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Thanks! It's my first, and very likely my last lol. I usually have trouble keeping my writing in the real world, so I stick to fiction

Thanks! It's my first, and very likely my last lol. I usually have trouble keeping my writing in the real world, so I stick to fiction

Thanks! It's my first, and very likely my last lol. I usually have trouble keeping my writing in the real world, so I stick to fiction

I'm glad you like Bear (he's based off my dog ) He gets much more annoying later on, though XDI'm glad you liked it lol it was hard to write without letting it get more sexual (that would screw up the plot entirely, though ) so it's good to hear it was worth it. Those two lines kind of slipped in, and then I couldn't find any way to portray Frank's character without using them lol. I didn't really want any of my characters to be that casually vulgar (I'm trying to keep this story as inoffensive as possible, just to prove to myself that I can) but I think Frank has to be to fit my image of him. Thanks for pointing out the typo! I get really absorbed in the story sometimes, and things like that get past me. Maybe I should start reading it over before posting lol.

I'm glad you like Bear (he's based off my dog ) He gets much more annoying later on, though XDI'm glad you liked it lol it was hard to write without letting it get more sexual (that would screw up the plot entirely, though ) so it's good to hear it was worth it. Those two lines kind of slipped in, and then I couldn't find any way to portray Frank's character without using them lol. I didn't really want any of my characters to be that casually vulgar (I'm trying to keep this story as inoffensive as possible, just to prove to myself that I can) but I think Frank has to be to fit my image of him. Thanks for pointing out the typo! I get really absorbed in the story sometimes, and things like that get past me. Maybe I should start reading it over before posting lol.

I walked out of my house, hearing the sound level die down a few decibels as the door closed behind me. I sighed to myself, happy to finally get away from my three brothers and my parents. I loved them, but they really got on my nerves when they were loud like this, which was pretty much all the time. I closed my eyes, trusting the force of habit to guide me down the trail into the forest without tripping as I savored the quiet. I could still hear the noises of the small town behind me, but thos

A sixteen year old looking for a quiet place finds more than he bargained for.

I'm so happy to hear you say that! XD My main worry while writing their dialogue is that it isn't showing their chemistry right. It always sounds good in my head, but when I write it down it sounds rehearsed lol.Sorry about my reply to your last review, it was pretty disjointed and I accidentally lied about not posting lol (came back from vacation early) Thanks for your review, it was reassuring to read XD

I woke up slowly, aware of Asher’s quiet breathing, and I realized he was awake. I smiled and looked over at him, and found him smiling back. “Where should we go today?” Asher asked, quietly so we didn’t wake Bear. I shrugged, happy to go anywhere with Asher. “Let’s start hiking,” I said. “We can camp at the top of the highest hill we can find.” Asher nodded, still smiling, and wiggled out of his sleeping bag. I tried not to stare as more and more of his body came into view, but it was hard.

I woke up earlier than usual, and I immediately checked to see if my wish had come true. Unfortunately, it hadn’t. It looked like Bear had pushed Asher more into the middle during the night, and I reached over Asher’s sleeping form to give him a pat. I lay back down, careful not to wake either of them, and decided to wait until Asher woke up on his own. I looked at his face in the morning light, memorizing every perfect curve and line. I wished I had my camera, so I could capture this beauty for

I woke up before Asher did, and I went to have a shower as quickly and quietly as I could, trying not to wake him. I washed myself in record time, but when I turned the water off and stepped out to grab a towel, I found him brushing his teeth, still in his boxers. “Fuck,” I swore, covering my crotch. “Not again!” I walked over to the towel rack, grabbing one and covering myself with it. I’d like to say that I was calm about it, since he’d already seen it before, but my face felt like it was on

I woke up at seven to my phone buzzing, and I saw that Asher had texted, asking me to pick him up ASAP. I threw on some shorts and ran down to the jetskis, grabbing mine and heading out. I knew it wasn’t an emergency, and Asher probably just wanted to work on the island, but I’d never say no to an excuse to spend more time with him. I pulled up at the dock, where he was waiting, and let myself fall sideways into the water while he got on, hopefully cleaning off a bit. “Hey!” he said. “You splas

Thanks! Hearing you say that is reassuring lol this is my first real attempt at writing dialogue and I was worried it would sound unnatural

Thanks! Hearing you say that is reassuring lol this is my first real attempt at writing dialogue and I was worried it would sound unnatural

I actually really like that idea XD I'd have to change it a bit though (because of how the story's gone so far)They don't end up bringing Frank to the island, but it's cause of a lack of time, not because it's secret. The cave is the only part they don't tell anyone about lol I'm just going to ignore the part about Martha and Bernie until a bit later in the story (spoilers XD) Overall, thanks for the review, and I really like your idea, but I won't be able to write or post for the next week, but as soon as I'm reunited with my computer (I'm on vacation). Once I'm back, I'll wait until I've posted more of the story before writing that scene (that way you'll be caught up to where the story's at now, so you can have input on how that scene goes (if you want it)). Sorry if none of this makes sense, but I'm writing this off my phone and the interface is pretty bad (I can't see your review while writing this, and I can't see most of what I've written lol). Thanks again for the review and idea!

