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Chapter 31 - Mixed Doubles
Ms. V commented on Cole Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 31 - Mixed Doubles
I'm reading this and am truly enjoying! Quick question: Wasn't Brandon allergic? (So Chuck couldn't have a pet at his sister's house). Would they be able to host the kids at their place with the two cats in the house? Maybe I'm overthinking this. -
I tried that but no change when I change stories or even different author's stories.
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I'm having an issue with your font size bar ticker when I'm accessing stories on my new phone. It will only make text bigger, even when I select the button for shrinking text. I had hit the size up button accidentally, and when I tried to downsize it again, it only got bigger. It only affects the text in the chapter, not the header or comments section. In messing with it, the font is so big I cannot read the text at all any more. (Enlarged past viewing?) The other buttons seem to be working fine. However, the enlarge button is constantly highlighted, even when I am pressing the shrink button. Thanks for your help
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You have achieved total success in getting your readers empathizing with Keller's torture and thereby our own. ~chuckle~ Also, well done in showing us that there is real trust growing quickly between Tobyn and Keller. Respect keeps growing between our pair, too. So, I've been trying to suss out the disconnect that causes them to hold back. I think it might be a lack of faith? From both, but maybe more on Tobyn's side that blends with his hurting heart for his pack and the loss of those he loved and respected? The loss of Fendral and all that followed just added to the fears and burden of a young Tobyn's conviction that he had to find a way to change the tide. Keller is more hopeful in nature, and I think he's trying to hold onto a thin faith that Tobyn might come around. Though God knows he doesn't have an experience or a reason to have much faith in things turning out well for him from his history. Then there's your line, "There would be no forcing a choice on a man like Tobyn." I'm not so sure Elinor and the road trip will be the catalyst that will create change in Tobyn any more. She knows and loves her son, and she would know this fact about 'not forcing choices on Tobyn' even better than Keller or Tilly. Hopefully, I'm wrong. So, like Keller, I will keep my eyes open for more information, try not to fear the worst, but hold onto a thin hope until I read about the road trip with mom. You as the author is the only thing I have faith in, at the moment. ~ Ms. V
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So, @Albert1434 , in the intrest of distraction on prep day. I think I've heard a similar quote to yours at the bottom of your comments. "The mind is the Best Theater-Albert1434" or least a similar sentiment. It was from J.R.R. Tolken, while still living. He didn't want his works made into movies because, "you'll never surpass the human imagination" or something like that. A quote from 1965 stated: 'He feels strongly that the Ring should not be filmed: “You can’t cramp narrative into dramatic form. It would be easier to film The Odyssey. Much less happens in it. Only a few storms.”' Which lead me to your profile picture, Odyssey or Gandalf? ~ Ms. V
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Chapter 15 Nothing's Written In Stone
Ms. V commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 15 Nothing's Written In Stone
Wow, a much needed break in the build of tension, thank you. The kids were great, and the guys were great with them, lots of warm fuzzies. So, the news of the infant mortality doesn't give me much hope for Tobyn's, 'have more babies' solution, and Keller isn't ready to share his ideas yet. Yet, it was like I lost 10 lbs of dead weight when Keller finally agreed to take in one day at a time, nothing written in stone. I always keep my hope up in communication, not isolation. Then, bam, you bring the tension right back up because the girls are trying to communicate something to the boys, but Tobyn's not filling Keller in due to the cliffhanger. I think Adelin's attempt to encourage without coming right out with it only made Keller imagine the worst even more, and he's pretty good at that already. Crap, yeah, when my stress is high I miss things people say to me, too. I'm right there with Keller, we seem so alike, and this feels all too real. I got a bad feeling about this climax you're building us toward. ~ Ms. V -
I ran over to find it and it's been unpublished for editing, I guess. I think that means the universe is telling me to finish my reread of Morningstar first. ~chuckle~ I won't forget it though, and hope it will pop up soon. ~ Ms. V
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I grew up on some of the greats and still enjoy them when I can find a good author with original ideas. So, you being that kind of author, I'm excited to read your western. ~ Ms. V P.S. If anyone has westerns to recommend, I'm open to suggestions.
