Geron Kees

Hmm. There's an awful lot going on here. And, aren't the guys getting daring, making out in a stall in the bathroom? I don't know what their school is like, but the high school I went to, the stall doors ended well above the floor, and you could always see if someone - or two someone's - was inside. Greg and Denny? Nice pairing, maybe. I'm going to have to try to pick up the pace and read faster, because I am starting to get restless to find out what is going on here! Nice chapter. And someone once said that small town life was dull!

A few people have pointed out to me that stories of this length would be easier for people to handle in chapters. I may come around to that way of thinking in the future. Thank you again for a very nice review. I'm not sure, but I think you even embarrassed me. No - I'm sure: you embarrassed me. But it was done so nicely I have to forgive you.

Quite a strong start to this story. Good to see that Kellar did not make use of his newfound strength to take revenge on his bullying foster brother. I like a character that can think, and reason out what he wants to do, and do it sensibly. This looks like a really fascinating idea you've come up with here, and I know I will be drawn back to see how it progresses. Thanks so much for the very good read.

I just love the multiple perspectives in this story. I am not sure, but you are close to the top of the list for stories I've read online with the highest number of interesting characters in one place. I am intrigued now by Zane, and wonder at what is driving the guy. At the same time, the number of associates falling into Jay and Mikey's camp is growing in a very fun fashion. My dad was a comic book kid, and bought them into his early twenties, right up until he went off to Viet Nam. Years later, when I was maybe nine or ten, he brought this huge, heavy box into my room and sat it on the floor. "These are for you," he said, smiled, and left. When I opened the box, it was full of comics. Old ones. And one of the ones I remember very fondly was Magnus - Robot Hunter. I still have that box today.

Have you a wolf inside you somewhere? The thinking going along inside Kellar's head as he experiences all of this crazy new stuff is fascinating. The elements of the plot you are laying down - Kellar's mysterious origins, parents with no backgrounds, his possible exposure far too early in his learning process in regards to his new self - all look to be leading towards a whopping good tale. Perhaps not to be unexpected from a whopping good writer. You certainly do not disappoint!

Well - young people are people, too. Gay doesn't begin at a socially acceptable age - it starts when it starts, and it is both a wonderful new experience and a difficult place to be in life. There is an autobiographical element to these stories, and so I can say I am speaking from some experience. For the people experiencing anything in life, no matter what or when, few - if any - suddenly pause in the middle and think, "Wait - I'm not the right age for this." I think too many adults have forgotten their younger selves. We all began in basically the same way, with only variations in extremes. I guess I was a little more extreme when I was young - but I didn't know it then. And, it doesn't bother me now. Thank you for the very nice review.

Ooh - are we going for more than two chapters now? Okay, I am ready. I liked this follow up, and hope that things continue to go well for Brandon and Mark. Chuck needs to have a truck fall on him - or something (did I say that out loud?). Sigh. I love love.

Bravo! That was a wonderful hook! You have a fantasy side not apparent in the last story I read. Very, very interesting. So - I'll have to read more. No, no, I have to, I said. No, you cannot stop me. No, you cannot force me to stop...oh...my...um, are those claws? May I read more? Please?

Hi again! Another great chapter. Fascinating, the way you switch character perspectives during the course of the story. Denny is a nice addition - I am assuming you will find him a boyfriend down the line. He deserves one! Jay's family continues to please - especially dad and Linda. Favorite line of this chapter is from Jay to Linda: “Hey! You’re coppin’ a feel of my man!” Still trying to guess where you are heading with Billy Zane. What is actually driving him has to be interesting.

Much darker than your norm, Ivor. You seem to have touched a nerve with people, going by the other reviews. Perhaps a chance to explore your evil side? Just don't get carried away.

Again, I'm happy to be able to leave you a message about something charming and sweet that you've written. Love stories are about people, and I like the two guys you've placed together here quite a bit, and the love you've given them to share. I only hope that the world has some real stories out there like this one. There really should be, you know.

Aw - you got me. Jesse and Marty do live a fairly amiable existence. It is a bit of an escapist adventure, sure. I'm not going for the Pulitzer on these stories, definitely. And, that's the why of the series name:it's a charmed existence. It was supposed to be fun, and - it was. Thanks for the review.

Hello David, Thank you for the wonderful review. Although I left the land of my Nederlander roots at age nine, I have revisited this beautiful city twice each year since. Incorporating that heritage into a storyline has been a goal of mine for some time now. It seems to have at least started well, with the two stories thus posted. Thank you as well for the video link. I also think readers should take the time to look this over. Beste wensen, Geron

Hi, Ivor. Yeah, I think the guys would love Disneyland, but just find that it took time away from other activities. But I haven't decided what they will do in California just yet. That, as they say, is another story.

Love moves along a special trail, doesn't it? It's that exploration and newness that accompanies it that makes a story so fun to read. And I'm glad that there's a decent set of parents here to offset the ones that are not. There are supportive and loving parents out there in the real world, and I like to see them get that air time. And it makes all the difference to the guy's relationship to have it accepted at least on one side of the "family". So far, this tale is rolling along just fine. I'm looking forward to spending the holiday with these two again!

Thank you for that. It is, primarily, a love story. The things that Jesse and Marty are discovering about themselves and the world are not unique to their own youths, as you say. But new ideas and new ways of thinking are integral to the process of growing, and they are dealing with these things in the best ways that they can. As with any love tale, they are at their best when dealing with them together.

