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  1. craftingmom
    Hehe, thank you! My favorite part is after the beating and Hank steps over Brad and tells the officer that "He fell." In my mind, that just seemed to be justice after all the times he said Devyn "fell" to get his bruises.And Yes, the sequel to the Neko is my next plan. I'm working up to it. It usually takes me at least two to three weeks of just thinking about it to really feel like I can start it--I keep feeling that moment getting closer, though! I think the Neko Shorts are helping me to get there.
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    Thank you!
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    Thank you very much. I probably could have made him suffer more, but not sure how realistic I could have made that, but I wanted him to know he was dying.
  4. craftingmom
    Thank you very much!! I'm glad it was a satisfying end to Brad. (and I love to edit!--I'm weird that way. My favorite mug says "I'm silently correcting your grammar.")
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    I'm glad everyone suggested that I write it because, I think you're right, it was a necessary addition to make the reader feel more satisfied with the ending--just knowing Brad died wasn't enough. And I did leave Gentry open there for a story of his own, if I decide to go back to write one (thanks to your suggestions about him!). Thanks so much for all your critiques and helpful reviews!
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    Prompt # 291--First Line: "Oh, crap, here we go again." That Damn Tree "Oh, crap, here we go again," he mumbled as he looked up into the tree. The slave master frowned up at the small figure perched high on the limb in the one tree that graced the slave yard: the one the young neko had scurried up when he'd first been brought here after being frightened by shotgun blasts. And now he was there again. "Kayden! Get down here!" Ellis shouted. Jacob laughed at the other neko calling up to
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    Well, think for my part (I've written stories with abuse and rape) that making sure the abuser comes across as a pretty bad person is probably a key point. I think if a writer makes the abuser appear in any kind of sympathetic light, then that can make what they do appear 'okay'. Making sure that you portray that the abused is not okay with or 'enjoys' the abuse/rape is also important. I think in the case of drugs, I would say you'd probably have to make sure that the characters are that are using the drugs are not coming across as successful or being a better person because of the drugs/alcohol. But that's all just my opinion, don't know if it helps.
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    Thanks!!
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    It definitely wasn't as much as he deserved. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks!
  10. craftingmom
    thank you so much!
  11. craftingmom
    Glad you enjoyed it!
  12. craftingmom
    Thanks! I couldn't change how he died, but at least he suffered a bit first--probably not as much as everyone would have liked, but still...
  13. craftingmom
    Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Hope you like All In as well.
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    Chapter 8

    craftingmom commented on craftingmom's story chapter in Chapter 8

    I'm so glad that you are enjoying it. Roman isn't quite as bad a Brad was, more of a plotter. The shaving cream scene is one of my favorites too. This story has a pretty slow build up of Kayden and Damien's relationship. I really hope you like the rest!
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    ALL IN Extra--Brad Milburn's Demise "Chris. Trent. Lyle." Brad locked gazes with the men he had fucking trusted. He was hot with rage, his body shaking with so much anger as he felt his hands wrenched together and snapped tightly in handcuffs. He pierced his glare on the man who had precipitated it all. "Jason. You guys are so dead. You hear me!" "Let's go, Milburn," the officer yanked at his hands roughly, but Brad didn't care right now. He'd deal with this asshole officer later.
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    Hehe! So glad you thought it was funny! It's my favorite 'short' so far. Thank you.
  17. craftingmom
    Hehe, yeah, my daughter doesn't understand why it's called a football if you mostly throw and carry it.
  18. craftingmom
    So glad you liked them so far!
  19. craftingmom
    Thank you. Glad you are enjoying my little forays into the neko world.
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    Prompt #364: First Line: "That's the last time I'm telling you anything." A Slip of the Tongue "That's the last time I'm telling you anything," Harrison snapped as he plopped down on the couch in his brother's study. His brother, the esteemed Duke of Whitmore, was barely able to breathe as he was laughing so hard. Tears were actually starting to stream down the man's face. Harrison glared at the top of his brother's black-haired scalp as he bent over laughing into his hands. "I--
  21. craftingmom
    So glad you enjoyed it! It's my favorite one so far (although the wedding cake one might be a close second, but I haven't finished that one.)
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    Thanks!
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    Glad you liked it!
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    Thank you, thank you.
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