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I think Franz feels the same way 😄
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"You Dimalis claim that the slave trade is a criminal activity. We Southerners call it a force that holds the states together. Who else would harvest the crops from our sunny fields? Who would lay the cobblestones in place, clean the fish catches and toil in the mine tunnels? Or entertain the aristocrats in the brothels? We free citizens? Do not even imagine such a thing. Saadda, Qoi-Tenqee and Mtuul would fall without slaves. You, in turn, would be deprived of our trade goods: dates,
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@drsawzall @VBlew @akascrubber Thank you all so much for your feedback. I really appreciate it. I'm certainly not going to overdo the violence. If anything good comes out of this brutality, at least it has brought the boys closer together. Even in the midst of misery, there is often hope: for example, the fact that Zdain realised something revolutionary about himself at the end of the chapter. More will be revealed in due course about who Fake Marta is. Let's also hope that the boys figure out how to escape. You gave some good suggestions on how that might happen. We'll see what happens😉 In the next chapter, however, there are two other narrators: Jolanda and Franz.
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@Seraph28 Thanks for your feedback. This story is indeed quite violent at times and takes on even darker tones as it progresses. I don't like it when the (good) characters suffer, but sometimes the plot demands it. Usually, though, there is hope for something better😌
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Zdain When Josel finally woke up, Zdain was a nervous wreck. Several rats had slipped through the bars and into the cage, and the bravest had even climbed over their feet. He had to fight to keep from screaming. Josel lifted his head from Zdain's shoulder and straightened his back. They quickly pulled away from each other, pretending as if by mutual agreement that they had never been in each other's arms. "Oh, you're awake?" Zdain asked, rubbing his arm, numb from leaning on Jose
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Key people and glossary (The Shadowy Path)
Lupus commented on Lupus's story chapter in Key people and glossary (The Shadowy Path)
Thank you. I thought such a glossary might be useful, as there are so many terms and characters in fantasy stories like this. -
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Here I have compiled background information about the world of my book series 'The Legend of the Red Star', including characters and a glossary. Before diving into this material, you should first read the opening book, 'The Shadowy Path'.
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Key people and glossary (The Shadowy Path)
Lupus posted new chapter in The World of the Legend of the Red Star
Key People Andiol Empire In the town of Paidos: Josel Sandkan ("Goldy", "Josi"): 16-year-old boy from Paidos Andreuz Sandkan: Josel's father, an author Curtus Jerovann: old man, Josel's father's assistant Franz Landez: Josel's friend, 17 years old, son of a grocer Bartos Rigailon ("Bars"): Josel's friend, 16 years, son of a senior official Darren Temjanion: Josel's friend, 16 years Jolanda: a young woman in Paidos Dareis Monteilon: the imperial governor -
Thank you all for your comments 😊 There are more surprising twists and turns to come in the story - for the boys and for the readers. In the next chapter, we return to Marta's basement to see how Josel and Zdain are doing.
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@Al Norris Nice to know someone has found the map 👍In the first version, I had translated the name of the town as 'Five Rocks', but then changed it to 'Five Hills' because I liked it better🙂 So it is the same place. If you have saved the older version, here is a link to the new version, which I updated in the gallery a while ago. There are also a couple of other minor corrections compared to the earlier version.
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Bartos "Get up!" the lipless monster ordered, but Bartos' jelly-like legs refused to obey. "Get up, Bartos Rigailon," the man demanded more softly, but just as forcefully. Bartos felt his forehead stung, as if something cold had slapped him hard across the face. He was in pain and his legs could barely support him, but he managed to push himself up off the floor. The scarface had made it clear that he could not disobey him. "Good," the stranger said after seeing Bartos do his wi
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@akascrubber @drsawzall @Al Norris Thank you all for your insightful comments! The boys really should have kept their voices down. However, we have to remember that they are only 16 years old and have no experience of such situations. Perhaps the current situation will finally be shocking enough for them to realize that they need to stop fighting amongst themselves - we shall see. What Marta wants will become clear in time. Unfortunately, I cannot yet reveal more🤐 In the next chapter, however, we'll see how Bartos and Darren try to deal with an intruder in the house.
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@Myr Thank you for your advice. These tips will help me a lot😊
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I am about to publish a list of characters and a glossary of terms related to the world of my fantasy story. I was wondering how it would be most convenient to do that. Is the best way to publish a new story that would only have this one chapter? I'm thinking of using the Fantasy World Building genre, as I assume it's for this sort of thing? However, if I add this new story to the series, I guess it would become the 2nd book in the series. I don't want that, so should I either not include it in the series or create a "world"? Or not include this new "story" in anything? Then, of course, one possibility would be to add this glossary as a chapter to a story in progress (without using World Building genre).
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Zdain Ipalos, Andiol Empire The bathroom door slammed shut. Josel was...completely impossible. Sometimes the blond-haired one was as if he had swallowed a burdock - mean and ill-tempered. Occasionally - though quite rarely - the caring and friendly side of Josel would bubble up to the surface. Then there was this third Josel Sandkan, who tossed verbal barbs like sharp stone chips, and was a very funny young man in his own mind. The first Josel Zdain hated, the second he admitted he l
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@Seraph28 Thank you for your comment! This book is named The Shadow Path for a reason - danger lurks around every corner. We'll see what happens. More to come next week 🙂
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@akascrubber @drsawzall Thank you for your comments. We will know a little more about the fate of the boys after the next chapter, as Zdain takes over the role of narrator.
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"The Bewitched Land - how can I describe it? Even after all these years, just the thought of it still gives me the creeps. Imagine yourself running into a dark labyrinth where the air is so thick you feel like you're suffocating. Imagine your legs sticky with fatigue, vomit in your throat and the back of your head pounding with the knowledge that they'll be here soon. That you won't have time to escape. The dreaders are faster, stronger and more cunning than you. Soon they will catch you, t
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You are right, now is not the time for old rivalries. If Josel were travelling with one of his friends, there would be no problem. But with Zdain, for some reason, it's hard for him to find common ground.
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Good points too! Then you are of a different opinion to @Al Norris, who thinks it would be better to stay in the house and trust Marta. Time will indeed tell which of you is right, or if neither of you is right 😄 Josel and Zdain have a complicated relationship, but at least they haven't fought each other for a while. So maybe things are better now🤔
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Thanks☺️Good points from you again. The boys should realise that they are in a different situation now, there is no home and life there anymore, so they could start with a clean slate with each other. We have to wait a while to find out what Josel and Zdain's situation is, as there are two other narrators in the next chapter.🙂
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Josel The walk to Marta Donthav's house followed the beggar's route, although the atmosphere was anything but cheerful. Josel was in a bad mood because of the goblin, on top of everything else. Zdain's mood, on the other hand, was largely Josel's fault. So there was nothing to talk about and they sulked in silence. What a sensitive clown he is, Josel liked to think of Zdain striding ahead, even though he knew he had caused the latest row. He could not apologise - he just could not - so
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A slight delay. I think the next chapter will take a few more days to finish. I'm on summer holiday now, so there's a bit of holiday rush 🏄♂️🌤️
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@drsawzall Josel still has a lot of growing up to do. Maybe he'll mature when he has to deal with difficult situations. @Al Norris It's really about both. Technically, the Empire has made a lot of progress, but at the same time there has been moral decay. The latter is due to a number of factors, including the war and the fact that the regime has fallen into a kind of paralysis. This discontent fuels the Shadow Cross and other rebel forces. The following books in the series take a deeper look at the situation in Andiol.