I actually really like that idea XD I'd have to change it a bit though (because of how the story's gone so far)They don't end up bringing Frank to the island, but it's cause of a lack of time, not because it's secret. The cave is the only part they don't tell anyone about lol I'm just going to ignore the part about Martha and Bernie until a bit later in the story (spoilers XD) Overall, thanks for the review, and I really like your idea, but I won't be able to write or post for the next week, but as soon as I'm reunited with my computer (I'm on vacation). Once I'm back, I'll wait until I've posted more of the story before writing that scene (that way you'll be caught up to where the story's at now, so you can have input on how that scene goes (if you want it)). Sorry if none of this makes sense, but I'm writing this off my phone and the interface is pretty bad (I can't see your review while writing this, and I can't see most of what I've written lol). Thanks again for the review and idea!

Thanks! Also, thanks for all your other reviews They've been really awesome to read XD

I woke up earlier than usual so I could work out, and I did an hour of exercises. I focused mainly on my ass, remembering what Fiona had told me, and when I was done, I went into the bathroom. I stripped off my clothes, but before I stepped into the shower, I walked over to the mirror. Feeling like an idiot, I examined my ass in the mirror. I decided that Fiona had been right. I did have a nice ass. I still didn’t understand how she could compare it to Asher’s, though. Satisfied, I turned and go

Thanks! I'll be adding chapter 6 today (I don't know when it'll be approved, though)

lol I thought that was a weak ending when I was writing it but I was really eager to move on to the next chapter so I left it. It was just the easiest way I could think of to show that he likes animals XD

Thanks! I never thought about the Ashley/Asher names lolI'm going to avoid commenting on Asher liking Ben (spoilers XD) Thanks for noticing the Tori-->Tara thing I totally missed that when I was writing it lol No, I don't mind criticism at all. I'd way rather know what I'm doing wrong so I can avoid it than never know where to try to improve. I know I use grinning, grinned, etc *way* too much lol I can never think of synonyms either. I guess I'll cheat and look some up. I'm not sure what you mean with the dialogue tags, so I'll look that up too lol. It probably won't change until Thursday of week 3 (where I'm writing right now), but I'll definitely try to fix it. Thanks for the constructive criticism! You don't have to worry about offending me with anything you say lol Thanks again!

I woke up at seven to the sound of Asher in the shower, and I went into my room to grab some clothes for us. I looked through all my things before deciding on what I’d bring for Asher. I picked my favorite shorts, which would look really good on his ass, and a tight shirt I had that would show off his muscles and the grey in his eyes. When I was satisfied, I walked into the bathroom, leaving a towel and the clothes I’d picked for him by the shower while I brushed my teeth. I grabbed an extra to

Thanks! You do need a licence to scuba dive, but like you pointed out, there's nobody there to stop them. To answer your question, yes, Tommy's single (for now lol), and the jet ski, ATV, and dirt bike weren't specifically for Asher, he just guessed (correctly) that another set would be useful. He didn't really 'give' them the island, since he still owns it so whatever they spend improving it will eventually make its way back to him lol. He's generous, but he's also a smart investor XD

Thanks! You do need a licence to scuba dive, but like you pointed out, there's nobody there to stop them. To answer your question, yes, Tommy's single (for now lol), and the jet ski, ATV, and dirt bike weren't specifically for Asher, he just guessed (correctly) that another set would be useful. He didn't really 'give' them the island, since he still owns it so whatever they spend improving it will eventually make its way back to him lol. He's generous, but he's also a smart investor XD

Thanks! You do need a licence to scuba dive, but like you pointed out, there's nobody there to stop them. To answer your question, yes, Tommy's single (for now lol), and the jet ski, ATV, and dirt bike weren't specifically for Asher, he just guessed (correctly) that another set would be useful. He didn't really 'give' them the island, since he still owns it so whatever they spend improving it will eventually make its way back to him lol. He's generous, but he's also a smart investor XD