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Keller is (we are) getting so much new information in each new interaction. Thier history that's becoming hearsay because of the loss of keepers. Keller's unbiased view and fresh thinking is a salvation in itself. An innocent question about werewolf lore leading to silver collars stopping shifts, I love and am horrified by such a heritage. It seems so original and yet probable to this world and the story's reality. Seeing so many wolves with aches and pains that even we can conclude it's not a disease, and we still have seen to the kids yet. Wow, and I thought Keller was playing things close to the chest. Poor Tobyn is going to explode trying to suppress so much. He's not being obtuse, he's in agony, too long in pain, and seeing only the negative. It was one thing to plan a life with Tilly before meeting Keller, but now his choice it affecting her future as well. If he chooses her but doesn't communicate clearly, he might not be the man of character he thinks he is anymore. Tobyn's reasons for all this may be mature in nature, but he's so young; which his inner dialog just highlighted so well. He doesn't realize the years that can stretch out, the awareness of how little control we really have in life, and just how rare having these feelings when they are reciprocated in such synchronicity with Keller. Although, I can feel about 16 years old in my head no matter how old my body and mind when I first start falling in love with someone, so there's that. I'm off to the next chapter. ~ Ms. V
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You are forgiven, especially since it's going to be next on my list now. ~chuckle~ Ms. V
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@Headstall "...on what I consider to be my best work to date (although I do love my little cowboy story) ." Oh really, don't be like that man! What cowboy story? Do you mean "CoTT"? ~ Ms. V
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I'm not sure how you're doing it, but it's working. I'm used to a day, two, or a couple in one chapter, yet here we are in chapter 13 with only two full days and some change having elapsed. The pace of information is smooth, yet creates anxiousness and false starts at the end of each chapter, which you use to great effect. The issues are weighing on our characters and yet, as you use supporting characters, and further insight between our guys, the complexity of these issues gains weight. The tension and stress are mounting, and now another threat in hunters. You must have been exhausted after days writing and editing with this intensity of emotion in this material, in addition to your everyday life. Fate or chaos theory is making itself felt and I think Keller is playing things 'close to the chest' and not sharing much. You're letting us know that, but not what it is yet which just makes me try to extrapolate and push on to the next chapter quickly. I'm not sure I could have taken the week between chapter releases back when you wrote this without it causing a nervous tick or something worse. ~chuckle~ But here's the thing for me, there is so much hope that keeps carrying us along, too. Just enough of the boys' mutual admiration society, the knowing smiles from Miss Sybil, even the 'road trip with mom' coming up. The complexities, layers, and yes, dialog are phenomenal and very addictive. The work you've put into your craft is showing. ~Ms. V
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Such a sweet-fest this morning between sweet and savory people. I think fate is conspiring against me as I started rectifying my bad winter eating habits to my cleaner spring dietary clean up for my health just yesterday. ~ Ms. V
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Yep, of the two he met before Tobyn, Fendral and now the mechanic, which we didn't even know that much about him until now, you sneaky thing. Between how he's described these two, it's no wonder he thought wolves were loners, even though real wolves aren't. I obviously misunderstood both of your teasings. Sometimes, I wonder if I'm somewhere on the autistic spectrum when I miss social cues and emotions is writing. This wonderful story and the great comments are giving me a run for the money. LOL ~ Ms. V
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So, onto the review: Ah, when fate seems to be conspiring against you 'getting out of Dodge,' huh, Keller? I have a feeling that the chaos theory is going to play a big part in our boy's best-laid plans, too many pieces and people in play now. Which doesn't mean it will go well, but it won't go according to the black and white stark reality they are choosing. Keller has others counting on him already, even if groups and expectations make him nervous. He will not be able to stop worrying that he needs to follow up with Adelin about being on her feet too soon. He already knows how hard it will be to convince Elinor, the 'real mom' that readily accepted him, choosing to avoid the conversation for now. He might be determined to leave, but he's surrounded, and the longer he stays, these relationships will grow. So often, it's the big-hearted smart ones who, when finding out more in order to help, find themselves tangled up and loved by others whether they like it or not. It might not fix anything, and it may hurt worse because both Keller and Tobyn are trying to do the hard thing for the greater good. However, fate and more information to this mystery of the malaise could change the big picture. You've got us. I mean, readers trying to use our real-world solutions to make this fictional world of lycans and earth mates better. The climax is gonna make me cry, I just know it, good or bad. Gary, you have the slow burn and layers building at a perfect pace. This is the book that makes it almost impossible to put down because the stakes are high and we just gotta know what happens next, a disaster or a reprieve. I'm off to find out more. ~ Ms. V
