Carlos Hazday

Who knew how far things would go when I introduced Sean. I never thought he'd hang around full time. I kinda grew fond of the level-headed guy.

LOL I figured it was time to inject a little estrogen into the family. I'm certain the grandmothers are thrilled.

It ends, it ends. I never like Damien much so I dispose of him in the next chapter.

Maybe in the beginning it bothered me, not anymore. My primary editor has trained me to 'simplify' as much as possible. I'm working on something and limiting myself to thousand-word chapters. The restriction forces me to look at each word and decide if they add anything. If not, it gets cut. It's a great feeling to convey a thought or action in as few words as possible. The best advice I can give you is to find someone to help you. Self-editing is a good thing, but whenever I read a story nobody but the author's worked on, I can tell. No matter how hard we try we miss things. A second--or a second, third, fourth--set of eyes are a wonderful thing.

Very enjoyable. I like how you paint pictures of the characters and things. Now I can't wait to find out how they'll get to Brad.

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.

Anything's possibles. As long as him being legless isn't an issue for her.

LMAO! I did cut out the line where CJ offered to go to New York and 'deal' with Damien. Honestly! I think most readers would figure out the thought occurred to him, though. It's going to be weird when I write a story with all new characters and I have to build their personalities from scratch.

I like your attitude. At the time of year this chapter takes place, Key West's a lot warmer than DC anyway.

I think I've wrapped up most loose ends. Do you realize this book was supposed to be about their daughter? I mean, I knew this was going to happen when I introduced Liz. I could have probably done it in a hell of a lot less than 27 chapters and 120 thousand words. But I tend to ramble. Plan to be in Washington for Labor Day Weekend. The guys are planning a Housewarming Open House. The usual suspects will be there, plus all the neighbors on their block will be invited. Careful if you run into Sean, @Defiance19 gets possessive at times.

You already complaining? The story's not even over! LOL What do you mean 'next volume?'

At one point, I started a list of presents the girl would get and from whom. It was fun, but it ended on the cutting floor. I didn't feel it fit into the chapter. But spoiled doesn't begin to describe how that girl will grow up. Discipline by the fathers may get threatened by everyone else. I even had Gus Kenworthy send a US Olympic Team onesie as a gift. LOL

Hey! You're being sexist! A little boy can also be an angel. Like I was

Some guys just don't think things through.

The first female Abello baby in at least three generations!

I'm in line...

We knew Damian lacked common sense, he seems to have lost it. Let's hope Cristina's not stupid about what she does now.

I'm sure the unplanned pregnancy had something to do with it. But if what Ritchie says about Lucy's commentary is true, that girl has her head screwed on right.

1. FORMATTING. I know it's not your fault but it was sooo distracting. (Sorry, had to bitch about something. 2. Due to 1 above, the first few snapshots did not really sink in. Glad I read through a second time. Crystal clear and smile-worthy now. I like the approach even though some would say it's confusing. You know I've done similar things. In this case, the formatting issue robbed some of its punch, the extra spacing kept me from appreciating the rapid-fire effect of scene jumps. 3. Poor Trevor, he's no longer Cam's "closest thing to a brother." 4. I really started appreciating the story when you hit us with a line in St. Lucia patois! You transported me to the islands! 5. If I ever made you tear up, we're even. But they were happy tears while I chuckled. Real nice job, Def. Confused identity combined with reunion with a long-lost relative was a winning combo. You done good, teach.

Sufficiently inebriated and in a great mood, CJ and Owen left the bar before closing and stumbled down the still-buzzing streets of Key West. Continued carousing was tempting, but they did not want to spend the next day recovering. Inside the Cypress House compound, they shed what little they wore, and splashed in the pool until the sweat and cigarette smoke permeating skin and hair dissipated. A quick rinse under the outdoor shower to wash away the chlorine was the last thing CJ remembered. He

Google it. If you're an author, you should be familiar with grammar rules. Even if you decide not to follow them.

The orange glow from the White House told me the loonies and haters would be acting up.

Have you been reading my notes? I don't think the National Enquirer will be buying and burying the story. Knowing CJ and how at ease he's become with publicity, he'll complain it wasn't shot from his best side. Does all the sexual tension in this one make up for the syrupy ending of the last one?

Hey! I have to write something for loyal readers who like sap. You know, so many readers mentioned parents finding out I was surprised. Ritchie and Lucy may be a few months shy of 18, but they're adults in many ways. If Ritchie wants to borrow CJ and Ozzie's apartment, that tells me Lucy was fine with those two knowing. So, even though they're nearly adults, they still spoke to 'grown-ups' HA! I wanted it to be her decision. It's a woman's choice to make and no state or politician has the right to interfere. One little detail I snuck in was the fact the dads and the dads-to-be are familiar with and support Planned Parenthood. This is one area my personal beliefs colored the characters' own. Pretty timely too, don't ya think?

I enjoyed that. The fat slob will no doubt stay as far away as possible. Let's hope he reports back to the sister. I would have definitely snapped at both butterball and the bitch. Well done, Rigby!