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Okay, I'm still interested, LOL. Liam's a small detail into whatever Corbin's running from, but you're doing well in escalating the suspense. Definitely good bones to the story. Once it's clean, it should be a total pleasure to read.
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As long as we pay attention, most of us improve with experience. Every time a new reader binges on my stuff, I end up reading at least part of the chapters and fixing errors. Not so much with my current book, but older stuff's riddled with typos and bad punctuation.
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I think I already mentioned this was one of the most fun chapters to write. It was fluffy, but I was able to insert a couple of serious lines in it. Stop trying to ruin my reputation!
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Parts of this chapter were sketched out on the train traveling to Florida in a great journal someone gifted me. Can you believe how long it takes me from conceptualizing to posting?
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An interesting star that intrigued me enough I'll read the next chapter. Pretty well written, the grammatical errors won't bother most readers. Unfortunately, these days I read with a mental red pencil in line; I blame it on constant harassment from my editor. The initial section describing the cabin bordered on overload; the details could have been spread out over the chapter and subsequent ones. But the mystery is the primary cause for my interest. I look forward to discovering who or what he's running from. Good job.
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Trying to catch up with your stories on the day off? I thought about you soooooo much while writing this chapter.
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@Jaro_423 I disagree. Whatever happened to Jose-Maria was not bullying. You can call it retribution, revenge, or punishment, but he was not abused without reason. I believe he earned what he was put through. We can disagree on whether it was wrong or right, but he did bring it upon himself. By not stopping the attempt to drug and rape CJ he was complicit in what his cousin initiated and just as guilty as him.
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Just trying to show CJ's not so obstinate he won't listen to advise and learn from others. The letter was the first time he poured ALL his feelings out at one time. I felt that would help him continue healing.
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Nice little example of how perseverance often pays off.
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@Jaro_423 In a few years, we'll hear CJ recall these times and acknowledge how large the influence his dads' friends were in his growing up. As for Bradley and Patrick, they're the reason I had Tom and JP sell their house in Virginia and move to the District of Columbia. I wanted them in the proper school district so they could attend Walls.
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@Jaro_423 At 16, CJ's perception of shades of gray isn't quite the same as with most adults. But that's what we're here to see: him growing up and coming of age.
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@Jaro_423 CJ's shown he has a temper and the ability to hurt people; we can only hope guidance from his fathers and others will help him learn how to control his initial reaction to strike back.
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The grandson is a perfectly acceptable excuse. I've stressed it with his evolving attitude toward social media, but CJ has learned how to play the game. In the present circumstances, he realizes writing a great book doesn't guarantee a wide readership and submits to the discomfort of a book tour. Everybody knows who Stephen King is. How many people have heard of Kazuo Ishiguro who won the 2017 Nobel Prize for literature (I had to look it up.) The same thing happens in GA. Some very popular stories are riddled with errors while better-written ones at times languish. Thanks for the excellent, challenging commentary!
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I've been known to fake it. LOL
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Glad you enjoyed it, bud.
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There will be a couple more TV interviews for CJ (and Owen) in upcoming chapters. We'll just have to wait to see who the reporters/hosts will be.
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You're just jealous you don't get to go home with a free book or CD. Musicians do the same thing.
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Thanks, bud.
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Thanks, Coach! This was a fun chapter to write. Ellen's personality dovetails nicely with CJ's. A more somber Trip was a great character to use, I read over the chapter in Summer where they met and it was nice to give background on CJ without relying on narration or him telling his own story. I wish Ellen would read this chapter and give me her thoughts. LOL
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@Butcher56 When appropriate, I like to sprinkle a little education in my stories.
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