the future, that ties it all up with a nice bow on top. To me, this story is like a great road trip. The destination is NOT the point. The events that happen between departure and arrival is the import parts. I am suggesting, ok bitching, about the fact that we have not arrived at the destination. Yes, we know where the story is going; however, with this ending we have not arrived. We just know where the story is going. We need an arrival. Thanks for reading my thoughts (again) RossN PS- for those of you take exception to my use of the word Bastardized; here is the definition from the Oxford Dictionary: (of a version of something) lower in quality or value than the original form, typically as a result of the addition of new elements. "by the 1760s, English cookery books were offering a bastardized version of French dishes" What I am saying is that by not finishing the story, Ethan is forcing me to finish it and my version is and will be of less quality that what he would have written.

Hello FanLit, Actually Ethan did not leave a clue. He str8 out told us where it will go. And for the record, I am not attacking Ethan for how the story ended and I believe Ethan wanted this sort of reaction from us because it make us think about the story and how WE have made the same mistakes Jamie made in this story. Well written stories always elicit an emotional and rational reaction from the readers; very good stories will lead us to some realizations about ourselves or life in general. This story teaches us to NOT form conclusions until we know the entire facts. I believe, we are all guilty of the mistakes Jamie (and to some degree Ali) made. Yes, this is a very well written story. What I am bitching about is that I want one more chapter, maybe several years in the future, that ties it all up with a nice bow on top. To me, this story is like a great road trip. The destination is NOT the point. The events that happen between departure and arrival is the import parts. I am suggesting, ok bitching, about the fact that we have not arrived at the destination. Yes, we know where the story is going; however, with this ending we have not arrived. We just know where the story is going. We need an arrival. Thanks for reading my thoughts (again) RossN

Many years ago, when I was in an American Lit class in college, I had to read a short story, The Lady or the Tiger. If you end this story line here, you will be just as frustrating a writer as Frank R Stockton. The Professor for the class, Dr. Davis, made us write an essay about The Lady or the Tiger. She later told me that in her 33 years of teaching, I was the only student she ever had that did not write their essay about what the guy got (the lady or the tiger). My essay addressed how I thought it was wrong for the writer to expect us, the reader, to finish HIS story. Ethan, if you stop this story here, you will be guilty of the same crime. That crime is ending a story with out a CONCLUSION. The conclusion can be a Tragedy; or a Happy Ever After; however, it needs to be in the writers on words because a good story tells us as much about the writer, and their thoughts and moods, as it does about ourselves. By ending this story here, you will force us, the readers, to create a bastardized version of YOUR STORY in our mind. Yes, I used the word bastardized correctly, because you will be forcing the reader to create an unholy blend of your thoughts and perspectives with our thoughts and perspectives. The end result will leave a 'bitter taste in our mouths' and minds. Now; you need to decide if this story will be a Tragedy or a Happy Ever After and get back to the key board and finish the damn story. Thanks for leading us on this journey, RossN PS- I seldom leave a thought or comment about a story, but this story is so well written, I felt compelled to post the above. I would say "good job Ethan"; however, the job is not finished. Please finish it.