Jeff Burton

I'm willing to bet you heard the radio squelches and maybe a little bit of static and callout tones in the transcript log section just like I did then. I don't ride anymore due to a couple of close calls myself.

I'm waiting to see if anyone noticed the little detail I slid into this chapter that's so small you probably missed it, if you've read the other stories anyway.

Hahahahahaha no it wasn't them.

All I can say is stick with it till the end. I'm already on Chapter 11.

I was miserable. The anger I felt that day in the cafeteria had left me the moment Jessica had hit me with what I had done. In the days that followed, that anger was replaced by a new sadness I didn't know I had in me to feel. I thought what I had felt when my mom died was bad, but I found out quickly this new feeling was just so much worse. It felt so easy to just let it eat me alive. I did deserve it after all, didn't I? Shouldn't one be judged and punished for their sins? What about

Thank you I appreciate it!

Oh my God, I’m on the list twice. I had no friggen idea. I’m gonna take a minute and try not to cry.

Sigh, I love these two. ”We hold these truths to be self evident they said, that all men are created equal. Strange as it may seem, that was the first time in history anyone had bothered to write that down.” — Josiah Bartlett Season 1 Episode 22 “The West Wing.”

All I can say about my stories is someones gonna die at some point. It's inevitable lol.

This is now the comment I love the most.

Now I'm kinda worried about chapter 9 after letting @Lee Wilson read the advance copy.

I mean if you thought you were mad at chapter 8....

Chapter's 9 and 10 have already been written. I'll start posting once Chapter 11 is finished.

Yeah, it doesn't start to hit until later chapters and so far it's only mentions may end that way dunno yet. I can't figure out whose story gets the juice.

The following is something I received via email because this story is cross posted on nifty.org as well. I used the quote format to make it easier to read. I felt I had to share it, because it's in line with what you guys are saying. You guys aren't wrong in what your thinking at all because now the nifty guys are chiming in with the same stuff.

Kind of makes you just wanna shake Nathan like a british nanny doesn't it?

^ See this guy gets it. At the end of this comment I was laughing because it's so true. I was wondering if someone would take a step back and think about Corey like you did @John Henry because that is absolutely correct. Corey's motivation for why he was where he was will come out later, but Nathan's blatant outburst was uncontrolled even by me. I talked before that I have a general flow of where thing are going, and I do know how this ends so I'm just filling in the blanks to get there, but sometimes when I'm doing dialogue the conversations aren't planned, they just happen live in my head as I'm doing it. I can think "oh this character needs to talk to this character" but sometimes the content and feel of that interaction even I don't know until I'm keyed in and typing. I'm just weird that way I guess. As for the next chapter I plan to listen to "Song to Say Goodbye" by Placebo. Good luck with that one folks!

I'm not that sadistic. Hm or am I. But yes you are correct, this is all spiraling which could cause disaster.

Same.

I appreciate that, fare warning though my work makes people cry lol, this story isn’t as bad as the others are, but it still has its moments. Youve got some good stuff coming though. I will apologize in advance tho and you’ll understand when ya get there!

I can always dial it up. 😂

I told you I tried to keep the train wreck out of this station, and failed. I actually blame the song I was listening to more than anything. As for Corey, well I don't want to give that away yet, but Nathan did set him off, maybe not in the way you think think. God I would love to comment on some of this other stuff but it would give too much away. My poor poor boys, this story wasn't supposed to be as rough. All I can say is, "oops."

Yeah dad kind of needs to step up a little bit and you know be a dad lmao. But I'm kinda curious as to how bad this can get before stuff actually does fly off the rails.

Oh we got a ways to go before the end, lets hope even the good doctor and put humpty back together again after we get there though.

Funny story, I somehow ended up listening to that song on repeat (BECAUSE SOMEONE MADE ME THINK OF IT) somewhere in the middle of this chapter, and kept typing till I reached the end. I think the lyrics (and the chapter title) ended up hitting better on this one than the previous, especially at the end. Fatal is my favorite flaw, it's a lesson I can't seem to learn no matter how hard I try. Maybe these two can, and I'll learn something from the journey.