Hi Brendan! I was greatly surprised to see you here - this is the first comment you have ever made publicly on my writing. Thanks for the show of faith. But - these people all make an honest point here. I am aware that not everyone began their love lives as early as I did, so not everyone can empathize with it. That's just the way it is. Your points are well-taken, and I happen to agree with them. But I must also allow for the fact that we all think about and view the world differently, and that others have every right to express their views. That they feel the way they do and yet still read the stories feels to me like a fairly positive response after all.

Thank you for being honest. I have been absorbing people's impressions on the age of the characters from other reviews. But I am glad you found something there you could enjoy. Actually, when I write these stories, I don't really think about the age at all. This series is about discovery, and sometimes discovery is both eye-opening and a little hairy. But it's more about the love the main characters find while making their discoveries. Reading the first tale is not enough to see where these two guys are heading. This is a site that specializes in stories about gay life. At what age that gay life began for some of us should be less of an issue than it seems to be. I find it a little ironic that I could take these stories and do a search-and-replace on the term "13" and replace it with "16", and this controversy would likely go away. The stories would be exactly the same. There would just be three more years to them in people's minds.

I was a little surprised to see you here, Gary. Actually, I don't usually write stories with characters this young. This set arose out of a conversation I had one night last year with a group of friends, about how we all started our sex lives, more or less. Because of my Dutch origins, my youth was a bit more knowledgeable than that of my American counterparts, and they were all a little stunned at what I told them. But they quickly decided that this was something I should write down, and so I did - more or less - as fiction. I posted this story on Nifty, kind of expecting it to vanish into the morass there - but it elicited a totally unexpected response. So I talked to my friends about that, and they said - hey, go with it. I did, and here I am today. The age thing is a stumbling block for a lot of people. I noticed that a lot of people have been reading these stories, but are shy on being seen commenting, and I understand that. But the simple truth is that we all started our love lives somewhere and somewhen, and to refuse to talk about it simply because it began early seems a little stupid to me from the standpoint of a writer. Sex first happened to all of us, mostly, when we were young. I don't think it's right not to admit it.

Thanks for the happy ending. I was just a little (but only a little) worried that you might toss something unexpected at us there at the finish. But my assessment of you as a romantic that loves happy endings has held true. This was really a great dose of good feeling. There are way too many stories out there that end sadly, the last words of the poem left out, or the last notes of the song bitter and broken. Not here. This of course means I'll be looking for more. If I can read and go away happy, it means I'll be happy to come back. You're diverse enough I'm sure you have some unhappy endings somewhere - wouldn't be life without it. But I can live with an unhappy ending here and there, in order to find the stories that end like this one.

Everyone smiles over the notions of "love at first sight", and "soulmates". They're overused, I guess. But that both of these ideas carry weight in the real world is something people also acknowledge - everybody also seems to know that one couple that just seem to have snapped together like a pair of magnets from the start and who just seem perfect for each other. And so deeply in love with each other. We are looking at such a relationship from the inside here, in this tale. Even the road to love at first sight and soulmates has some rocks in it; it's the fact that those rocks don't stop the inevitable from happening that give meaning and weight to those two very special circumstances of love. Thanks for showing us that road, huh? You're a pretty good taxi driver - know all the right routes to take! Where do I send the tip?

I love a character with the strength to act, especially when she stands up for her friends or family. Linda's scene stole the show in this one, CG. A very well-done chapter! Denny is an interesting addition, I think. His past is troubled, and it shows - but he has some strength in there, that is trying to emerge. Zane - we all knew someone like that in school. Destined to butt heads with the world. When you're a kid you don't always sit down to think what drives them - you just wonder in retrospect years later. And, you usually never know. Sad, really, because all you ever really see them as is a force of nature, not a real person. Bobby - the guy with torn loyalties. And that he is loyal is his problem - he cannot divide that from the reality that it is misplaced in Zane. Or, maybe misguided is the better word. Loyalty always need to be tempered with reason. A nice addition to the already complex mix you have going in this tale. Definitely, a wonderful personal journey we are taking here.

The only explanation I can offer is that I was once a kid that age myself, and I have the scars to prove it! But I do thank you for the kind words, and feel you will likely enjoy the whole series, if you managed to make it through the first two. It really is one very long story, not yet complete, just broken into segments for the sake of convenience.

Hi William. Yes, it's fiction, more or less. And I think the most common reaction I have had from many readers is the kind of, "well, I doubt it could happen so quickly" statement. The thing is, people meet and fall in love in a single day everywhere in the world, every day of the year. It probably isn't common, agreed; but there are so many billions of us, that the number of people that it does happen to would likely stun the rest of us. Love has no rules - it does happen. I am glad you did enjoy what was there, and especially so that you took the time to tell me about it. And I hope you can overlook any other doubts you may have and enjoy the rest of the series. Thank you!

Hello, #1 loyal fan. I mean, CG . I'm glad you liked this one - it's one of my favorites. I do have to admit I kind of grinned my way through writing this one, tongue a little bit in cheek. The guys were having almost too much fun. It was time for a bit of a reality check - although you see they lived through it without much problem. And so it goes. Thanks for writing. I have a few things going right now before I can get back to Jesse and Marty. But I will get back to them.