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Oh, you've lost the plot or you're teasing... it was Fendral, silly. Not you, too? I will love the next book, I'm sure, do to your skills, but you shouldn't tease your Robin with what he forgot. ~chuckle
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Unexpected difficulty in re-reading Morningstar: trying to keep my head space in the chapter that I'm in when writing comments. LOL I'd cry buckets if I ruined a first read for anyone else. Ugh! Some chapters make it really hard to button my lips. ~ Ms. V
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Chapter 11 Dangerous Territory
Ms. V commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 11 Dangerous Territory
This was such an amazing piece of writing steeped in details and brewing emotions. The length was perfect for the getting to witness Keller in a healing not just hear it explained. It became so realistic as you took us step by step while layering in the other characters and their reactions. I can only imagine the exhaustion you felt after writing, but then also going through the editing process as well. My heart breaks for Keller for I fear he will never leave because of his own pain and heartbreak, but he will should he decide his staying would hurt another. It is a classic "forgotten child" syndrome I have witnessed in so many foster kids. He will continue to dig into the malaise and heal others to push back his pain. Yet, as long as he has a possibility to know love without causing harm, he will be drawn to the flame no matter how it hurts him. 😭 My heart aches for both him and Tobyn. ~ Ms. V -
Thanks for the warm welcome to crazy town. ~wink~ Should I not admit I'll fit right in, dugh? Well, I've been trying to follow along even if I haven't been talking much yet. I work full time during the day, so I might miss things or respond late. ~ Ms. V
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Chapter 10 Between a Rock and a Hard Place
Ms. V commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 10 Between a Rock and a Hard Place
Oh, these boys are not stupid, their young. Everything is perceived as very black and white without maturity. They are not ignorant of the other's feelings. Actually they seem to have an emotional feedback loop going, where each is tuned into the other. The trouble comes in when feeling someone else's emotion but not communicating the why or the real trigger behind it. That way lies dragons and certain misfortune. In some ways, they are more mature for their age, in their sense of honor, responsibility, and self sacrifice. It's just without the foundation of wisdom that only age brings. I don't think Tobyn will ever see the forest for the trees with Keller without help. His sense of duty is bone-deep, and he has a hard time believing in hope or in good things with the burdens of guilt he has lain on himself. Keller has the hope and faith in good things happening that Tobyn lacks, yet his own history doesn't include someone picking him, his welfare, or loving him for himself, ever. He'll stay to heal and to learn more, even as his heart breaks. My hope lies in the fact they are not alone, they are in the center of a community of relationships. The pack loves Tobyn, and they won't be able to resist caring about Keller, too. (If they know what's good for them. "To the moon!" if they hurt my Keller.) It's gonna get bumpy, but it's so worth the ride with great writing like this. Time for another layer of new insights for our pair, onto the healing. ~ Ms. V -
How wonderful! That should be a conversation starter at most outings, or should I say gatherings. ~chuckle ~ Ms. V
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Thank you so much. I'm sure I'll get the hang of this as I get to know writers here. ~ Ms. V
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Oh, are these guidelines something I need to familiarize myself with? Where might I find them? I'm pretty new here. ~chuckle ~ Ms. V
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Thank you @Page Scrawler and @Bucket1 for welcoming me. Though the name of this was for 'CoTT,' I had a burning question about Greg's "Morningstar." Hope you don't mind. ~ Ms. V
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Chapter 9 For Better or Worse
Ms. V commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 9 For Better or Worse
Boy, when Keller decides to bite his tongue on something he's still working out, he's amazing. Elinor threw him for a loop, but he has yet to figure out in how many positive ways. Never underestimate a mother's ability to dispense TLC as well as scary Mom lectures as needed, it goes along with her innate leadership qualities. It's a good thing he's a healer in more ways than one. I think grabbing Tobyn to hug and talk out the misplaced guilt is just another way Keller wants to instinctively make the situation better. (Heal it for Tobyn.) If Tilly is as close to her sister as Tobyn professes, I think Keller's ability to help Adelin will sway Tilly's opinion more, either positive or negative, depending on how the healing transpires. Regardless, Keller's POV is amazingly written balancing doubt and confidence in addition to a desire to be connected while struggling with the thought of meeting so many new people and what they'll think of him. Onward I go. ~ Ms. V
