Ms. V

Superbly rewarding, that's about the best it could go for the shit hitting the fan. ~chuckle~ The age, actions, the inner and outer dialog for the teens is spot on, and the Seth reveal was spectacular! The adults continue to underestimate their potential, yet there is a lot of crap to figure out for our little pack. Trey isn't gay, yet how will college play out? I think the Alpha was generous with a place to go, yet it's a broken down mess. There's also still a dangerous wolf out there that's after either Colton or Parker. Your exceptional chapter of resolutions has actually upped the ante on several fronts. One of the best crafted stories I've read in a while, an instant classic for me.

Very tactfully done, kudos. Contrition from Colton and compassion from Parker, the hormonal gods are satisfied. I shudder to say that females are held to a more judgmental standard, but I think you allude to it well in the teasing exchange with Shell. I hope this recent change in Parker isn't going to kill their friendship, though I'm sure it will strain it. Curtis, the new boy in town, has got her distracted, but Parker is her boo. The 'pack meeting' seems like the other shoe is about ready to crash down. ~ Ms. V

Ouch, was so worried that it would come down to this for our characters. So, a topic for the times, forced rape or situational rape, but as a plot climax. Yet, that's not what we're here to discuss. Amazing amount of new information in this chapter very well crafted. Carlton's point of view was a skilled stroke that didn't feel awkward at all. Parker has a big heart so, I'm sure forgiveness will come. However, the consequences are going to make for a bumpy ride. Colton's immediate remorse and care for Parker give me hope for him as a leader, not perfect, yet invested and responsible. Your skill has never been in question as this story unfolds. What might have been a beautifully written romance has become a deeper tale with real tensions, mistakes, and authentic reactions, both from the teens and parent. ~ Ms. V

Wow, the stakes just doubled and the truth is going to have to come out. Now we discover the true character of others in how these crucial conversations go and the relationships are tested concerning our little pack. I'm so invested in these characters now. This is great writing and I can't wait to read on. ~ Ms. V

Colton needs to talk to his dad sooner rather than later. They are so hot together, he's fighting his instinct trying to wait, and that's not a winnable war. What if he hurts Parker, he's gonna hate himself. Deep respect for your writing with the tension building, you're still adding layers of insight, and keeping it fun to read. ~ Ms. V

Amazingly well written, seamless, smoking hot. Colton showed a lot of restraint considering how close he came in the early days of "wolfing out" when things got intense with Parker. Maybe all that sex like bunnies is helping?

As if things aren't tense enough, enter tall, dark, and creepy.

Typical, two boys that need more information, especially Colton, but they are avoiding it. Parents are afraid of feeling awkward but when did that ever kill anybody? Colton knows he needs to talk to his dad but isn't taking the opportunity. This is more than a chance to commiserate with the teens, to get mad, or just chuckle at the parents. We all should take this as a challenge to commit to doing the sex talk better for our kids' sake. As an adult, parent, or mentor, be that safe resource that beats the socks off the schools or squeamish adults. A lack of information and talking about relationship dynamics is often where teen STDs, body shaming, and partner abuse start, verbal or physical. Ugh, I got a bad feeling that Colton is going to lose control and Parker is going to lose any choice in this. ~ Ms. V P.S. Sorry for the rant. That's how invested I've become in these characters.

Absentee parenting makes for a whole lot of access. I'm with CW Prince in that Colton is getting so wrapped up in Parker's submission that he's thinking with the wrong head again. With incidents like slipping up on calling Deputy Green 'pack' and his possessiveness to Green's perving on Parker, Colton should get going on how to mate Parker. I'm starting to think this is all going to accidentally blow up in their faces. ~ Ms. V

I do enjoy the calm before the storm when characters are connecting. Side note: do pools really heat up that fast? I would think that that amount of water would already have to be at temperature to swim. Regardless, I have a feeling things are going to heat up, so I'm savoring these moments. ~chuckle~ ~ Ms. V

Lovely and succinct, but that is the strength in your writing. It never feels like you're pushing the dialog or writing to the drama. It's a simple conversation between friends and yet so relate-able in that they're in the dark on mating, (though that's not going to stop them playing with fire.) It points us to something without doing the work for the reader. We provide the drama ourselves as the clues and foreshadowing sprinkle in at an organic pace. Your structure draws us in yet allows us to fill in engaging our emotions, too. Like Colton's line, "muttering curses between his teeth." Where your curse words might be a jolt, instead I get to use the language I want in my head, genius. The story is so great I know I'm going to have to read it a few times to absorb more of the mechanics and structure to try to learn from your work. ~ Ms. V

I loved Colton sharing with Parker about how much power he has over Colton. ~sigh~ I was a bit confused on pack lore on the whole Colton's mom had her pup and then left him with Carlton, but what do I know? So, Parker always wanted a pet, huh? Boy, is he going to get a lot more than he bargained for on this one. ~ Ms. V

Just yum! These qualities of Colton you shared this chapter are what make him alpha material and set him far and apart from Seth's false pride and aggressive bullying. His leadership in having his eye on the big picture warning Trey and Jed not to get anyone pregnant. ~chuckle~ He's open to inviting Shell along rather than isolating Parker to just Colton's friends and his world. Shell flirting with Trey, could there be a new member of this small pack soon? ~wink~ The scene with Principle Shaw was just the icing on the cake. Colton didn't just get territorial about Parker, Colton reacted to Shaw making Parker feel scared and small. However, he took the time and made the space to assure Parker and communicate with him rather than just intimidate Shaw. These are prime examples of masculinity at it's best. He's tough and protective, yet also comfortable with PDAs and soothing those he cares about are the wonderful character traits I love in Colton. ~ Ms. V

Perfect payoff of teasing between Shell and Parker! With Seth being the Alpha's son and such weak link where Colton is concerned, the climax between them is gonna be big. ~ Ms. V

You have a great ability to give us enough innuendo that we the readers feel active and engaged in filling in the blanks. After a week of editing heavy handed high school papers with clunky writing, your work shines and flows. Seth is the definition of aggression with no alpha tendencies whatsoever. Colton's alpha masculinity includes caring for his friends and mate. They're already a pack within a pack. It's gonna be stellar seeing Shell's reaction to being kept out of the loop. ~ Ms. V

Yay, team Colton! Such a great setup of Seth as trouble on the horizon. Shell just makes me smile. It will be interesting how she interacts with possessive Colton around her friend. ~Ms. V

You truly have a gift for the slow build. I'm already invested in these characters and eager to read more. I might be late to the party, but I'm enjoying every minute of it. ~Ms. V

Had a bit of a chuckle at the DMV today. So, the last week or more I've been working on getting all my legal documents changed back to my maiden name since the divorce is final. This includes debit/credit cards, discount cards, memberships, etc. So, I say I'm changing my name. The usual response is congratulations, which I smile and accept. If they ask me why or when the wedding is I shake my head and say divorce. To which I get a myriad of responses: apology, pity, embarrassment, etc. I smile and reassure them it's fine. So, the woman at the DMV wins in best reaction and response hands down. The same exact pattern, the reason for change, divorce, condolences, I reassure, and without missing a beat, she smiles back and says, "Well. enjoy your newly won freedom." Simple response, nicely done, and it made me feel great! Great end to the workday. Well, fun Friday and goodnight to all! ~ Ms. V

So, I fear my future tales might end in such lament if I do not begin my writing with an end already in mind. Yours has now become the seed of dreams and visions of how I would imagine it to come to fruition. It's not like I've not found myself in a similar circumstance with less to work within my head. Not even mentioning those that have such disappointing ends that I struck out to rewrite them in my head in a way to find resolution and release. Thank you for such a rich world and a foundation of many a daydream to come for me. Blessings ~ Ms. V

And so, the journey of a thousand steps begins with building better communication; this makes my heart smile. ~ Ms. V

I only wish there was more to the chapter as I know there are so few left to read. ~ Ms. V

So heart wrenching and yet such a note of hope in their pledge to help one another. ~ Ms. V

You have captured the autocratic dominion of sovereignty in frighteningly frustrating detail. ~ Ms. V

Wow, this just keeps getting better. Another layer of insight along with a deeper mystery. It's getting late here, yet I must read more. ~ Ms. V

There are some abrupt changes in action and response at the beginning of this chapter that left me a bit confused. All the information is there with some inference. However, I did need to read it a couple of times to really follow. The mystery of striving to communicate on top of dealing with the chaos of addressing issues as he discovers them is authentic but a tough read. I find myself captivated by the sexual tension, adversity of circumstance, language struggles, and birth. Eagerly I read onward. ~ Ms. V